A 400-word composition for the fourth grade of primary school: a trip to Haining

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This composition is about 400 words in the fourth grade of primary school. The title is a trip to Haining. Everyone is welcome to contribute. This afternoon (the first day of the lunar calendar), my brother came to see me in Haining, my sister and my mother. We talked and laughed all the way. The snow on the roadside is white, as if it had entered a fairyland. After a while, we came to Haining Xishan Park. There is a big mountain in Xishan Park, which can be compared with Tiandu Peak. Mom said to climb the mountain!

My brother and sister and I quickly climbed to the top of the mountain. When we were halfway up, suddenly a big piece of snow spilled from the tree and landed on my sister's head, which made us laugh. Climbing up the mountain, Haining has a panoramic view of the whole city, with many tall buildings. Cars coming and going on the road are like beetles ... it's getting late and we're going down the mountain. Teacher's comment: First of all, the author introduced the time, place and characters of the story, which laid a good foundation for the next plot development. Then the author introduces the process of playing with everyone in Haining Xishan Park. However, the author did not introduce it in detail, did not show the scenic features of Xishan Park, and the content of the article was not sufficient. It is suggested that the author introduce the scenery of Xishan Park in detail and describe the process of playing in detail. The word "Germany" in "Make us laugh" was changed to "Germany". The word "gold" in "The whole city of Haining has received its eyes" was changed to "gold". (Master China: Teacher Wang) 2010-3-1414: 45: 00