Write a composition and comment on 150 words. It is best to find three sentences to appreciate.

On a winter night, a crescent moon is like water. Visiting friends in the snow, knocking on the courtyard door of Xiaoqing's house. As soon as you enter the door, you can smell the amorous feelings of Leng Xiang, which makes people relaxed and happy. Looking intently, it turned out to be a red plum planted by the pool. Under the moon, soft moonlight and dim light quietly sprinkled on this plum blossom. The branches of palm and plum are solemn and healthy, and the long branches are filled with continuous "red clouds"; The red plum blossom, small and exquisite, is filled with delicate fragrance, floating in the dim moonlight. I looked at plum with ecstasy, but I couldn't bear to move again. There is an ancient poem: "The shadows are shallow, and the fragrance floats at dusk." I just realized the artistic conception today.

I walked into Xiaoqing's home. Xiaoqing asked me, "Tomorrow we will go to primary school to see Miss Li. We haven't met for two or three years. What do you say? " I still have the fragrance of plums in my mind: "Just send a few plums, which is elegant and interesting."

The next morning, I came to Xiaoqing with some friends, and saw that the red berries in the yard were slightly different from those we saw last night. Because it is daytime, plums are more delicate. Or subtle, or cold and arrogant, or calm, or lofty; Graceful and fragrant; Affectionate, want to sue also ashamed. Plum's elegance adds a bit of interest and warmth to this lonely winter day. We admire and admire, select some plums, hold them, and gently knock on Miss Li's door.

Miss Li took this exquisite gift and put it into the bottle with a smile and appreciation. When the teacher poured tea, I looked at the teacher's home. Neat and refreshing, simple and not ugly; The only decoration is a Chinese painting "Mei" on the white wall of the study. We sat down and chatted with the teacher about the feeling of parting. Although she has been away from the teacher for more than two years, she still enthusiastically asks about our situation and guides our study when she sees us. Her eyes are still bright, her words are still sincere, and the only change is that frost and snow are flying in her black hair. I looked at Miss Li's smiling face and the students sitting around her, and suddenly remembered Mao Zedong's "Fu? In other words: "Joe does not strive for spring, but only reports spring." When the mountain flowers are in full bloom, she laughs in the bushes. " I turned to look at the plum in the bottle again. She is gorgeous but not humble, and she does not strive for spring. She just silently sends flowers when people need them. By the time all loves arrives, she may have withered, but she still smiles. This is the nobility of Mei, and this is the uniqueness of Mei.

From Miss Li's house, another friend went to Xiaoqing's house to beg for plum. I didn't go with you. Don't break the plum-there is plum fragrance in your heart.

● Comments:

This article has beautiful language and novel ideas. Taking "Mei" as the center, I don't hesitate to use pen and ink: I read Mei twice, each with its own emphasis, which not only describes its shape, imitates its state, paints its fragrance, but also vividly expresses it; In this paper, Lin Bu's poems and his poems are inserted, and the connotation of the article is enriched through the appreciation of Mei. In such a foreshadowing, we involve Mr. Li's description without trace, so it is not difficult for us to see that the author's writing is about people, and the combination of things and people can be described as harmonious.

Three words of appreciation:

On a winter night, a crescent moon is like water. Visiting friends in the snow, knocking on the courtyard door of Xiaoqing's house.

Appreciation: "A crescent moon is like water" and "Visiting friends through the snow" are handy, which shows that the author's writing style adds literary grace and is very interesting to read.

The branches of palm and plum are solemn and healthy, and the long branches are filled with continuous "red clouds"; The red plum blossom, small and exquisite, is filled with delicate fragrance, floating in the dim moonlight.

Appreciation: accurate words, metaphor, red plum is more vivid than hongyun; The combination of long and short sentences adds to the beauty of rhythm. Beautiful and appropriate words express my love for Mei.

Or subtle, or cold and arrogant, or calm, or lofty; Graceful and fragrant; Affectionate, want to sue also ashamed.

Appreciation: a series of four words, full of literary talent, amazing. Parallelism describes the various postures of red plum. The anthropomorphic sentence writes the graceful gesture of Hongmei.