I made a Song poem (homework) with a well-proportioned tree. Please help me revise it. Thank you, master.

It's not bad to write a word for the first time First of all, as upstairs said, as a poem, you have to write a epigraph. This song is like a dream. As for the use of words, there are requirements for parallelism and rhyme. If the Chinese teacher is not very sharp, we will ignore the parallelism in the middle and only pay attention to rhyme. "Like a Dream" requires rhyme. Except for five or six rhymes, the rhymes of other sentences cannot be repeated. According to your first sentence, I posted the rhyme you can press. The last word that needs to rhyme in each sentence can only be selected from the following, and a word should not be used twice. You modify it as I say first, and I'll take a look at it for you. Since I can't write for anyone, you can revise it yourself. I can only tell you how to modify it.

Twenty-five women's first sip of wine [(Up Deer and Down Wu) rhymes] Women [(Up Deer and Down Wu) rhymes] After Liu, the dog you've been fighting for a long time [(Up Deer and Down Wu) rhymes] Whether you have rough hands [(Up Deer and Down Wu) rhymes] and the right hand is held by the couple [(Up Deer and Down Wu)] After nine weeks.

On 26th, I sold [You Yuntong] Shou [You Yuntong] Show [Su Xing] Play with Animals and Drain Money [Encounter Yuntong] The reply of Mao Kou Old Sleeve Pomelo on the poor hunting day [also] saved the right cowpea (cowpea) from losing weight.