How to modify sick sentences

The so-called sick sentence is the wrong sentence. Any sentence that violates the rules of grammatical structure or objective facts is a sick sentence. The former is called grammatical error and the latter is called logical error.

Wrong key

1, the composition is incomplete

2. Redundancy in composition

3. Incorrect word order

4. Improper collocation

5. The ideographic meaning is unclear

6, illogical

7. Repetition is lengthy

example sentence

1. I went to plant trees last week. [Analysis] No topic [Revision 1] Our class went to plant trees last week [Revision 2] Our class went to plant trees last week. Today, all the students in Class One, Grade Three watched a movie. Today, all the students in Class One, Grade Three watched the film. His view is right, right. [analysis] word repetition (two or more words have the same meaning) [revision 1] His view is correct [revision 2] His view is correct. The students are sitting in the wide reading room reading books. The students are sitting in the spacious reading room reading books.

Modification method

1, learn about several common types of ill sentences, especially the six types pointed out in the exam instructions; Improper word order, improper collocation, incomplete or redundant components, chaotic structure, unclear meaning and illogical. Familiar with the routine methods of correcting sick sentences.

2. The purpose of modifying ill sentences is to make the sentences accurate and clear. When you modify a sick sentence, you must keep the original intention and don't change it.

3. Grasping the main sentence from the perspective of grammar. Whether it is a single sentence or a complex sentence, grasping the trunk of the sentence will also grasp the basic meaning of the sentence, which is conducive to retaining the original intention when correcting the sick sentence. When grasping the trunk, pay attention to identify whether there is a problem with the trunk. If there are defects such as incomplete components, improper collocation of subject and predicate, improper collocation of verb and object, we must first correct them.

4. From the lexical point of view, see whether the modifiers of the sentence are properly matched with the head language, and whether the content words and function words of the sentence are used properly.

5. Let's talk about logic first. Although there are no chapters to introduce logical knowledge in middle school texts, some logical knowledge is often needed when modifying sick sentences. Usually, we should pay attention to mastering some basic logical knowledge. Some sentences are logically wrong, so we should consider them from a logical point of view when modifying them.

6. Choose, imitate and change sentence patterns

7. Expand sentences and compress paragraphs

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1, the composition is incomplete

(1) Abuse of prepositions leads to incomplete subject.

Through this study, my level has been greatly improved.

Remove "Tong" and let "Xue" be the subject; Remove "yes" and let "grade" be the subject.

☆ From the above obvious facts, it is proved that the Party's principles and policies come from the masses.

Delete "from"

(2) The predicate is incomplete

☆ A comprehensive quality inspection campaign has been launched recently, and a series of work such as establishing and strengthening the technical management system will be carried out in this campaign.

Add "completed" before "established"

In the old society, working people did not have enough to eat and wear.

Add "live" before "eat", or delete "live" and "have enough to eat and not be warm" as predicates.

☆ Inspired by Lei Feng's spirit, teachers and students all over the school are doing good things like mushrooms after rain.

After "inspired by the spirit of Lei Feng", add "strive for the upper reaches"

(3) The object is incomplete

☆ The school party committee discussed and mobilized all teachers and students to carry out patriotic health campaign.

After "sports", add "problems"

We should make every effort to mechanize and collectivize agriculture.

After "collectivization", add "the road of"

(4) The necessary modifiers are incomplete

☆ If you want to get excellent grades, you must work hard.

Add "hard and effective" before "labor"

☆ Zhang Qiang and Li Li won the men's and women's championships respectively in this school-wide table tennis singles competition.

Add "respectively" before "win"

(5) Incomplete related words

☆ The stick insect in Singapore is not only almost the same color as bamboo, but also completely looks like a branch when it is quiet.

Add "and" before "number"

☆ The academic conference was short and gained a lot.

Add "although ... but ..."

No matter how good you say, we won't listen.

☆ (Even if you have a big career at home, you should save unnecessary expenses and waste.

2. Redundancy in composition

(1) redundant subject

Lao She's writing style has always shared weal and woe with the people.

Get rid of "style"

(2) the predicate is redundant

☆ The lecture notes borrowed from your college last time are being printed and can be distributed to students before class.

Delete "Continue"

Ten players on the basketball court are having a fierce game.

Delete "Click"

(3) the object is redundant

Sima Qian, a famous historian in China, devoted his life to compiling Historical Records.

Delete "Writing of"

☆ Today, I visited the White Pagoda, Diaoyutai and Wu Ting Bridge of Slender West Lake in Yangzhou.

Remove "location"

(4) Attributes are redundant.

☆ Implementing quality education in an all-round way is the urgent task of current education.

Delete "current"

(5) Adverbials are redundant

☆ Xuelian brand shirts are first-class in China in terms of style, quality and packaging.

Remove "can"

☆ I sincerely thank these people in my heart.

Delete "in my heart"

☆ There are fruits everywhere: pears, apples and persimmons. ...

Delete "everywhere"

(6) Redundancy of complement

☆ In order to simplify the number of words, we have to make some minor changes.

Delete "some"

(7) dispensable

☆ I walked about ten miles unconsciously.

Eliminate "distance"

It has been nine years since my father died.

Delete "from now on"

(8) Misuse of the word "de"

Surprisingly, in March this year, the price fell, and then slowly stabilized.

Delete "Germany" and replace it with "falling prices"

☆ Due to the turmoil and humid climate in the past dynasties, almost all the paintings at that time were destroyed.

Add "virtue" and change it to "turmoil in past dynasties"; Delete "Germany" and change it to "humid climate"

Ill sentences-improper collocation

Improper collocation:

1, improper collocation of subject and predicate

2. Improper collocation of verbs and objects

3. Improper collocation of modifiers and headwords

4. One side and two sides are not properly matched

5. Improper collocation of related words

1, improper collocation of subject and predicate

The main performance is that the predicate cannot state the subject, sometimes the subject or predicate acts as a coordinate phrase, and some do not match.

☆ Its annual power generation is not only supplied to Hangzhou, but also transported to Shanghai, Nanjing and other places.

Replace "power generation" with "power generation"

☆ What a beautiful picture the rustling waves and the silver sea make up.

Get rid of the "rustling waves"

☆ Young students (period) is a critical period for their physical growth and knowledge, and for their outlook on life and world. Therefore, we must pay full attention to and strictly demand them.

Add "period" after "students"

The task before the translator is how to improve the translation quality.

Get rid of the "problem"

Autumn in Beijing is the most beautiful season.

Change Autumn in Beijing to Autumn in Beijing.

☆ The Japanese Film Week held in Harbin and Shenyang and five Japanese films shown in other provinces and cities in China are works with unique style and national characteristics among Japanese films in recent years.

Add "screening" after "movie week"

2. Improper collocation of verbs and objects

Verbs and objects should be collocated in meaning and grammar. A common mistake is that when a verb has more than two objects, the latter object does not match the verb.

☆ If we don't pay attention to the network moral construction, some moral corruption and negative and backward ideas may affect people's physical and mental health through the network, violate the normal social order and damage the overall situation of reform and development.

Replace "violation" with "interference"

☆ The Soviet novel How Steel was Tempered shaped party member Paul? Kochakin's heroic deeds.

Change "deeds" into "images"

☆ The students watched and listened to the brave hero's report with reverence.

Delete "Gaze and"

Recently, Jinan promoted civilized service terms and service taboos, which were welcomed by the general public.

Clear "and service taboos"

☆ You can read precious documents, books, audio and video materials that you have never seen before on the Internet.

Delete "recording and"

☆ The People's Liberation Army has rescued and provided disaster relief for many times, protecting people's lives and property.

Delete "Security of"

3. Improper collocation of modifiers and headwords

(1) Improper collocation of attributive and head.

☆ I have a pair of smart and capable hands, and I can do anything.

Get rid of "smart"

(2) Improper collocation of adverbial and headword

☆ We have carefully studied the suggestions of the employees and humbly sought the opinions of experts.

Replace "serious" with "serious" or "cautious"

A factory is constantly committed to the research and development of new products, new technologies, new processes and new materials driven by technological progress.

Get rid of "new technology and new technology"

(3) Improper collocation of complement and head language

The students made the classroom clean and tidy.

Get rid of "neatness"

4. One side and two sides are not properly matched

☆ The key to doing a good job in disaster relief depends on whether the style of cadres is in-depth.

Add "whether" at the beginning of the sentence, or change it to "whether the production and disaster relief work is done well depends on whether the cadres go deep into the masses".

☆ Artists used to be looked down upon by people, but now they are eagerly valued by people. Between this supercilious look and love, they realized the warmth of the world.

Change "warm" into "cold and warm"

5. Improper collocation of related words

☆ Only by attending classes well and finishing homework well can the academic performance be greatly improved.

Change "just" to "just"

☆ Imagination is not only necessary for poets to create, but also necessary for readers to appreciate.

Replace "not only" with "not only"

Now that you are here, I should go, too.

Change "Ye" to "Jiu"

Wrong sentence-incorrect word order

1, attribute position is incorrect.

2. Improper adverbial position

3. Several attributives are out of order.

4. Many adverbials are out of order.

5. Improper position of function words

6. The subject and object are upside down

7. Incorrect word order in complex sentences

The attribute location is incorrect.

1. The position of attribute and head is reversed.

It is impossible for China to be self-sufficient in cotton production for a long time.

Replace "cotton production" with "cotton produced"

2. Put the attribute in the position of adverbial

☆ Young people show great enthusiasm for reform.

Put "incomparable" before "enthusiasm"

The word order of these two attributes is wrong.

☆ This exhibition shows cultural relics just unearthed thousands of years ago.

Add "thousands of years ago" before "cultural relics" and "Germany" after "before"

Improper position of adverbial

1. Put the adverbial in the attributive position

☆ Teachers should give full play to the role of students in class.

Add "full" before "play"

The positions of these two adverbials are reversed.

☆ According to the sketch of Lao Gao's cartoon, we successfully found the legendary god hunter.

Switch the positions of "Smooth" and "According to the sketch of Lao Gao Comics"

Li Qiang ignored Zhang Zhuo.

Put "No" before "Put Zhang Zhuo"

The multiple attributives are out of order: range+quantity+verb+form+noun+head word.

General order of multiple attributes:

1. Attribute or Tense

2. Reference phrases or quantitative phrases

3. Verbs or verb phrases

4. Adjectives or adjective phrases

5. Nouns or noun phrases

6. The phrase with "de" is placed before the attribute without "de"

☆ Excellent female basketball coach with more than 20 years' teaching experience in the national team.

Attributive quantitative verb phrase adjective noun

Many adverbials are out of order.

The general order of adverbials:

1. Object-object phrase indicating purpose or reason

2. indicate the time or place

3. Full table

4. Expression or degree

5. Object-oriented phrases of table objects

☆ Many teachers//talked with him enthusiastically in the lounge yesterday.

Time-place range modal object

☆ The next day, the world's major newspapers reported this event that shocked the international sports world in detail.

About this event that shocked the international sports world, all the major newspapers in the world reported it in detail.

Improper position of function words

1. The adverb "bu" is in the wrong position.

☆ If we don't do our domestic affairs well, it will be difficult for us to have a say in the world.

The negative adverb of "ba" sentence should be placed before the word "ba"

☆ If we don't check the contract farming work quickly now, we won't be able to hoe the land in front of us.

Add "no" before "use"

2. Incorrect position of related words: when clauses in complex sentences have the same subject, the subject should be at the head of the whole sentence; When the subjects are inconsistent, the related words should come before the subjects.

She not only studies hard, but also helps other students.

Add "she" before "not only"

If he cannot be realistic, his career will be affected.

Put "if" before "he"

The weight of things is reversed.

☆ At that time, there were few opportunities for newspapers to contact me.

It should be "my contact with the newspaper"

☆ Mathematics doesn't interest me.

"I'm interested in mathematics."

About: when the prepositional structure is used as an adverbial, it can only be used at the beginning of a sentence (as an attribute in a sentence);

Preposition structure of: As an adverbial, it can be used in the first sentence of a sentence.

Improper order in complex sentences

☆ Spring breeze blows in waves, trees sway, moonlight and shadows shake together, making a rustling sound.

Trees are swaying, rustling, moonlight and shadows are shaking together.