I am a high school student. The school said that there would be a speech contest. I wrote a speech, but I always felt it was not perfect. I hope everyone can help me revise and polish it.

Adjust the order of the first paragraph and the second paragraph. In addition, under the adjustment of tone, we should speak colloquially and conform to our own language habits.

Use beat comparison sentences more often. It's better to use three compound sentence when modifying the ending, so it's easier to push the emotion to a climax at the end of the speech.

Just look at your eyes for reference.