2009 primary school graduation composition, sixth grade...

Beijing

1. A person I admire

2. My good friend

3. I admire him (her)

4. Role model

5. Teachers care about us

6. I can't forget it

Tips: Complete the title first, and then write a narrative based on the title.

7. ①I did this thing right

②I did this thing wrong

Tip: In life, you do things right and things you do wrong. Please choose the thing that impressed you most and write it down. You should write down the key parts in detail and express your true feelings.

8. Please read the following short passage, and then write a continuation essay with the title "I have made progress".

The Chinese test paper was distributed. When I got the paper, I saw a score of 90! I read the scores on the paper several times, and I felt indescribable joy.

When I got home, I waved the paper in front of my mother and said proudly: "Mom, look!" My mother took the paper, looked at it and said, "Okay, there is progress!" I looked at it Mom's happy expression became even more proud, and her heart was as sweet as honey.

However, my mother's face turned "sunny to cloudy" after a while. I don't understand: Why is my mother a little unhappy? "Have you thought carefully about the reason for the mistake?" Mom said, pointing to the place where points were deducted on the paper. I glanced at it and said nonchalantly: "I just wrote 'index finger' as 'ten fingers'." "How easy it is to hear you say it! If you write it like this, when the patient cuts off the index finger during the operation, he will cut off ten fingers. !" I couldn't help being surprised. My mother then said sternly: "You are so careless. If everyone is like you, what consequences will it have on your work?"

After listening to my mother's words, I no longer had the intention to appreciate the things on the paper. I got the score and couldn’t help but fall into deep thought...

Shanghai

1. ①I love my hometown (or family)

②Happy XX

2. ①Happy event

②Lessons

3. ①After school

②Remember a morning meeting class (or: record a lunch meeting class)

4. I’m so XX

5. XX praised me

6. XX, I miss you

7. We also have? Chang? Chang? Chang here

8. He (she) is really

9. My favorite

10. Material: One Sunday, classmate Cao Gang bought an afternoon movie ticket in the morning. In the afternoon, the sky suddenly filled with dark clouds, thunder and lightning, and a thunderstorm was about to come. He looked out the window anxiously, and saw his elderly neighbor, Mrs. Li, struggling to collect the many coal cakes that were being dried...

Tip: Based on the above materials, reasonably imagine the cause of the incident, The process and results; what difficulties will you encounter when helping Mrs. Li collect coal cakes? How did you overcome these difficulties? What good methods have you thought of to move the coal cakes into the house as soon as possible? You can also write in the first person "I".

Tianjin City

1. I like to play the most

2. Late

3. Thank you for your help

4. I hope

Example 1

I help my mother shell peas

Today, someone came to my house as a guest. Mom is very busy in the kitchen, so as a daughter, of course I have to help her.

"Mom, let me help you." As I said that, I walked into the kitchen. "Okay, you can choose the vegetables." My mother handed me a basin and asked, "Can you do it?" I looked and saw "beans" inside, "Easy! No problem!" I patted my chest and said to Mom promised, took the basin and started peeling it. As I peeled them, I thought: Why are the beans my mother bought today so small? Still chubby and quite fat. Hey, whatever, just peel it off. Yes, stretch the tendons on both sides first.

After a while, I finished it neatly. "Mom, here you go." I handed the basin over. When my mother saw it, she laughed loudly: "Silly boy, you mistake peas for beans!" After hearing this, I was really confused as a monk: "This, isn't this just beans?" "This is called a pea. They are small and round. When peeling, you need to separate the pods from the beans. The pods are edible, so don’t throw them away. “Oh, that’s it. I'll break open the pod, yo! The green beans inside are round and bulging, like fat dolls packed into the pods. I put the pods on the plate and the beans in the bowl. I thought: It’s finally time to do it! When I handed the plate and bowl to my mother, unexpectedly, my mother shook her head and said with a half-smile: "It's my fault, I didn't explain clearly." "What's wrong?" "There is a film in the pod, you can't eat it. "It needs to be peeled off." I looked carefully and found that there was indeed a film thinner than a cicada's wings. I couldn't help but feel troubled, how could I peel it off if it was so thin? Mom seemed to see what I was thinking. I picked up one and peeled it off, very slowly, and I quickly looked at it intently. Mom pinches one end of the pod with her index finger and thumb, folds it gently, then presses the film with her thumb and sticks her index finger on the film, slowly peels it downwards, and finally pulls it with just the right amount of force, and the film becomes obedient. The ground "ran" down. I followed my mother's example, cut off the pod, and pulled it down. Unfortunately, due to excessive force, the membrane was broken in the middle. I took another one, and this time the force was very gentle, and it didn't pull off several times. My mother stopped what she was doing and said patiently: "Use even force and don't be anxious." I tried a few more times and finally succeeded. I smiled, my mother smiled, and the pod seemed to grin at me!

I was peeling pea pods and thinking: Many things look simple but are difficult to do, and they require repeated practice to succeed. (Tianjin Song Yalin)

Marking comments

Remembering true things and expressing true feelings means using facts to speak when writing, and writing clearly what you have seen, heard, and personally experienced. Come out and express your true feelings.

Students, have you noticed that the article "I Help Mom Peel Peas" is valuable because of the word "true". The little author is a very well-behaved little girl. She took the initiative to help her mother with housework, but mistook the peas for beans, which made a little joke. Finally, with the help of her mother, she learned to peel peas. Reading this composition makes people laugh and feel immersed in it. Why do you feel this way? Because something like this may have happened around us, and it is a real thing that the young author has personally experienced, so when she was composing, she was able to write the ins and outs of the matter in a concrete and vivid way.

Precisely because the author chose materials that she has personally experienced, the description of the characters’ language, psychology, and actions in the article is delicate and specific. Let’s look at the description of peas first: “I opened the pod, yo! The green peas inside were round and bulging, like fat babies packed into the pod.” An accurate and vivid description, even for young readers who don’t know peas. Meet Peas too! If the young author had never done these housework, he would not have written such vivid words and sentences based on his imagination.

The description of psychological activities in the article is also very layered and true, expressing natural and simple emotions. At first, "I was peeling and thinking: Why are the beans my mother bought today so small... Oh, what the hell..." After getting to know peas, I peeled the beans out of the pod, and thought to myself: "This is the time. Okay!" Unexpectedly, she made a mistake again. She "got into trouble" and finally learned to peel peas with the help of her mother, and summed up the experience: "Many things look simple but are difficult to do, and they require repeated practice. Success." What a natural and real realization! Following the little author's heartfelt words, we seem to see a little girl who is gradually becoming more sensible, smiling as sweetly as a grinning pea pod! (Pan Hong)

Example 2

Unusual exams

I have been "tested" for a long time since I was a child, and exams are a common occurrence for me. , exams of all sizes have always been with me as I grew up, and there was one exam that I will never forget -

That day, the Chinese language test once in each unit was about to "invade" the whole class.

When I woke up in the morning, I felt a sharp pain in my stomach for some reason, so I secretly rejoiced: Haha! No need to take an exam! I can finally escape. Hey, if your stomach hurts a little, just hurt a little!

Just when I was secretly chuckling and about to call my head teacher to ask for leave, my mother suddenly asked: "You seem to have a Chinese test today, right? I have to call your Chinese teacher and ask my classmates to help." Take the paper back and do it.”

“What?” I was so shocked, “Mom, how can I take the exam at home?”

Mom couldn’t help but mention it. Phone...

When the hour hand pointed to "7", the whole family was in their places - my father was "rushed" to another room, my mother decisively pressed the stopwatch, and I spread out the examination paper and began to answer the questions.

Questions one, two, and three went very smoothly. I suddenly felt that taking the exam at home was more relaxed and warm than ever before. There was no tension like the exam in school. I began to like it. This kind of exam. No, because I was "intoxicated" with the atmosphere of taking exams at home, I was seriously distracted and couldn't answer several questions! I've obviously "met" this question before, so why can't I remember it? I "scratched my head and ears" anxiously, then turned around and saw the Chinese language book in my schoolbag - my mother had forgotten this - hehe!

While I was thinking hard about how to get this "True Book", the phone rang. My father was taking a shower, so my mother had to answer the phone. What a God-sent opportunity! I quickly reached out and took out the Chinese language book, but time froze again, as if two villains were quarreling in my head. One said: "The teacher trusts you so much, you can't do this. You have to be honest and trustworthy. This is more important than grades!" And the other said: "You see now that no one knows and you can get high scores." , why not!" Just when I was hesitating, my mother came in. I hurriedly stuffed the Chinese books into the drawer on my chest and continued to work on the test papers as if nothing had happened...

In the evening, open the door I opened the drawer and pulled out the Chinese language documents. I suddenly felt how terrible and shameful my behavior just now was! (Shanghai Wanrou)

Marking comments

The title is the "eye" of the article. The title of this article is innovative. Why is the exam "unusual"? Attract you to read on. The author uses a unique examination to describe a personal test of his own integrity, which has practical significance. When the author writes that he wants to take a peek at the Chinese language book, the psychological description is vivid and real, which adds a lot to the composition.

Example 3

Dangerous Game

Whenever I look in the mirror and see a scar on my face that is only about an inch away from my eye, I will think of that terrible thing. An unforgettable lesson.

On the night of Children’s Day last year, I bought a large water gun and fought “guerrilla warfare” with others everywhere. When I got home, I was still interested in fighting and "swept" the window and the ground at home. When I looked up, I saw the lightbulb in the dining room was shining brightly. The tungsten filament inside was as bright as a small sun. I walked over and touched it with my hand. Ah, it was burned to death! I think this will burn out the light bulb. No, I have to cool it down. I never expected that my impulsiveness, self-righteousness and strong curiosity would lead me to make a huge mistake.

I filled the water gun with "bullets" and hit the light bulb with the water gun like a target... "Pop!" Suddenly a white ball of light that stung the eyes quickly spread outward, and the light bulb exploded. Got it! I immediately covered my eyes with my hands, but it was too late. I only felt a sharp pain on my face and left arm, and blood immediately poured out. My mother heard the noise and ran over quickly and took me to the hospital.

After returning from the hospital, my heart slowly calmed down, and I began to understand: My curiosity is good, but I must arm myself with knowledge, otherwise, curiosity will become my own Danger! At the same time, it also led me to a conclusion: curiosity + knowledge = success! What I need most now is to arm my mind with knowledge, so I read extracurricular books desperately, such as "Children's Encyclopedia" and "One Hundred Thousand Whys". Through reading, I gradually enriched my knowledge, and finally understood that I was injured. The real reason: It turned out that the lamp became very hot after being turned on for a few hours. When the cold water hits the hot bulb, the glass cannot withstand it and explodes in an instant due to the uneven heating and cooling of the bulb.

That scar aroused my interest in learning, and always reminded and encouraged me to study hard. It has become a guiding light on the road of my life, illuminating my direction! (Chen Min, Hubei)

Marking Comments

This little author wrote something like "eat a pit, gain a wisdom", I am afraid that many students have done it. The valuable thing about this essay is that it not only writes the lessons learned from it, but also writes the thoughts and ideas gained from it, which led to the inspiration and action, and finally found the cause of the danger. The ending points not only illustrate that bad things can turn into good things, but also deepen the theme. (Cui Luan)

Example 4

I am the flag-raiser

Three years ago, I was fortunate enough to be selected as the school flag-raiser. Looking at the envious eyes of my classmates and listening to their words of praise, I feel elated! Unexpectedly, on my first day "taking office", I would make a big joke.

When the flag was raised that morning, I walked forward holding the national flag, but after a while I was in chaos. Look, my steps were messed up and the flag was raised crookedly... I actually raised the national flag to the top of the pole before the national anthem was half-sung. Afterwards, although the counselor did not criticize me, my classmates talked a lot. One classmate said: "This is the worst flag raising I have ever seen!" After hearing this, I couldn't suppress my sadness anymore. Sad, burst into tears. At this time, I realized that it is not easy to be a flag raiser.

In order to raise the flag well and be a true flag-bearer, I asked the counselor to provide patient guidance. Under his careful instruction, I repeatedly practiced singing the national anthem, grasping the rhythm, and insisted on watching the flag-raising scene in front of "Xinwen Lianbo" every day. Along with the national anthem, I silently recorded in my mind that the uncle in the national flag class held his head high when raising the flag, acted in a standardized manner, Accurate and powerful look. In order to better grasp the time, I also found a rope twice as long as the school flagpole and hung it on a tree to practice. As time goes by, I really look like the uncle in the national flag class.

Through hard work, I gradually became a qualified flag-raiser and withstood many tests. Before Hong Kong returned to China in 1997, our school held a grand flag-raising ceremony. The "National Flag Class" walked up to the flagpole with their heads held high, and I raised the flag to the top of the pole with my own hands. In 1999, when Macao returned to China, at the school's flag-raising ceremony, I once again Under the attention of many people and the teachers and students of the school, the national flag was slowly raised. Looking at the happy and approving eyes of teachers and classmates, I feel even more that I shoulder a sacred mission.

Today, raising the flag has become an indispensable part of my school life, and my feelings for the national flag have become deeper and deeper.

(Huang Wei, Jiangsu)

Marking comments

Personal experience, real feelings, ups and downs of the plot are interesting, and the expression is clear and clear.

Example 5

That time, I was wrong

One day during the winter vacation, my parents went out. I was at home alone playing with the new vase my mother had just bought. This vase is so beautiful, and my mother said it is quite expensive.

I was holding it in my hand and admiring it. Unexpectedly, I missed it and the vase fell to the ground, with porcelain pieces flying everywhere. Looking at the debris on the ground, I was stunned and at a loss. This is my mother’s favorite vase! If my mother finds out, that's okay. The more I thought about it, the more anxious I became. I was sweating like rain. After a while, the clothes on my back were all wet. I moved my eyes to the sleeping kitten, and suddenly I had an idea and came up with a good idea. I picked up the kitten and stroked its fur and said, "Kitty, kitten, if you can help me handle this, I will reward you with a big fish, okay?" The kitten seemed to understand me. Then he ran out with a "meow" sound.

"Dong dong dong", there was a knock on the door, and I knew it was my father who was back. I opened the door quickly. Dad looked at the debris on the floor and asked what was going on. I didn't dare to look at my father, so I lowered my head and pointed at the kitten that had just ran back from outside and said, "The kitten jumped on the table and did it." At this time, my mother happened to come back. After knowing this, her face suddenly changed. "Yin", he picked up a wooden stick and hit the kitten with a stick, and the kitten screamed and ran away. My heart aches so much, but what can I do?

At night, I lay in bed unable to sleep, thinking that what happened during the day was all my fault, so why should I blame the kitten? The teacher said that to be a good person, you must be an honest person.

Thinking of this, I got up and wrote a line on the note: "Mom, everything I did during the day was all my fault, it has nothing to do with the kitten. I'm sorry, please forgive me!" Then, I walked into my mother's room, I gently placed the note beside my mother's bed, turned off the light, and went to sleep.

The next morning, when I got up, I saw a note beside the bed. It said: "If you know your mistakes, correct them and you are still a good boy." Looking at the note, I laughed! (Jiangsu Zhang Wei)

Marking comments

Seeing the big from the small, true feelings