Composition guidance: Grasp the characteristics when writing about people

Teaching objectives

1. Through this exercise guidance, teach students the method of "grasping characteristics to describe characters".

2. Understand the special expressive effect of detailed description in shaping characters.

3. Cultivate students to develop the habit of observation, discovery, and accumulation, and encourage students to express the observed information creatively.

Teaching focus: Teach students the method of "grasping characteristics to describe characters".

Teaching difficulties: Creative expression, reflecting character personality through detailed description.

2 teaching hours

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Teaching process

1. Introduction of new courses

There is no such thing in the world Two leaves are exactly the same, and no two people are exactly the same. However, what is reflected in the compositions of the students is that they are almost "the same" and "all speak with the same voice." This kind of composition is devoid of any new ideas, causes visual fatigue, and is difficult to leave a deep impression on readers.

So, how do we make the characters we write stand up and move around? Today, we will solve this problem and help everyone get rid of the misunderstandings of "popular", "conceptual" and "facialized" character descriptions.

2. Fragment Appreciation

First of all, please enjoy the following wonderful clips, and while reading, think about why these images have not only not been submerged by the endless river of history, but have become more and more popular. Clear and shining like a pearl?

3. Guidance

After reading, it is not difficult to find that the author has profound writing skills and has captured the characteristics of the characters, whether from appearance, language, or actions, Or combine several aspects to describe the characters in detail, and be good at stopping the description strokes at a certain point to elaborate. This is the detailed description, so it creates so many vivid and vivid images.

Easier said than done. What exactly should we do to dig out our own beautiful pearl? Don't worry, follow the teacher and walk into the "Guidance Maze"! As long as we listen carefully, we will definitely be able to find many big shiny pearls together!

About appearance description:

Before writing, you should observe carefully and be good at discovering the differences between the person being described and them. First, screen and select the most distinctive features, and then zoom in to enlarge this detail. It is not a bad idea to use a little exaggeration.

Don’t cover everything and talk in general terms from head to toe. Instead, you should be selective and focused.

Reminder: Never ignore the description of the eyes.

Eyes are the windows to the soul and play an important role in expressing a character’s personality. People with different ages, different experiences, and different psychology have different eyes, either clear and bright, or weathered, or full of expectations, or full of despair...

Language description:

As the saying goes: "Words are the voice of the heart." Because the characters' age, gender, personality, experience, occupation, education level, ideological awareness, etc. are different, the language style must also be different. Regardless of the subject of the writing, I just took it for granted and used the same language to describe the little brother to describe the grandfather. Use language to describe old ladies to describe little girls, and use language to describe intellectuals to describe working people. This is not because the characters you describe speak for themselves, but rather for them to speak the words you designed. This must be avoided.

Note: When describing language, you should clearly state what the characters said? How did you say that?

Action description:

Action description should be:

1. Accurate and true.

Write the characters as they are, seek truth from facts, and truly reflect the reality of life. In the use of verbs, you need to figure out and deliberate, and choose the most appropriate words that best reflect the character's personality.

2. When describing continuous actions, you must first think of the order of the actions. In addition to writing what was done, you also need to write how it was done and under what background it was done?

Psychological description:

Psychological description is more difficult for us.

It is easy to write about one's own psychology, but difficult to write about other people's psychology. Usually we use this form:

Write directly: "He thought" or "He said to himself" "He told himself silently" "He swore in his heart"...

Indirect writing: Reveal the character's psychological state through the description of language, movements, and expressions, and reflect the subtle emotions hidden in the character's heart.

5. Comparison

Below are the exercises of several students collected by the teacher. They all have some problems. I hope students can learn from them. , don’t make the same mistake again.

Diagnosis: Vocabulary poverty. (Bottom type) Treatment: Accumulate more vocabulary and enrich your language warehouse.

Diagnosis: Blind pursuit of gorgeous words often leads to failure to convey the intended meaning. (Patchwork type) Treatment: In addition to distinguishing and choosing words according to the characteristics of the objects, we must also remember the words of Mr. Lu Xun: "If you have true meaning, don't sugarcoat it, be less pretentious, and don't show off."

Diagnosis: When describing a portrait of a child, "red as an apple" is used to describe the face, and "dimples" are used to indicate the features, which often leads to the joke that "a thousand people look alike". (Facial makeup) treatment: You should observe carefully in life, grasp the characteristics of the character, and portray the different personality of "this character".

Diagnosis: Too simple and lacking in vivid description. (Dry style) Treatment: You can choose words with specific meanings and full of imagery, or use some rhetorical techniques appropriately to make them concrete, vivid, and vivid.

Diagnosis: I am afraid that I will miss something and not write it down, so I will write it from beginning to end. (Listing type) Treatment: The purpose of writing about appearance is to highlight the character's ideological and personality, rather than writing about appearance for the sake of writing about appearance, so it should be selectively depicted according to needs.

6. Writing Practice

Observe a person in your life, capture the characteristics and describe them, and complete a composition of about 800 words focusing on describing the person. You can choose your own title.

7. Examples

Comments

In terms of material selection, this article mainly writes about four things: "cutting corners" in physical education classes, and being teased in self-study classes , he didn’t take it seriously when he failed the exam, and was scolded by the teacher and laughed at himself by saying, “Man, why bother caring about those misfortunes?” It seems to come easily and casually, but every thing highlights the unique personality of "Fat Man", and there is no idle stroke.

The language is humorous and interesting. In the relaxed and lively atmosphere, readers see the image of a "fat man" who "laughs and laughs all day long", is good at self-deprecation and is also clever. The beginning of the article is novel and unique, a bit like "shaking the baggage" in cross talk, which makes people laugh after reading it.

(Comment on teacher Yan Weiwei)

Comment

The Master Kong in the article is indeed unique: in the title "Master Kong", we feel the closeness between the students and the teacher In the guidance of reading skills, we experienced the exquisite teaching art of "Master Kong"; in the pictures in the text explanations, we admired "Master Kong"'s unique handling of teaching materials; we took excerpt notes, read competitions, and appreciated the richness of the forests in our hometown. In the autumn of this year, we have to admire the continuous innovation of "Master Kong"... Reading "Master Kong" like this, isn't it like savoring a feast that is full of color, flavor and flavor?

(Comments on teacher Yan Weiwei)