Read the ninth chapter of "Ordinary World" and learn from Mr. Lu Yao to write scenes.

The above picture is about scene description, which mainly emphasizes three points: 1: the center of many characters' activities; 2. The sum of various descriptions; 3. The use of various descriptive techniques. Point-surface combination is a general method of scene description.

Let's look at the scene description in this chapter. "In a short time, the yard was crowded with people. Migrant workers from other villages are at the southern end of the yard, usually crowded with villagers. People in Shuangshui Village are at the northern end of the yard, with adults and dolls sandwiched together and standing and sitting, making a noise like a pot of boiling water. "

This is a general description of the scene, belonging to the description of the face. At first glance, in the past, "water is filled … some …, some …, like a pot of boiling water" in practical application, this sentence pattern can be directly applied.

This picture is about a "clothing promotion" scene. Let's imitate the sentence pattern of Lu Yao and write: "I heard that the' promotion activity' is in the sinking square, and I also rushed there with my children, hoping to find some cheap brand clothes for my children. I can't wait to see the top of the sinking square. " Oh, this fight! "I saw crowds, bustling and packed! There are shouts of adults and cries of children, which overflow like a pot of boiled water. "

Scene description should leave a deep impression on readers and make people feel immersive. It is inseparable from the description of points, and concrete and vivid points can make the scene come alive. The description of the point is actually the description of a single character. For example, "the daughters-in-law of the Kim family are all dressed neatly, and their sitting posture is more in line with the rural ethics: they can't be jealous in public." You can laugh, but you can't open your mouth like a kiln mouth. When sitting, keep your knees together and don't cross your legs. There are also some young women in the Kim family who don't care about this, making their mothers or mother-in-law give warnings from time to time in the crowd. In addition, women in other families are not bound by this, talking and laughing and fighting, just like going to the market. There are also some bold lovers who take advantage of the chaos, make eyes at each other without saying anything, and even steal to pinch. Most men have a dry smoking pot, which dazzles the clouds around the yard. Some overworked cultivators slept on the land regardless of their decent legs. "

This paragraph is mainly a description of the point, in which the description of women takes the form of discussion. For us, it seems that women with correct sitting posture have nothing to write about. However, by discussing and imagining the negative images of women, Mr. Lu Yao compared them with the women of the Kim family, setting off their specific images of obeying the rules. Occasionally, those who violate the rules will be warned by their mother-in-law to look down upon them.

There are still many points in the scene description imagined by the author, such as bold love, confusion, flirting, fighting and kicking.

We continue to work hard to write the main points of the "clothing promotion" meeting:

Zhang San squeezed into the checkout line, holding a lot of clothes in his arms. As the team moved forward a little bit, he sometimes turned around and called his girlfriend "Hurry up, check out soon." Her best friend agreed, but she didn't look up. She just rummaged through all kinds of clothes, hoping to find more before checking out. They are neither too tired nor too crowded, as long as they can save money. The elegance and nobility of women who don't try on branded clothes in the mall.