Urgent! Rainy day, bad mood, scenery description!

To accurately and vividly describe the scenery you have observed, you need some skills in landscape writing. Please read several fragments of Zhu Ziqing's material "Moonlight on the Lotus Pond" carefully, in which the scenery description is very distinctive. Then write in connection with the beautiful scenery you read, exchange your understanding of scenery description skills in groups, and choose two or three students to speak in groups.

Material 1: moonlight in the lotus pond (excerpt) Zhu Ziqing

Along the lotus pond, there is a winding little cinder road. This is a secluded road; Few people walk during the day, and it is lonely at night. Around the lotus pond, there are many trees and lush. On one side of the road, there are some willows and some trees with unknown names. On a moonless night, the road is gloomy and a little scary. It's fine tonight, although the moonlight is still very weak.

On the winding lotus pond, I look forward to the leaves of Tian Tian. The leaves are high out of the water, like an elegant dancer's skirt. Between the layers of leaves, some white flowers are dotted sporadically, some are blooming gracefully, and some are in bud; Like a pearl, like a star in the blue sky, like a beauty who just took a bath. The breeze blew, sending wisps of fragrance, like a faint song on a tall building in the distance. At this time, the leaves and flowers also trembled slightly, like lightning, passing through the lotus pond in an instant. The leaves are close side by side, so there are clear wave marks. Below the leaves is flowing water, which is covered and can't see some colors; Leaves are more exposed to the wind.

Moonlight, like running water, falls quietly on this leaf and flower. A thin layer of blue mist floats in the lotus pond. Leaves and flowers seem to have been washed in milk; Like a dream in a sarong. Although it is a full moon, there are faint clouds in the sky, so it can't shine; But I think this is just a benefit-deep sleep is indispensable, and nap is unique. Moonlight shines through the treetops, and the bushes in the high places cast uneven and mottled shadows, but they seem to be painted on lotus leaves. The moonlight in the pond is uneven, but the light and shadow have a harmonious melody, such as a famous song played in the Vatican. Around the lotus pond, there are trees far and near, high and low, and willows are the most. These trees surround a lotus pond; Only on one side of the path, there are some gaps, which seem to be reserved for moonlight. An example of the color of trees is cloudy, which at first glance looks like a cloud of smoke; But the abundance of willows can be recognized in the smoke. There are distant mountains on the treetops, just a little careless. There are still one or two lamps leaking through the cracks in the tree. What is listless is the eyes of those who are sleepy. At this time, the most lively are cicadas in the tree and frogs in the water; But it's theirs, and I have nothing. I suddenly remembered the matter of picking lotus.

Discussion results:

Health 1: The order of scenery description should be arranged. For example, in these paragraphs in Moonlight on the Lotus Pond, it is chosen to describe "above the lotus pond" first and then "around the lotus pond"; Write the leaves above the lotus pond, followed by the leaves of Wang Mi, with clear organization in the middle and at the bottom of the leaves. /Student 2: We should use personification and metaphor to describe the scenery. For example, in Moonlight on the Lotus Pond, the metaphor of "the leaves are high above the water, like a graceful dancer's skirt" vividly describes the beauty of the lotus leaf; There are some white flowers scattered, some are blooming gracefully and some are blooming shyly. "Using anthropomorphic rhetoric, the beautiful modality of Baihua is vividly written. /student 3: the description of the scene should be combined with static and dynamic. For example, in Moonlight on the Lotus Pond, "At this time, the leaves and flowers also trembled slightly, like lightning, passing through the lotus pond instantly. The leaves are close side by side, so there are clear ripples. " The combination of dynamic description and static description describes the beauty of the lotus pond delicately. /Health 4: It is necessary to comprehensively use expressions such as description, lyricism and discussion. Moonlight on the Lotus Pond not only describes, but also uses lyricism and discussion. For example, "but I think it's just a benefit-a deep sleep is indispensable and a nap is unique" is the discussion, and "but the excitement is theirs and I have nothing" is the lyrics. /Health 5: Write the changes of the scenery and the characteristics different from other scenery through comparison. For example, I have read the article "Bamboo Sea in South Sichuan": "Bamboo Sea in South Sichuan is different from other bamboo seas. In the forest, there are streams, stones, bridges, waterfalls, twists and turns, and heights. "

Skills to pay attention to in landscape description: 1. In a certain order, the scenery should be written in an orderly way. 2. Use personification, metaphor and other rhetorical devices to write scenes with images. 3. Extract the words and write the scenery accurately and vividly. 4. The combination of dynamic and static, the scenery should have charm. 5. The combination of point and surface, the scenery is comprehensive and the key points are prominent. 6. Incorporate feelings and write scenes to express feelings.

The order of scenery description is generally spatial order and time order. Spatial order can be divided into two types: one is to take a fixed observation point and write the scenery in each position in turn according to the order of line of sight movement, either from far and near, from inside to outside, from top to bottom, or from whole to part, and so on; The second is to describe the scenery with the shift of the observer's position without taking a fixed observation point, which is also called swimming sequence. The time sequence is to write the scenery in turn according to a certain time period, depicting the changes of the scenery, such as spring, summer, autumn and winter, morning, afternoon, dusk and night. Which order should be chosen depends on the characteristics of the description object and the actual needs of the description.

Please look at the following excerpts describing the scenery and point out the mistakes in writing the order of the scenery.

Walking on the carpet paved with ginkgo leaves, I saw a "flame" burning not far away. In the cold, in the autumn wind, maple leaves dance, and the sound of "rustling" seems to report the coming of autumn, and it seems to be playing a beautiful autumn movement. A closer look turned out to be a flaming maple forest. I picked up a maple leaf, and the bright red background set off the yellow lines, like a child's red palm, like a girl's blushing cheek, like a beautiful butterfly. Walking, we came to Ginkgo Woods. Some of them sway in the wind on the branches, while others fall in small groups.

On the grass, others danced and spun into the water to go with the flow. The leaves of ginkgo trees have begun to turn yellow and are tottering in the rustling autumn wind. A closer look shows that the leaves of ginkgo trees are more unique. Its leaves are very clear, like a small fan, like a small ear, and like a thin duck web, so cute!

Discussion results:

Health 1: From Walking on the Carpet Paved with Ginkgo Leaves, it can be seen that the author's viewing order should be "Ginkgo biloba" first, so the scenery of "Ginkgo biloba" should be written first, and the upper and lower paragraphs should be interchanged. /Health 2: There is also a problem with the order of the first paragraph. "Looking closer, it turned out to be a flaming maple forest" should be put in the second sentence. /Health 3: The second paragraph is also out of order. The second sentence describes that Ginkgo biloba leaves fall on the grass, and the third sentence describes that Ginkgo biloba leaves are crumbling. Obviously, these two sentences are reversed and should be interchanged.

The teacher summed up: the student's analysis is very correct. The ancients said, "Words without words are not far away." Without literary talent, you can't write vivid scenery. The use of personification, metaphor and other rhetorical devices to describe the scenery can make the scenery vivid, concrete and literary.

Classroom exercises:

1. The following sentences about scenery are concise and appropriate. Please explain your understanding.

The trunk of the apple tree is covered with dry moss, and the jagged bare branches are dotted with a few red and green leaves, which bend into the air like an old man's elbow. ([Russia] Turgenev's virgin land)

(2) Lin Yin Road, soaked by continuous autumn rain, stretches under trembling poplars. Poplar trees have almost become bare, and dead leaves have fallen to the ground. The slender branches are swaying in the cold wind, shaking the residual leaves that are about to float into the air. These only yellow and golden leaves, like endless autumn rain all day long, let dead branches fly around and fall to the ground.

([France] Life of Mo Bosang)

Please fill in the appropriate words in the blanks of the following sentences.

In the beautiful forest, thousands of streams and layers of water mist are faintly visible, among the bamboo branches. (spilled, stirred; Around, around. )

The river gives people a special feeling. Flowing to a wide and deep place, like a mirror; When it flows to a fast and steady place, it is like a rainbow. Although the earth has gradually cooled down, the surrounding scenery is clear. (clear and clear; Quiet, quiet; Floating (in the air)

Escape, go with the flow; Soft and gentle. )

Please write the following landscape sentences more beautifully.

In autumn, grapes are full. The fish is in the middle of the lake.

Discussion results:

Health 1: 1 The first sentence of the title "uneven", "bare", "curved" and "ornamentation" are refined and appropriate, which accurately describes the characteristics of branches and the growth patterns of green leaves on branches. /Health 2: The second sentence of the first 1 title "Trembling", "Bare", "Grief Sharp" and "Swirling Dance" are concise and appropriate, which vividly describe the characteristics of poplar and the mode of defoliation respectively.

Health 3: The first sentence of the second question should be filled with "arousing" and "hovering" in turn, which highlights the thick water mist and accurately depicts the scenery near the sea.

Health 4: The second sentence of the second question should be filled with "clear", "quiet", "elegant" and "soft" in turn. These words are more in line with the context and can accurately describe the characteristics of the river and its surrounding scenery, especially the words "elegance" and "softness", which vividly reveal the inner beauty of the river and its surrounding scenery. /health 5: the first sentence of question 3 can be described as follows: the grape trellis in autumn is covered with strings of crystal clear grapes, like strings of purple pearls, which makes people relaxed and happy. /Health 6: The second sentence of the third question can be written as: Fish swim freely in the clear lake. They are in groups of three or five, or their heads are against their heads, or their tails are touching their tails. They are intimate and soft.

Teacher's summary: The description of scenery combined with dynamic and static can make the written scenery more verve. One is the image description of the dynamic scene, and the other is to turn static into dynamic and write the connotation and charm of the scene. In particular, turning static into dynamic is a clever pen to add color to description.

Please read the reading materials carefully and experience the writing characteristics of lyrical and emotional scenery. And discuss and communicate with your deskmate to deepen your understanding of lyrics writing.

Material 2: Populus euphratica (excerpt) Pan Yue

Populus euphratica was born in the western regions. The Western Regions, the once prosperous 36 countries, the roaring fierce horses, the soaring wolf smoke, the flying Hu dance, the stirring Jie drum, the solemn giant Buddha, the slow caravan, and the beacon tower from Wan Li to Chang 'an have all been baptized by the vast desert. There are only a thousand years, only broken post roads, desolate ancient cities, seven or eight lonely camels, three or five glasses of red wine, the story of two or three heroes chasing hegemony, and the cry of A Qiang flute wandering in the sky. Of course, there are Populus euphratica, and the golden leaves of Populus euphratica, reclining between white sand and blue sky, an intoxicating painting, shocking and silent. ?

Populus euphratica is the toughest tree I have ever seen in my life. Can be delicate and charming in the scorching sun of MINUS 40 degrees, and can stand tall and straight in the cold of MINUS 40 degrees. It is not afraid of invading the salt and alkali of bone marrow, nor is it afraid of overwhelming wind and sand. It is the tree of God, the tree of life and the immortal tree. The spirit of being strong in adversity, rising in adversity, surviving and never giving up makes all real men excited. Frost and wind knocked down, struggling to get up, covered in dust, struggling to come out. They calmly die for the spirit and generously die for the idea. Although his arm is broken and his waist is bent, he still holds an iron character; Although scarred, it still shows the true nature of the hole. ?

Populus euphratica is the most selfless tree I have ever seen in my life. Populus euphratica is the barrier in front of the desert, followed by cities, villages, green mountains and green waters, a noisy world of mortals, but people who don't know. The sentient beings behind them are the only meaning of their birth, life and fight to the end. They don't care. They don't expect people to know about them. They gave all the flashy fame to the peony, to the peach blossom, to all the fleeting exotic flowers and plants, and left this sandstorm to themselves. ?

Populus euphratica is the most tragic tree I have ever seen in my life. Populus euphratica will not die after being born for a thousand years, nor will it fall after being dead for a thousand years, and it will last for a thousand years. This is not a myth. Whether in Tarim or Ejina Banner, Inner Mongolia, I have seen large areas of withered poplars. They fought for their beloved land until the last moment, and still stood strangely between their comrades-in-arms and enemies after their death. They make comrades cry, and they make enemies respect them. Those hundreds of millions of withered poplars who would rather die than surrender and clench their fists are like a compassionate winter fairy tale. ?

Until one day, the moved God suddenly saw this beautiful, loyal and scarred tree species and asked: Who are you? Countless voices in the fierce west wind replied: I am Populus euphratica. ? (Selected from CCTV International TV Prose, March 2006 13. There are deletions)?

Material 3: There is no Peng Ya in the West Lake (excerpt)

"If a person comes to the south of the Yangtze River in March with fireworks when he is young and happens to be in the West Lake on a rainy day, you can imagine all kinds of charms. After many years, after returning from the storm, our appearance has changed, and you still know the feelings of the West Lake. What you feel is a kind of turning around and missing. When you come back, you are both a person in the scenery and a bystander.

No matter what season, no matter what weather, the West Lake is poetic, and you will stumble if you are not careful. The fragrance of thousands of talents can make you dare not think. As long as you accidentally think of an ancient person or a poem in your mind, you will fall into the lake and be confused by old knowledge and heavy emotions. There are many beautiful sentences and celebrities here, which are unparalleled. If you know a lot and always want to know, you will be tired before you get here. This is the West Lake-an old jade hanging on the chest of Jiangnan. How many autumn moons and spring breeze are used to it, and how many stories nourish it.

I can't praise the West Lake, only feeling can confirm the truth of life. I only feel the mood in the light rain in the morning, smoke a cigarette and drink a pot of tea at the window; I only enjoy the beauty of being drunk and sleepy in the afternoon, and it is best not to open my eyes in the honey-like sunshine. Spring is like silk. I always sneak into my heart when I am easily influenced and unconsciously weave a bag of dreams. I put my daydream at such a moment.

I once passed a girl as poetic as a lilac, missing the glory she gave me and the simple happiness. How can a pair of wings pursue two things! I also missed the spring of wearing green clothes countless times, missed her fragrance and missed her face.

The West Lake was silent. It quietly looked at the people sitting under the tree, the people walking by the lake, and the dreamer. The West Lake gives incense to those who smell it, rain to those who hear it, wind to those who catch the wind, beauty and sadness to those who feel heartache, and people who wander around to kill time. There is only one kind of people who can't give anything to the West Lake, that is, people who love each other hand in hand in the sun. They walked hand in hand under the willow waves, and they sat hand in hand at the top of the leaves. From morning till night, from flower to flower, until the darkness faints in the starry sky, youth is still awake.

On a sunny afternoon in March, the dream in the sun is as light as a petal cloud, like a flower falling gently and slowly, and the enlarged spring is filled. The sunshine wrinkled the lake, just like you were playing with this old jade. There is no need to prove that you are carefree and in a daze. This moment of life is definitely yours.

You have a faint dream, you dream that there are apricot flowers and misty rain in the south of the Yangtze River, you dream that the moon is harvested in the deep courtyard, and you dream of smelling the past. Dreams are lighter than falling flowers, and their hearts are softened. Only then can the weight of reality turn into the light of dreams, step on the steps of rainbows, and go to the spiritual holy land.

People think that having a dream is actually just wearing a fashionable dress. When you really have your own dream, life will be wonderful. Even if it is pitifully small, like a crystal ball, it still shines consciously, because it declares that you are water. The swaying branches of willows hang lazily to the surface of the water, but they can't catch the sunset in the water after all, but they arouse the sunshine to flow out gorgeous ripples in a lake.

Daydream faded, faded, and in the evening it quietly absorbed its color and gradually darkened. Night dreams wake up in the morning and daydreams wake up in the evening. At this point, there is some mysterious ceremony hidden.

Daydreaming can't be blackened by knowledge bleached hair, but I won't regret it either. We create because of dreams, and we continue our dreams because of creation. Between the beginning and the beginning, the era of love has gone, and the West Lake is still a silent background and a secular paradise.

Today, when I stand at a new starting point, what I can't take away is the complex I left in the West Lake, those moments related to missing. I picked up my washed body and mind from the West Lake and let it fall deep into the bottom of the lake and float lightly on the water. "

Discussion results:

Health 1: The article "West Wind Populus euphratica" is full of praise in the description of Populus euphratica, expressing emotions through discussion, such as "Populus euphratica is the toughest tree I have ever seen in my life." There are also imaginative pictures to express their feelings, such as: "Until one day, the moved God suddenly saw this beautiful, loyal and blue-black tree species and asked: Who are you? There are countless voices in the fierce west wind: I am Populus euphratica. "

Student 2: In addition to the description of feelings, Silent West Lake contains many sentences and paragraphs that directly express feelings, such as "Today, when I stand at a new starting point, I can't take away the complex that I stayed in the West Lake, those moments related to my thoughts. I picked up the washed body and mind from the West Lake and let it fall deep into the bottom of the lake and float lightly on the water. "

Teacher's summary:

No matter what scenery you write, you should write your own true feelings. In the relationship between scenery and emotion, emotion is the first. We should choose and write scenes according to the needs of emotional expression, not express our feelings according to the needs of writing scenes. This should be clear to everyone. Facing the same scenery, because of different feelings, the characteristics of the scenery described are also different. This difference is mainly manifested in writing scenes with different emotional words and expressions, which are full of feelings.

Please describe Autumn in Campus according to the following different emotional needs.

Emotional requirements for writing: 1. Joey. 2. sadness.

Health 1: The campus in autumn is also poetic. The leaves turned yellow and became naughty. From time to time, they float over the faces of students studying under trees, and even a few pieces stop on their hair, which makes people laugh. The leaves seem to be playing with the students sweeping the floor under the tree on purpose. Just after sweeping the floor, it was soon covered with leaves. Really naughty! I like the autumn colors on campus.

Student 2: The campus in autumn is sad. All the leaves turned yellow and kept falling. The campus road is full of dead leaves and debris. Walking on it is accompanied by squeaking and crushing, which makes people feel very cold. A gust of wind blew, and the residual leaves on the ground danced with the wind, which made people confused. After a while, it began to rain in Mao Mao again on campus, and I couldn't help shivering.

Teacher's summary: the description of the scenery has been expanded and deepened. 1. There must be someone at the scene. The expansion and deepening of scenery description II: association and imagination.