How do students write comments when they encounter domestic violence when writing a composition?

1. Children are killed by domestic violence. With the improvement of people's awareness of rights and gender equality, violence between husband and wife has been concerned by most people. However, people are used to treating children with violence. This may be related to the traditional ideas of China people. For many people in China, children are like parents' private property, that is, they are at my disposal. Therefore, "a dutiful son is born under the stick" and "a soldier who defeats others without fighting" has become the correct reason for treating children violently.

Many heinous child abuse incidents in society are all under the banner of "education": girls who are sewed with boiling water, and incidents in which biological mothers kill their own children are frequently reported in newspapers. Faced with domestic violence against children, society should not be indifferent.

Undoubtedly, there are still many defects in the protection of children's rights and interests in China. You know, once a child lands, he has become an independent individual with independent thoughts and rights. The psychological impact of domestic violence on children is immeasurable. Children who often encounter domestic violence will have certain psychological distortions, which will affect their lives and even society. According to the survey, most children who grow up in a violent environment have a certain tendency to violence, and are prone to psychological deviations such as irritability, loneliness and paranoia, thus laying hidden dangers.

From this perspective, beating children is not just a private matter that other people in the family can't interfere with, but a matter of the whole society. The whole society should establish a correct concept, say "no" to domestic violence against children, let children live in family love and social love, and let children be "inherently good" rather than "inherently evil".

2. How to write a composition evaluation? Let's first look at the comments written by a Chinese teacher on five compositions for a senior two student in one semester: 1, the composition "Guilt", recalling xu teacher, a junior high school English teacher, and writing about xu teacher's "I" puppy love; After the second writing, I met in the street, and xu teacher stopped me first; Third, write "I" addicted to the network; Fourthly, I wrote back to my alma mater and met xu teacher. Xu teacher was disappointed, so I felt guilty. Teacher's general comment: lack of vivid material. 2. The composition "Talking about Quality" is an argumentative essay. Material: "French yeast, additives, British coconut milk, coconut powder, Australian butter" is printed on the bread packaging bag. Someone went into the factory to investigate, and the result was ordinary bread, and there was no' foreign goods'. " The composition begins with "firstly, the merchants see the preferences of China people", then writes "secondly, this stems from the mercenary nature of the merchants", and finally writes "In short, the quality of China people needs to be improved". Teacher's general comment: The final conclusion deviates from the material. 3. The article "Talking about the communication between boys and girls is harmless" wrote: "Of course, puppy love is wrong, but you can't include the normal communication between boys and girls." The teacher frowned: put yourself against teachers and parents in one sentence. You are writing a composition, be fair and don't get angry. General comment: Can injustice convince people? Learn to "persuade" and put yourself in a correct position. 4. The essay "It is harmful for middle school students to study abroad" writes: "Get to the point, middle school students can learn a lot and have great benefits by studying abroad." The teacher frowned: Don't talk like a Japanese! In the essay "Talking about Middle School Students Reading Famous Books", the article first talks about the advantages of famous books, and then writes: "Some people will say,' Don't you have any shortcomings if you speak famous books so well?' The answer is yes. "The teacher frowned: hit his mouth. The article goes on to write: "Everything has two sides, and we can't observe and understand things unilaterally. "The teacher frowned: I started my political class again. General comment: the views are vacillating and inconclusive.

The teacher's comments are also normal. I think many Chinese teachers have written similar comments, which are not worth mentioning. However, at the end of the term, when the teacher asked the students to write a "composition summary", the student showed a strong sense of failure in the summary, and even wrote bitterly: "Besides, the teacher was too mean and hurtful when you wrote the comments. I used to like writing, but now I am more and more afraid of writing. " The teacher's comments failed to inspire the students' enthusiasm for writing, but hit the enthusiasm, which is a great sin. Now, based on the analysis of the comments written by this teacher, I want to talk about how to write the composition review. 1, comments should point out the problem. The focus of each composition training is not exactly the same, and the teacher's comments can focus on this aspect or affirm or correct it. Senior two students have just learned to write argumentative essays. First of all, they should make the argument well founded. For example, the students' final conclusion that "the quality of China people needs to be improved" in the article Talking about Quality has little to do with the materials given, and the teacher's comment that "the conclusion deviates from the materials" is reasonable. 2. Comments should be targeted. It is best to choose one or two training points for each composition training, and don't insist on perfection. These training points should be reviewed, with little reference to others and no special criticism. For example, the student's composition "Guilt", as a narrative composition, the material may be bland, but students can skillfully use the material and make clear what they want to express, so there is no need to force the material to be "vivid". 3. Comments should reflect warmth. Comments are the communication between teachers and students on a composition. Of course, it is necessary to point out the problem, but warmth is still a prerequisite. The teacher's four criticisms of students' three compositions accurately pointed out the problems in students' language expression, but the tone was too sharp, a little "hurtful", inappropriate and easy to dampen students' enthusiasm. 4. Comments should respect individuality. Comments should be written as literary criticism, and students' personality should be respected. Don't use the same standard to grind away the edges and corners in students' compositions. Staple food products, such as "fluent sentences" and "complete structure", should stop writing. Comments should also arouse readers' thinking and imagination, and make people feel awakened.

3. How to write comments on students' compositions and how to write comments on students' compositions.

First, comments should pay attention to emotion.

The composition of primary school students truly reflects their thoughts and practices, and is the natural expression of their innocence. Infecting students with teachers' true feelings can arouse students' voices and improve their ideological understanding. For example, a student in our class has poor academic performance and is usually very withdrawn. After reading his article "Speak from the Heart", he confided that he often caused troubles and fights because he felt bitter and bored after his parents divorced. This article is very true. I almost cried after reading it. When writing a review, it is like this. Although the article is short, every word is golden, because every sentence reveals that you are a student with great personality. Every day you don't think and make progress. Your bitterness and annoyance are your motivation. As long as you don't play fighting, I believe you will succeed. If you have teachers and classmates around you, will you still suffer and be bored?

Secondly, comments should be encouraging.

As adults, we all hope that others will appreciate our achievements warmly and sincerely, not to mention the children of students. In the process of writing, whether students write well or not, the length is the result of their labor. Therefore, teachers should look at students' writing content, feelings expressed, languages and methods used, and their outstanding achievements or personalities. The evaluation of students' compositions should focus on praise, so that students can gain new knowledge and successful experience in the process of composition evaluation.

Third, comments should be inspired.

Writing evaluation pays attention to encouragement, not excluding criticism, because comments also play a role in pointing out the maze, but we should pay attention to euphemism and kindness, not to blame directly, and not to be cynical. For example, when a classmate was writing the composition "My Teacher", there was a passage: Her black and shiny eyes seemed to be able to talk, inspiring us every day, sometimes making you blush and sometimes making you happy. Such an article can't simply write down unspecified comments. This is what I wrote. What did the teacher's eyes say? Can you write it specifically according to your usual observation? After reading it, the students will add it immediately.

Fourth, there must be discussions and comments.

It is normal for primary school students to write compositions, mostly semi-finished products, with many shortcomings and problems. We can't use literary standards to demand students. If students use discussion-based comments, they are more likely to accept the shortcomings in their compositions. For example, when a student was writing the composition "Spring is bursting", he wrote a sentence at the beginning: Spring is the season when everything is fluffy, and nature is full of vitality. In this sentence, the word fluffy is not used properly. I first wrote him fluffy meaning: describing grass, leaves, hair, fluff and so on. Then I wrote a comment. Do you think,' Mao Mao' is appropriate here? What is a more appropriate word? When the student saw the comments, he found me with a composition book and told me that he knew that the word Mao Mao was not used properly and should be changed to recovery. I affirmed that discussion-based evaluation can achieve a harmonious and democratic atmosphere, encourage students to study actively, improve their enthusiasm for revising their compositions and improve their ability to revise their own compositions.

4. How to guide students to write composition evaluation? First, give priority to encouragement and appreciation, supplemented by suggestions.

Comments are very important in composition evaluation. The vast majority of students are more concerned about composition evaluation than scores and grades. When students began to correct each other's compositions, some students' comments were too sharp, such as "You write like this, it's nonsense" and "Your handwriting is so ugly that it doesn't look like human writing", which greatly damaged the self-esteem of young writers. In view of this situation, I promptly guide students to give priority to encouragement and appreciation when writing comments, and try to tap the bright spots in their compositions, even if punctuation is standardized and correct, or a word is used well, or the title is good, the beginning is good, and the end is good ... As long as there is a good side, even a small side, we should praise each other in time and express our appreciation. Thanks to my efforts, the comments written by students have been greatly improved. For example, a classmate wrote, "The idea of your composition is shining, but the writing is somewhat disappointing. Flashing ideas should be expressed in beautiful writing, shouldn't they? " What nice words! In this way, students can gradually get the appreciation of their classmates, and even feel more proud than being praised by teachers, which can stimulate their interest in writing and arouse their confidence in writing.

Second, it varies from person to person, and the specific ingredients are treated specifically.

For the composition of students with poor writing ability, I instruct the reviewers to evaluate the composition mainly from the basic ability, such as correct writing, fluent sentences and clear expression. For students with good writing ability, when writing comments, we should evaluate them from the aspects of material selection, layout, theme extraction, literary talent, timeliness, foresight and profundity.

Third, the forms of comments should be diverse and eclectic.

Composition evaluation should be eclectic in form and content, and avoid rigidity and platitudes. When instructing students to write composition evaluation, I instruct them to add comments and comments in time. Some students write comments in the form of poems and letters. And draw smiling faces, angry faces, thumbs up and other graphic auxiliary comments. I affirmed and praised these practices in time.

Through this semester's training, the results are remarkable. First, put an end to the phenomenon that a few students don't hand in their compositions. Secondly, most students' comments are getting richer, more pertinent, more profound and more valuable. Some students' comments are close to 400 words, which virtually exercises students' language expression ability, and the effect can be described as killing two birds with one stone.

In a word, I personally think that it is definitely not a teacher's work to cut corners, but to trust and cultivate students' ability to let students evaluate each other's compositions and guide them to write good comments. However, this kind of teaching activity must not be allowed to drift. Teachers must organize and guide seriously and attentively, stimulate the enthusiasm of students to evaluate and correct each other's compositions, and tap the inherent potential of students' evaluation of compositions in order to get twice the result with half the effort.

Comments on the synthesis process;

1, with complete * * *, describing ... 2. Highlighted, detailed and appropriate, with specific contents.

3. The metaphor is appropriate and the words are vivid. 4. The language of the article is easy to understand, close to the reality of life and friendly to read.

5 ... tell us in a relaxed and happy tone, which is unforgettable. 6. The narrative is natural and vivid, with compact structure, coherent connection with nature and prominent center. 7. For the description of the scenery, the language is concise and accurate, while the association is touching the scene, and the scene is naturally integrated.

10, the little author observes carefully and narrates orderly. 12, the meticulous description of characters' language, demeanor and actions is a major feature of this paper.

End of composition: 1. The ending is just right and the center is clear. The language is simple and profound and thought-provoking.

2, use the feeling switch, ending with feeling. In this way, the article is coordinated from beginning to end, and the theme of the article is repeated, which is very infectious.

3. The praise for the characters at the end is sincere and touching. 4. The implicit ending of the article is both topical and intriguing.

5. Focus on the end to express emotions, give consideration to the beginning, and summarize the full text. Coherent from beginning to end, in one go.

General comment: 1, the article is miscellaneous but not chaotic, but can be detailed and focused. 2. Made a detailed and vivid description.

3, ... practical, contains simple and profound philosophy, exciting and emotional to read.

This article is full of * * *, and the author's love for … can be felt between the lines. The full text has distinct levels and fluent sentences.

5. The case narrative is vivid, concrete and interesting, which is in line with the previous metaphor. Finally, the author expressed his feelings for … in a few words, which is touching. 6. The article is well organized and forms a complete image.

5. How to write a composition? I am also a Chinese teacher, and correcting my composition is the most troublesome thing. I found an article for you. Let's study together.

How to write a good composition review;

1, seriously appreciate the revised attitude:

Emerson once said, "The secret of successful education lies in respecting students." Teachers should first put a correct attitude, treat students with an equal attitude, treat students' works with appreciation, and respect students' labor achievements.

It is not easy for students to write a composition in one or two classes. In their view, they wrote very hard and reached their own better level. Send it to the teacher for correction, expecting the teacher's affirmation or correction, so as to draw strength and enlightenment from it. For teachers, when correcting, we should give priority to positive evaluation. It is important for students to see their achievements and progress through comments and strengthen their confidence in writing a good composition. If there are too many negatives, it is not only unnecessary, but also easy for students to lose self-confidence, inhibit creativity, and even misunderstand or even resent the teacher's correction. Even the compositions of poor students, as long as teachers read them carefully with love for them, they can always find some advantages, and they are not without merit. For example, writing is true, all in their own language, without plagiarism; Not completely according to the teacher's mode of writing, have their own creation; I chose one or two examples in particular, but others didn't pay attention to them and didn't use them often. There are proverbs, two-part allegorical sayings or famous sayings with appropriate quotations; The language is simple, without any traces of modification and carving; They are all simple drawings, straight to the point, without layout and rendering ... Find these advantages, praise them when evaluating the composition, and give them adequate encouragement. Teachers may wish to observe carefully, and students' learning motivation will double after praise.

The theme of the composition is people, and the composition cannot be without me. In composition review, we should also vigorously advocate caring, respecting and publicizing "I" as a breakthrough to change the passive situation in composition review. In order to stimulate students' writing desire, guide them to appreciate life attentively and express life with personality, teachers should establish students' subjective consciousness and put themselves in the position of composition evaluation. Teachers are not outsiders and condescending judges of students' compositions, but participants in students' compositions, life experiencers that students like and disseminators of students' thoughts.

2, comment on writing should be encouraging:

I once saw such a story: an old gentleman in a private school found three unusual composition papers when correcting students' compositions, and he added comments to them respectively. After the title of the first article was written, only the word "fu" was written. He commented: "The composition has great potential!" The second article only has a title, and there is no word "Fu". He commented: "It's wonderful to quote without sending it!" The third article is so blank that it doesn't even have a title. He still added a comment to him: "naive and gratifying." Of course, this is a laugh with some irony, but after laughing, I think it has some enlightenment, that is, pay attention to mastering the knowledge of encouragement when writing a composition. Teachers' eyes should not only find the shortcomings of students, but also find the advantages to encourage them. In a sense, a good composition is not necessarily taught by the teacher, but it may be encouraged by the teacher. It is often said that the art of education is ultimately the art of encouragement, and so is the composition review. A Chinese teacher must carry out the principle of encouragement in comments, dare to encourage and be good at encouraging. It's not up to the judge to correct the teacher's composition, so don't be so rigid. They can insist on encouraging advantages but not conniving at disadvantages. When Mao Dun was in elementary school, the teacher wrote this comment at the end of his book "Song Dazu's theory of releasing soldiers with a glass of wine": "Good writing, good knowledge, discerning in reading history, and knowledgeable in argument, a teenager can also succeed. He worked hard and became a great musical instrument! " At the end of "On Emperor Wendi of Sui Dynasty and Emperor Gaozu of Qin Shihuang", the teacher's comment is even more wonderful: "The pen of blazing anger is like a sword, and a thousand words are like mercury pouring down the ground, which is pervasive ..." After reading this text, we can imagine how Mao Dun was inspired by it in his youth. ：

It is not easy for students to write a composition in one or two classes. In their view, it is difficult to write, and there is 1, which seriously appreciates the attitude of correcting:

Emerson once said, "The secret of successful education lies in respecting students." Teachers should first put a correct attitude, treat students with an equal attitude, treat students' works with appreciation, and respect students' labor achievements.

Reach a better level. Send it to the teacher for correction, expecting the teacher's affirmation or correction, so as to draw strength and enlightenment from it. For teachers, when correcting, we should give priority to positive evaluation. It is important for students to see their achievements and progress through comments and strengthen their confidence in writing a good composition. If there are too many negatives, it is not only unnecessary, but also easy for students to lose self-confidence, inhibit creativity, and even misunderstand or even resent the teacher's correction. Even the compositions of poor students, as long as teachers read them carefully with love for them, they can always find some advantages, and they are not without merit. For example, writing is true, all in their own language, without plagiarism; Not completely according to the teacher's mode of writing, have their own creation; I chose one or two examples in particular, but others didn't pay attention to them and didn't use them often. There are proverbs, two-part allegorical sayings or famous sayings with appropriate quotations; The language is simple, without any traces of modification and carving; They are all straight, straight to the point, without layout and rendering ... Find these advantages and praise them when evaluating the composition.

6. How can teachers give students a reasonable reference for composition evaluation?

1. The full-text narrative is concentrated, the language is concise and smooth, and the feelings are sincere and touching.

2. By enriching the characters' language and actions, the ideological quality of the characters is set off. The article is reasonable in imagination, natural and vivid in narration, compact in structure, coherent in connection with nature and prominent in center.

3. The language is concise, the center is clear, the conception is reasonable, and the writing level is clear.

It is really commendable to write the inner activities of the characters vividly and leave a deep impression on people.

5. The article is balanced from beginning to end, with clear center and complete structure.

6. The article is well-founded, convincing, highlighting the personality of the characters, natural context, clear organization, focused ending and prominent central idea.

7. The author observes … carefully, describes it delicately, and has vivid language and novel expression.

7. How to write a composition review How to write a composition review Feng Xin No.2 Middle School: Xu Xiaomei Summary: A good review can not only help students analyze the gains and losses of their compositions, but also stimulate their enthusiasm for writing. Therefore, in composition evaluation, teachers should mention less shortcomings, more advantages, less comments and more discussions, do not cover everything, highlight key points, and encourage students to write comments. Composition evaluation is a Chinese teacher's summary evaluation of students' compositions from form to content. If correcting is an important part of composition teaching, then commenting on students' compositions is the crowning touch. Composition evaluation has both evaluation function and guidance function. It should not only evaluate the quality of students' homework, but also realize the spiritual communication between teachers and students. Teachers can arouse students' emotions and cultivate students' aesthetic taste through comments. Through long-term comments, students can understand writing skills, temper their will, stimulate their interest in writing, ignite their enthusiasm for writing and gradually improve their writing ability. Obviously, a good composition evaluation is of great benefit to students: it enables students to write good compositions and learn to be human; It not only promotes the emotional communication between teachers and students, but also harmonizes the relationship between teachers and students. Its significance can be said to go far beyond the comment itself. A good comment can not only help students analyze the gains and losses of their compositions, but also stimulate their enthusiasm for writing. In the past, when correcting compositions, we always pointed out many shortcomings and deficiencies to students, such as "unclear center", "unspecific content", "improper selection of materials", "unreasonable structure" and "irregular writing" ... It seems that only in this way can students improve their writing level and show the level of teachers. However, how can we make the center clear, the content specific and the materials appropriate? Students still don't understand the comment on writing, but their enthusiasm for writing has been greatly affected. We say that composition correction should focus on practical results, why not refer to advantages rather than disadvantages? We can completely put aside the unreasonable selection of a problem and point out its advantages of clever design and expressive language. Pointing out advantages not only encourages students, but also strengthens correct knowledge. So, can we turn a blind eye to the shortcomings and problems in practice? Not exactly. Teachers should clearly point out the existing problems and put forward suggestions for revision. Of course, these contents should not be reflected in comments, but should be fed back to students in composition evaluation.

Second, judge less and discuss more. There is no doubt that the teacher's comments can only represent one family's words. Different teachers can give different or even diametrically opposite comments on the same composition. Therefore, it is unscientific for teachers to judge students' compositions according to their own evaluation criteria and require students to fully accept their own views. Unless there are obvious problems, teachers should not judge easily, but discuss them on an equal footing. For example, instead of writing "insufficient content" in the comments, it is better to say "in my opinion, if you can enrich more typical and specific materials into your article, the effect may be better." What do you think? " Such exploratory comments make students feel that they and their labor achievements are respected, and usually he will pay full attention to the teacher's comments.

Third, do not seek comprehensiveness, but highlight key points. Some teachers try to cover everything in their comments, for fear of missing one aspect and making students suffer. Therefore, their comments are detailed, concrete and well-intentioned, from examining the topic and conceiving the structure of the article, to choosing words, making sentences and punctuation marks, and then to the wording requirements of the writing format. However, composition training cannot be "famous in World War I", and composition class is not limited to this section, so why not consider "divide and rule"? Instilling too much information to students, students' understanding and application are problematic, which is called "biting off more than one can chew". Our approach is that comments only focus on the main aspects, and other contents are reflected through indirect recognition or direct modification. In this way, the focus is clear, the focus is prominent, the students' efforts are directed, and the effect is easy to detect, which greatly improves the efficiency of teachers' correcting compositions.

Encourage students to write comments. There are two kinds of comments mentioned here:

1. Write the self-evaluation. Every time a student finishes writing a composition, after repeated revisions, he points out the advantages of his composition and puts it in the comment column. This is not only a kind of self-affirmation and encouragement, but also a reference for teachers to correct their compositions.

2. Peer review of students' compositions. Students find the advantages of each other's compositions. First of all, it is a process of learning from others' strengths and making up for their own shortcomings. At the same time, it can also be used as a reference for teachers to correct their compositions. The attention of the above four aspects has made composition teaching overcome the disadvantages of one-way communication and formed a new pattern of educational dialogue. In this equal dialogue and communication, students' innovative spirit and writing ability will be cultivated and improved subtly. A good composition evaluation can not only evaluate students' writing level, but also stimulate students' interest in writing, explore students' writing potential, and play a role in awakening, encouraging and motivating.