Evaluation of sixth grade scene description composition

1. Comments on the composition of scene description, 2. The description of the scene and atmosphere adds a lot of color to the article; ... a brief description of the wonderful place; The simple introduction of the combination of point and surface naturally transitions to the next paragraph; Situation description causes suspense; Make full use of language, action and psychological description to make things concrete and visual. Briefly describe the cause and effect and pave the way. Dialogue or some psychological description can be added to this part. It is more appropriate to change … to …, which is a natural link between the preceding and the following. The detailed description highlights the quality of the characters and is touching. Narrative setting, comparison between people, comparison between hearts. The personified language makes the article more vivid. The shape description is very interesting. It highlights the loveliness of. The introduction is infectious. It adopts the method of enumerating figures and giving examples, which is very vivid. Transition is natural, and every paragraph is explained clearly. This part refers to the examples in the article. The language is too flat and can be modified appropriately to make it more vivid. It vividly shows the beauty of literary works by using rhetorical devices such as metaphor and personification. This part can also be written. My humble opinion. Performing ... using metaphors accurately. Coupled with the association of ancient poetry, it is full of charm ... and ... form a sharp contrast, which is impressive. The metaphor ... is skillfully used and described in detail. Childish language is very interesting. The role behavior is increased to make the picture vivid. This article fully and properly exaggerates ... and describes the main points of the article delicately and vividly ... With lofty ideas, it will be great ... practical, containing simple and profound philosophy, which makes people feel refreshed and passionate when reading ... The close-up is unique and interesting. The full text is full of childlike innocence, which makes people feel more cordial to read. This article is full of * * *, and the little author's love ... can be understood between the lines. It's very interesting, which is in the same strain as the previous metaphor … Finally, the author expressed his feelings for … in a few words, which is touching. The language of the article is fresh and lively, and the description can grasp the main characteristics of things. Short and pithy, it is worth reading. The language of the article is easy to understand, close to the reality of life and friendly to read. The beginning of the article is novel, which has the effect of pulling one hair and moving the whole body, so that readers can produce characters as soon as they meet. Form a complete image. The article can be described in fresh and interesting language … the lines are full of childlike interest and endless laughter in childhood, which is a masterpiece. Proper details and the combination of reality and fiction are two characteristics of this article, and the content of … is more vivid. Make full use of the combination of static and dynamic writing, supplemented by metaphor, personification and other methods, through vivid language. It makes readers feel as if they are in a dream. The praise of the characters at the end is sincere and touching. Paying attention to specific things and developing appropriate imagination is the success of this paper. The article is full of emotion, lyrical and picturesque, and is good at using metaphors to make the article vivid and concrete, which makes people unbearable.

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2. Composition evaluation How to write the composition evaluation of the sixth grade in primary school is the teacher's evaluation of students' homework, which provides a platform for improving students' homework level. How to use this platform? I will offer some suggestions:

It is often said that a compliment can warm a winter. A teacher's comment full of affectionate encouragement and praise is a good medicine to cure students' "headache" and "upset" in writing, and it is also a sweet and far-reaching "sugar-coated tablet".

There is a child in the class who is very clever, but afraid of writing. Once, I asked to write about a classmate, and he wrote "A Funny Man" seriously. The composition begins with a question and answer, then tells a funny story, and finally reveals the mystery. It turns out that this funny person is himself.

Obviously, this does not meet the requirements of this exercise, but this composition is really good. So I wrote this comment: "1. Outstanding advantages: the article is novel and fascinating. It is suggested that after printing, the teacher help you contribute! 2. Friendly reminder: if you write yourself so well, then from another angle, with your discerning eye, you can certainly write your classmates' well, right? Don't believe me, give it a try! "

3. composition evaluation, the first volume of grade six, I think your opinion is also quite good. Let me talk about how I will write a composition evaluation:

I. Benefits

1. structure. Does it echo from beginning to end, get to the point, attract attention at the beginning, deepen the theme at the end, etc. You should use popular words to express your comments, otherwise you are afraid that students will not understand and understand;

2. Sentences, idioms, words and other content. Because we should not only praise good sentences, but also praise the use of idioms and good words;

3. Rhetoric. Including metaphor, personification, parallelism and other common expression skills of primary school students, if used, we should also praise them;

4. Punctuation. If the whole composition or most punctuation marks are used correctly, praise them;

5. Whether the central idea is clear and the content is off topic;

6. Whether the handwriting is neat. It is necessary to cultivate students' awareness of neat handwriting. If their handwriting looks neat, it should also be praised.

Second, shortcomings.

1. Accordingly, we should praise the advantages and put forward the disadvantages. Don't be afraid to criticize children. What we should cultivate most is the consciousness of knowing and correcting mistakes. Of course, praising advantages is more important. After all, to cultivate students' interest, we must not let them lose the motivation to write!

2. According to the actual situation of the composition, the disadvantages may include the opposite of the above advantages.

4. How to instruct sixth grade primary school students to write activity scene compositions? A few days ago in physical education class, because the PE teacher was absent, the Chinese teacher led us to play two small games in the classroom.

The first game is called "Draw Nose". The teacher first drew some faces without noses on the blackboard, then collected some red scarves and asked Wang Yingjie and other students to draw noses on their faces with chalk. First, let them choose a face without a nose in front of the blackboard, and then draw their noses with a red scarf.

We watched them draw noses under the stage. The game of drawing nose begins. Some people draw their noses above their faces, some people draw their ears, and some people draw their eyebrows. We burst into laughter under the podium.

The second game is called "The blind catch the lame". The teacher made two students lame, tied one hand and one leg with a red scarf, one student was blind, let the two lame beat the blind, and let the blind catch the lame.

The game has begun. The lame attacked the blind one by one, and the blind man was dizzy and could not catch it. Later, the blind man thought for a moment, jumped in one direction and caught a man.

We applauded below and admired his cleverness. Through this game, I understand two things: 1. How important eyes are to us. Without eyes, we lose our direction, our light and our beautiful world.

Therefore, we must protect our eyes. Whatever you do, be careful and don't be reckless. When you can't tell the direction of things accurately, you should be good at using your other organs and use your wisdom to analyze and think carefully before you act.

5. Quickly describe the activity scene in composition evaluation and pay attention to the activities of the characters. Scene description is a description of character activities in a specific environment, mainly a "dynamic" description centered on character activities.

Therefore, the focus of scene description is not on the surrounding environment, but on the activities of the characters, showing the relationship between the characters and showing their mental outlook. Take the text "The Five Heroes of Langya Mountain" as an example. After completing the cover task, the five heroes moved in the direction of lotus petals and chessboard tuo on three cliffs, leading the enemy to a dead end, and then jumped off the cliffs one after another and sacrificed heroically.

The focus of the author's description is obviously not cliffs and deep valleys, but the heroic actions and unyielding voices of the five strong men, which fully embodies their fearless revolutionary spirit. Second, we should prioritize and sort out clues. Regardless of the size of the scene, there are often many people and many things.

Therefore, it is necessary to sort out the clue, have a master and a follower, have a detailed description, and have a hierarchical and orderly description. For example, at the end of the article "Flying over the Luding Bridge", the battle scene of "The Red Fourth Regiment launched a general attack" was written: First, the head of the regiment and the political commissar personally commanded; Then, inspired by the trumpeter's horn, "so the weapons fired together", and the loud noise shook the valley; So, how did the Second Commando Twelve company of heroes rush to the other side? Finally, how "Three Soldiers Company" paved the way for progress.

Although the incident was complicated, the author mainly wrote about the soldiers rushing to the front line, and most of the rest were briefly mentioned. The description of the scene should not be demanding and fragmented.

Third, to write about the atmosphere of a specific occasion, any scene is unfolded in a specific atmosphere, and there is no scene without a specific atmosphere. Scene description requires describing the activities of characters in a certain environment, so as to show a specific occasion and a happy or sad atmosphere.

Writing the atmosphere of a scene is actually writing about the activities and feelings of people in the scene. Fourth, we should combine points and surfaces. A scene consists of many people and things, and the narrative can be combined with points and surfaces.

Describe the whole scene first, and then write a few representative people or things. This can not only give people a complete impression, but also have a concrete feeling.

When describing the scene, we should try our best to combine point with surface. If you use pen and ink on average, you can only.

6. How to write the Mid-Autumn Festival family composition in Unit 4, Volume 1, Grade 6?

Now I try to buy more things for my grandparents every time I go back to my hometown. I am well aware of their tastes and preferences. Every Mid-Autumn Festival, I miss my grandparents in my hometown very much, especially when I see the green silk and red silk in the moon cakes. I especially miss them, those who spent the Mid-Autumn Festival together, those poor, simple and warm Mid-Autumn Festival, those eternal moss and red silk. ...

In my childhood memory, the earliest impression is Zibo moon cakes, which are small and round, crisp and delicious. At that time, there were not many kinds of moon cakes, only brown sugar stuffing and white sugar stuffing, each with green and red silk in it and hidden in the middle of moon cakes.

I seldom ate moon cakes when I was a child. Half or one of them is symbolic, and the Mid-Autumn Festival is a reunion. This is naturally indispensable. Even poor families will buy a catty and a half. If you have a large population, share it. Everyone has a taste. This is a festival. When I was a child, I lived in my grandmother's house in a mountain village for a long time, where I spent every Mid-Autumn Festival. On the Mid-Autumn Festival, no matter how many mooncakes there are, I eat them first, because I don't like the green and red silk inside. It tastes strange. After I finish the pastry layer by layer, my grandparents will eat the remaining green silk and red silk. They said they loved those silks, which were the best. And my favorite rice, dog meat, biscuits and so on. What I like must be something they don't like, so I always eat alone and feel at ease.

Later, life became better and better, and there were more and more moon cakes. My grandparents only ate the whole moon cake. Later I learned that they also like rice, dog meat and biscuits. The secret was discovered before I got married. Grandpa went to town, and my mother added a second bowl of rice to grandpa. I reminded my mother that my grandfather didn't like rice and he was too sticky. Mom smiled: silly child, that's because I can't bear to eat. I quickly asked grandpa: Do you still like those moon cakes with green and red silk? Grandpa ha ha smiled: those filar silk, sandwiched in moon cakes, are not bad, can't eat any peculiar smell. It won't be delicious if you eat it alone. I see!

Now I try to buy more things for my grandparents every time I go back to my hometown. I am well aware of their tastes and preferences. Every Mid-Autumn Festival, I miss my grandparents in my hometown very much, especially when I see the green silk and red silk in the moon cakes. I especially miss them, spending the Mid-Autumn Festival together, the poor, simple and warm Mid-Autumn Festival, and those.

7. Evaluation on the Composition of Unit 1 of Grade 6 Chinese in People's Education Press. 1. Sentence: 1. The sentence is fluent, the sentence meaning is fluent, the text is beautiful, the narrative is vivid and vivid, and the language expression ability is strong.

2. The language is concise, to the point, to the point, concise and powerful, full of pen power, and a few words can convey the appearance of the characters. 3. The language is fluent, detailed and vivid; The meaning of the sentence is implicit and euphemistic, with profound implications.

After reading it, it is like a lingering fragrance after drinking. 4. The language is vivid and humorous, which makes people laugh.

5. The behavior description is accurate, and the verb series vividly highlights the psychological state of the characters and points out their personality characteristics. (1). The language is basically fluent, occasionally fluent.

(2) The language is not fluent enough, and the meaning of the sentence is vague and puzzling. (3) The statement was wordy, but it didn't convey the meaning. It's just detailed and verbose.

(4) The language is too brief, which looks like an outline narrative, but it fails to get an outline, with incomplete meaning and dull, dry and lifeless narrative. Second, the reason: 1. Repeatedly emphasize the author's point of view from different angles and aspects, with thorough reasoning and clear thinking.

2. Quoting famous sayings and classic examples is more convincing and can express the author's point of view more powerfully. 3. Strong arguments, thorough and reasonable analysis and strong philosophy.

4. Rich examples, proper selection and description are more convincing. (1). The logical reasoning ability is weak and the evidence is not conclusive enough.

(2) Failing to tell the truth, telling the truth, shaping the true personality and expressing the unique individual. Third, emotion: 1. Strong feelings, such as volcanic eruption, can deeply move readers.

2. Sincere feelings, strong feelings, like mellow wine, make people drunk if they don't drink it. 3. Emotions are true and natural, and there is no suspicion of affectation. Show your true feelings with a plain heart.

4. The mental journey is true and delicate, and the thoughts and attitudes of the characters are clear to the readers at a glance. The feelings are true and delicate, and the words are touching, which really comes from the author's heart.

6. Seek the gains and losses of life from self-reflection, reveal the true feelings in confession, and the words are powerful and shocking. (1). The language is simple, the feelings are dull, and the affection is not deep enough.

The emotion is too strong, as if there is no emotion. On the contrary, they are coquettish and complacent. ⑶. Emotion lacks depth, fails to convey feelings through scenes, and fails to generate feelings from events. Although feelings are hidden in words, they fail to dig deep.

(4) Psychological depiction is not vivid and concrete enough to effectively express the characters' thoughts, attitudes and likes and dislikes. Material selection: 1. Be able to choose typical themes in life, and events are more representative.

2. The selection of materials is novel and unique, not mediocre, and it is refreshing to sweep away pedantry. 3. Although it describes ordinary things, the analysis is thorough and reasonable, and the rational excavation is in-depth, which highlights the essence of the event.

Although the incident is small, it reflects profound truth and has certain universality. 5. Multi-angle material selection fully reflects the personality characteristics of the characters, and the characters are full.

(1). The selection of materials is too popular and unrepresentative, and the old themes and ideas are unremarkable. ⑵. Although the events with certain narrative value in life are selected, the hidden truth of the events cannot be deeply reflected due to the incomplete analysis and excavation.

(3) The selection of materials is dull, too old, vulgar, simple and naive, and there is no new idea, so it is difficult to profoundly reflect the times and authenticity of life. (4) Failing to reflect the truth through trivial matters, and using the expression of "seeing the big from the small" is not skilled enough.

5. Lack of multi-angle description of the characters, only a narrow theme is selected, showing the one-sided personality characteristics of the characters. IV. Theme: 1. Focus, clear center, clear thinking.

2. Clear views, clear likes and dislikes, making people clear at a glance. 3. Directly highlight the theme in the content, clear and to the point, without redundancy.

4. The theme is serious, the thought is noble, and the enterprise is strong. (1). The center is not clear enough and the concept is not clear enough.

⑵. The theme is obscure, the meaning is vague, and the purpose of writing is unknown. (3) Although there is a central theme, the expression is not strong enough, but it is empty and powerless.

The theme is not serious enough, and there are still dross in thought. V. Plot: 1. The plot twists and turns, and the narrative process has a certain sense of ups and downs, which embodies the curve beauty of the plot and is fascinating.

2. The plot is strong in faltering, and there are accidents at ordinary times, which can attract readers' attention. 3. The plot changes unconventional, with occasional suspense, waves and surprises. The development process of the event embodies the author's innovative ideas.

(1). The plot develops smoothly and lacks certain ups and downs. (2) The plot changes are unremarkable and lack new ideas.

(3) The plot is straightforward and there is no suspense, just like keeping a running account. (4) The process is detailed, but the ending is short and incomplete.

The structure is unreasonable, giving people the feeling of anticlimactic. 5. The idea is unreasonable and the content is full of loopholes, which can't reflect the truth of life.

[6]. The plot fluctuates greatly, and the conversion is too fast and not coherent enough. 6. Rhetoric: 1 The metaphor is vivid, vivid and appropriate, and the ontology is similar to the metaphor, which greatly enhances the interest and persuasiveness of the article.

2. Appropriate use of contrast, comparison and other methods, through the disparity and differences between things, effectively prove the center of the article. 3. Taking advantage of parallelism to explain the characteristics of things in many ways not only enhances the language potential, but also leaves a very deep impression on readers.

4. Using personification skillfully, the images in the text have the characteristics of human behavior, thoughts and feelings, and reflect the spiritual course of the protagonist in the text from the side. 7. Content: 1. The content is close to modern life, novel and unique, grasping the pulse of the times and showing the flavor of the times.

2. The context is clear, the sense of hierarchy is strong, and the narrative is orderly and not chaotic. 3. Proper details, clear priorities and clear thinking.

Carefully selected, the material seems to be tailor-made for the theme. 4. The narrative is detailed and concrete, the details are vivid and vivid, the characters are vivid and prominent, and the images are full and vivid.

5. Use the environment to set off the emotions of the characters, and the scenes blend, the feelings are in the scene, and the scene is in the scene. 6. Rich imagination, strange ideas, not divorced from the truth of life, tied with the association of life, broaden the reader's thinking and make people feel lively and interesting.

7. Scenery description is vivid and lifelike, words and sentences are appropriate, scenes are born together, and scenes blend together, just like a vivid sketch painting presented to readers. 8. Imagination is wonderful. It not only comes from life, but also transcends life, broadens readers' horizons and is full of artistic charm.

9. The description of the event process is detailed and concrete, although there are many contents, it seems.