Help me revise my composition "A Little Thing"

(1) The first paragraph "The morning has quietly arrived, and the night has not completely dispersed" is inconsistent with the following "Dawn is like a sword, piercing the dark sky". ② In the second paragraph, "wearing a golden raincoat" should not be used as an adjective. (3) The second paragraph "The peaches in the bamboo basket seem to be alive and roll far away." As mentioned above, the following words should be used instead of rolling. ④ The reference of "Hua Er" in the second paragraph is unknown. (5) The last sentence of the second paragraph of "I feel very gratified" should not be gratified. The first sentence of the third paragraph "has been a long time" is out of context. ⑦ Generally speaking, there is a lack of proper psychological and behavioral description. We should also add corresponding comments and lyricism. Besides, with all due respect, this theme is a bit out of date.

The above are opinions, and I hope to adopt them (item by item).