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The child is about to enter junior high school with limited level. When a child writes a composition, he always finds it difficult to help, and the whole family has a headache.

Occasionally, I broke into a group of kung fu compositions and listened to the teacher telling me how to write a composition, which was too rewarding.

Taking classes is really a pleasure. Listening to classes is very exciting. According to the teacher's method, the children have made a lot of progress.

I can't help but send some courseware compiled by my mother to share with you.

First, cultivate children and help horses to ride.

The ancients used to talk about "six arts": ceremony, music, shooting, imperial, calligraphy and counting. One of the books includes a composition. Writing is a headache for many children; In many adult worlds, the most unpleasant thing you may encounter may include writing. Therefore, language communication and written expression are not only related to children's short-term exam credits, but also related to the basic skills that adults need in their study, work and life.

Before, maybe your child had a problem with his composition. Before this, you may have let your children read a lot of extracurricular books, or you may have planned or signed up for a composition improvement class for your children. But the problem has not been satisfactorily solved.

Although there are skills and methods in composition, I especially want to say: the quickest and most beneficial way is for you to study with your children. Your small changes will bring great progress to your children.

If you want to solve your child's composition problem, it depends on whether you are willing to make this small change. If you are still a pickpocket like you used to be, buy a lot of extracurricular books for him to absorb alone, or throw him into an extracurricular study class and pay for it yourself. Then all you find is to wear new shoes and take the old road. If you don't even want to play a supporting role well, then for the protagonist-our children, his play will not be wonderful. Parental education is the most responsible and economical education.

Of course, studying with children doesn't mean asking you to write a good article yourself. But do you know what a good composition is? Do you know how to judge a child's composition? Generally speaking, you are not required to eat pork, but you must have seen pigs run. Help the child get on the horse and let him ride. People who help children mount horses don't have to learn to ride horses. Our parents' knowledge level is the children's composition level. Because you have a high level of knowledge, high requirements, and a high eye for writing and questions, it is of great help to children. We can't be cadres or heads of households.

A mother said: my child's composition was very good in elementary school, but not in junior high school; I have seen some primary school students' compositions, which are well written and well organized, but they just can't get into the teacher's eyes. In junior high school, almost all the essays written in the blink of an eye are model essays in the class.

These two phenomena are actually the same problem.

A common reason is that primary school, junior high school and even senior high school have different requirements and standards for composition. Good words and sentences are the main requirements of good composition in primary schools. Junior high school requires higher requirements, reasonable structure and smooth expression. In high school, the requirements for composition are relatively complete. From this point of view, children can simply see the basic characteristics of composition after learning Chinese for nearly ten years. How many detours did you take during this period? How many roads did you lose?

In order to write a good composition, we have found many answers: read more books, accumulate more, observe more and practice more-when we walk into any clinic, the "doctor" will prescribe this kind of similar "prescription" for us. This medicine can't claim to cure all diseases, but it can't kill people. Do our children read many books? Is there much homework? Is the homework tight? See more! Lots of homework! The homework is very tight. But what about the composition level? This superficial method is not the right way to solve the problem. Then it is necessary to overthrow, break, find new methods, start over and rebuild the system.

Where to start writing a composition? Please look at today's content:

Any talking child can write a good composition!

Why should writing a composition start with speaking? Science and technology, science and technology. Language expression and written expression are the same in theory, but they are different in text. But the truth is reasonable. If you say it smoothly, it must be logical to write it out.

Writing begins with talking. This method is so simple that some people don't like it. This is a strange disease. Many mothers have to use a mysterious theory to believe it. There is no profound theory here.

Listen to the children's language, how rich and wonderful it is. We should encourage more and criticize less. Guide more, sell less. Let children forget good language.

As long as a child can talk, he can certainly write a composition. The reason is simple, but it must be cultivated.

There are roughly four stages in writing a composition: speaking a composition, reciting a draft, writing a draft, and revising and refining-"the article is never tired of changing."

From the beginning, words are closed, not necessarily in the mouth, but in the heart. This is called back.

The next stage, written on paper, is called the draft. We are not cultivating Shakespeare and Tolstoy; We are not cultivating talents and writers. It's impossible to say it, but I wrote it as soon as I started writing. Therefore, now, no matter whether children don't go to school, primary school or junior high school, they should start training from this aspect, say it first, then speak from the heart, and finally write it out.

I once knew a child whose composition was a mess. I tutored him for the first time, and the topic of my composition was "My Mother". So I asked my parents to go out. I talked to the child alone, asked him how his mother was, and told him not to write. What the child said was so touching. Usually naughty, but I remember all my mother's efforts. The mother is eavesdropping outside, crying! Again, no; Say it again, twice, three times, and it's formed. Let him write it again. This composition became a model essay for the whole class, which touched a lot.

What is the secret of reading?

I remember one year's college entrance examination composition topic was about digging wells. A person didn't dig deep, but dug a lot, so he couldn't drink a mouthful of water. Another person, going deep into a subject, digs a well to drink water. Reading is the same as digging a well. It is said that some children can read several world famous books a month. What good results can you see from reading like this? The difference between reading and reading is that water must be dug out of the well. Don't dig today, dig tomorrow It seems that I read a lot, but my income is limited.

This is the relationship between reading and reading. Reading is to look at ten lines at a glance, and reading is to choose words carefully; Reading is a way of reading while lying in bed or going to the toilet. Reading is a way of reading that requires us to sit down and experience. Reading is a kind of elimination, a kind of killing time, and a way of reading when we are sitting in the car to and from work. Reading is not to kill time, but to catch up with time; Reading, we can relax freely, watch TV while reading, chat while reading, relax, read, and ask for calm down and quiet consideration; Reading is just a superficial feeling, such as reading jokes, news and gossip. Reading is to feel, understand and ponder with something deep in your heart. Reading, after reading, becomes a past tense, and what can be remembered naturally disappears. Reading is to capture the thoughts, wonderful chapters, words and profound thoughts in written language, so that you can remember them forever; Reading is the accumulation of knowledge at most, which is used for conversation after dinner. Reading is the accumulation of ability and the ability to cross and cross. The two must be distinguished.

What is the structure?

Read, analyze, appreciate and discover first, make clear the symmetrical words, symmetrical sentences and symmetrical paragraphs we say, and then discover them with children like playing games. After months or weeks of edification, we know the essence of the article, and it must be effective. Reading articles and improving them are one thing, not two things. Nowadays, many books about writing should be read more and accumulated more. The question is what to accumulate? Just now, writing, reading and analyzing are one thing. You can't read, how can you analyze it? If you can't analyze the structure, how can you learn yourself? How can I improve my understanding of the composition if I don't smoke? How can I improve my composition to a higher level? This is the same thing, don't separate. If you really analyze the article clearly with structural ideas, your reading ability will go up and your composition level will go up. This is one thing.

Secondly, we talked about composition or Chinese, which is a subject that can exercise logical thinking and image thinking at the same time. Image thinking and logical thinking. These two kinds of thinking abilities are two sides of the same problem. Only when logical thinking and image thinking are highly unified can our children have the ability of creative thinking. The article is reasonable. When we look at the three pools reflecting the moon, especially the structure of the painting, we will know that the description of the image is to establish a logical structure. Similarly, in logic, we have described images. This structure is a logical process. On the basis of this structure, what kind of image thinking, what kind of way and what kind of words are used is the problem of style. You can be simple, gorgeous, and simply decorated to show logic-truth; You can also decorate it luxuriously to show your image-literary talent; Can also be mixed, each with its own emphasis. There is a mother who talks about the pastoral prose in April, which is too extravagant. This is only the difference of people's styles, that is, the difference of decoration, which will not affect the stability of the original structure of the composition. This structure, from primary school composition to middle school composition, and even all subsequent compositions, is a main line. Whether it is prose, argumentative or narrative, this main line is needed.

Third, in order to have a deeper understanding of the structure, we must understand the meaning of symmetry. Symmetry is the most commonly used and basic expression in Chinese. In particular, we should know symmetrical words, symmetrical phrases, symmetrical sentences, symmetrical blocks and symmetrical paragraphs. The perceptual knowledge of these symmetries will help us to read, understand and read more deeply. Just like my mother said: learn your structure and symmetry, and you will have eyes. We understand that symmetry is really like opening an eye, and we can find that symmetry is everywhere.

Fourth, only by knowing the symmetry can we understand the beauty and rhythm of the article.

"Spring has come, the grass has turned green, the young trees have grown tall, and the sun is shining warmly on the earth."

There is asymmetry in symmetry, especially the phrase "the sun", which has a long and short rhythm.

Let's take a look at "From Herb Garden to San Tan Yin Yue", which is the same. Symmetry is neither a neat antithesis nor a couplet. There is asymmetry in symmetry just for rhythm.

In fact, we talked a lot about how to read. We talked about structure and symmetry, and many mothers were particularly moved. With this structure, it is called guidance. Suddenly, I found many things in the article, which turned out to be so meaningful and worth pondering!

Composition comment: Hail.

Original text:

On 20 10, when the summer vacation came, there was a once-in-a-century hail.

It was a day in July. In the afternoon, I found the sky getting gloomy. Blink of an eye, more and more dark clouds piled up into a thick quilt, covering the world tightly. Dark clouds covered our heads like a black pot. Alas! The cloudless morning in Wan Li is now dark, the earth is lifeless, and the home is dark.

At this time, a gust of wind blew, and the wind blew harder and harder. The scraped trees shook desperately, as if to be pulled out of the soil, and the scraped leaves seemed to be flying in the wind. Suddenly, a white light flashed across the black sky. Deafening thunder rolled over our heads like wheels, and bean-sized raindrops fell from the sky.

The weather plummeted and raindrops turned into hail, as big as broad beans. They are jumping around on the ground like naughty children. The hail is getting bigger and bigger, some as big as table tennis. It was really scary. Fortunately, it stopped soon.

At this time, the sky began to clear up and a rainbow appeared in the distant sky. Walking out of the house, I saw the hail on the road lying quietly in the corner, shining like a bright pearl under the sunlight. The children all came out to pick up the hail and put it in their palms, watching it slowly turn into water and flow away from the edge of their palms, laughing happily. An old man walking by me shook his head and said to himself, "It happens once in a hundred years, alas! The crops cannot be saved. " I thought to myself, we are teenagers who don't know what trouble is.

Out of curiosity, I went home and looked up the encyclopedia. Oh! I finally understand that the formation of hail is due to the repeated circulation of strong airflow, which makes the ice layer accumulate around the ice crystals, which makes the ice crystals thicker and the hail volume increases, thus forming hail blocks to fall down.

Comments:

I want to comment on this composition in another way, and I can't comment. The emphasis is on inspiration and interest. I am imagining that he is my child. He must be very pure and naughty. From the text, I can see that the child is very clever. Therefore, as a father, I also treat cleverness with cleverness.

He is smart, and I am smart. I must be willing to learn to write a composition and open the way of children's thinking.

During the summer holidays of 1 and 20 10, there was a once-in-a-century hail. I will ask the child, baby, where did this big hail come from? Tell me, please tell me. Why didn't you even say a place? Are you afraid of the parents coming out? Still afraid of revealing secrets? This is definitely not a state secret, but it is also a local secret.

It was a day in July. On the occasion of summer vacation, one day in July. Son, you underestimated your father. During the summer vacation, one day in July, do you really think I don't know? Do I need to say it twice?

In the afternoon, I found that the sky became gloomy. Blink of an eye, more and more dark clouds piled up into a thick quilt, covering the world tightly. This father wants to give praise, how is it the same as saying "black heart cotton"? Very well described.

Dark clouds cover our heads like a black pot. The cloudless morning in Wan Li is now dark, the earth is lifeless, and the home is dark.

Dark clouds covered our heads like a black pot. Son, I often use this icon in groups. It turns out that there are clouds on my head. This description must be awesome. Encourage, so that children will boldly write bold expressions. )

Alas! Son, why are you sighing? Didn't it say in the article? I thought to myself, we are teenagers who don't know the taste of sadness. It is cute for children to sigh and mature as teenagers.

It's dark at home, too God, did mom and dad scold you and hit you? It is so dark at home. Oh, seeing this darkness, how can I think of crows all over the world? Mom and dad are the sunniest.

At this time, a gust of wind blew, and the wind blew harder and harder. Isn't it a gust of wind, son? How can there be growth? It will be windy for at least a few days.

6. The scraped tree shook desperately, as if it were to be pulled out of the soil, and the scraped leaves seemed to fly away from the branches in the wind. Write well, with momentum, mind and realm.

7. Suddenly, a white light flashed across the black sky. Deafening thunder rolled over our heads like wheels, and bean-sized raindrops fell from the sky. It's well written and powerful. Great! Fortunately, my car is not a tractor, otherwise the noise will be even louder.

8. The weather has plummeted. Is it the weather? Or temperature or clouds? Don't get me wrong, I'm assuming a background. Is how to encourage children to learn how to write in happiness. As long as children dare to say, we adults will dare to boast. No criticism. Criticism is also entertainment. Let the children correct in laughter. )

9. Raindrops turn into hail and fall. How did it change? Son, how did the raindrops as big as beans suddenly turn into hail as big as beans? It's a little fast.

10, each as big as a broad bean. They are like naughty children jumping around on the ground, which is a good metaphor. Encourage! But dad can't help asking, how old is this child?

1 1. The hail is getting bigger and bigger, and some are as big as table tennis. If it was only three months ago, it might have been four months now. Son, as long as you are naughty, dad is not afraid. Naughty is good for your health and mind. Eat it. It smells good.

12, really scary. Fortunately, it stopped soon. How can naughty children be scary? Son, I know your psychological quality is excellent. You just gave you a fright and stopped the hail. Have you ever used your dad's housekeeping skills?

13. At this time, the sky began to clear up and a rainbow appeared in the distant sky. When I walked out of the house, I saw the hail on the road lying quietly in the corner, shining like a bright pearl under the sunlight. The children all came out to pick up the hail and put it in their palms, watching it slowly turn into water and flow away from the edge of their palms, laughing happily. The writing is great, which is a sign of virginity. I like your behavior of expressing your thoughts at what age.

13, an old man walking by me shook his head and said to himself, "It's a once-in-a-century thing, alas! The crops cannot be saved. " I thought to myself, we are teenagers who don't know what trouble is. Son, you sighed in front, saying that teenagers don't know the taste of sorrow?

You are clearly saying that the old man "didn't know the taste of sadness until his later years". Teenagers don't know the taste of sorrow and fall in love with the floor. Old people know the taste of sadness and want to talk.

Out of curiosity, I went home and looked up the encyclopedia. Ask if you don't understand, and check if you don't understand. Great, son. Son, will you use Baidu or Google? I'll teach you when I have time.

14, oh! I finally understand that the formation of hail is due to the repeated circulation of strong airflow, which makes the ice layer accumulate around the ice crystals, which makes the ice crystals thicker and the hail volume increase. Well, it is great to write something about popular science and hail from another angle.

15, the hail volume increases, thus forming hail falling. I am a little tongue-tied when I read this sentence. Is it going to fly? Son, I didn't bring you to write this composition to make up the numbers.

Apple-composition review

Let's start the lecture. This afternoon we plan to talk about two things: one is about a child's composition, and the other is about the later teaching arrangements.

Let's talk about the first content first. A few days ago, I typed a composition by hand on the spot, called "Apple". This essay question was written by a mother in the group. Today, my mother sent me her child's revised composition. Now, let's have a look. It should be emphasized that this composition is not perfect, nor is it impeccable. We should hold an encouraging heart and give applause to our children. Next, look at the child's composition, which is well written.

apple

Apple is a very common fruit, which is inexpensive and can be eaten all year round. But in my heart, Apple represents the joy of our family and has many happy memories.

A few years ago, my teacher asked me to write a composition about apples. In order to make me write well, my mother made a choice and bought me a big and red apple. This apple is as big as a ball, red and purple, and has a strong fragrance. In order for me to describe the dynamic apple, my mother rolled the apple back and forth on the dining table. Suddenly, the apple fell to the ground and broke into several petals. My mother and I were taken aback. We looked at the broken apples on the ground and looked at each other. We couldn't help laughing.

Another time, my mother taught me to peel apples with a fruit knife. My mother peeled the skin very long, all the way to the middle. I have studied it for a long time, but the peeled skin is thick and always broken, like digging a ditch in an apple. Finally, I slapped the knife and the apple angrily and gave up studying. At this moment, mother said, "Look, son, I'll show you a magic trick." Mother put the apples across the table, from top to bottom. I was surprised to find that the apple core is a beautiful five-pointed star, brown with a little black and thin sharp corners. I'm getting interested. I cut several apples horizontally and found that they were all beautiful five-pointed stars. It turns out that the shape of apple core is so beautiful. No wonder the West calls Apple "the fruit of wisdom"!

The year before last, during the swine flu epidemic, I caught a cold. Before I could get well, my mother was ill again. In the evening, my mother lay in bed and said to me, "Son, my mother is really uncomfortable." I listened. I danced on purpose and pretended to gloat. Mom smiled with anger, and so did dad. Dad asked me to peel apples for my mother. I brought apples and a fruit knife, and then I brought a pocket trash can. Mother said in surprise, "son, do you want to put apples in the dustbin for me?" I laughed and coughed with laughter. He coughed and said, "What, I use it to pack apple peels." I peeled my skin, fed it to my mother with a toothpick, and coveted my father from time to time. The room is full of laughter and warmth.

Although there are many precious and exotic fruits in the world, my favorite is apple, because it is not only a kind of fruit, but also carries a lot of joy.

Let's have a look. What's good about this composition? A few days ago, I wrote a story about "Apple", which was caused by a child's composition. When the child writes about apples, he writes about apples. You may also see from the previous plot that the child's mother asked the child to write an apple and specially took an apple for the child to observe. However, it can be said that this idea is wrong. It is wrong to guide children by observing apples when writing apples. In other words, we want children to observe more. What do you mean, profound? With your eyes? No!

Let's look at the original text again. We thought it was vivid at first, but why and where is it vivid? It doesn't make sense. Now let's look back and see what we saw, heard, tasted and thought of. Please go back and have a look.

Everyone found it relatively. Why is it vivid? Did you find out the truth? We talked about vividness. What should I do if my child's composition is not vivid? Six roots and six dust! This is the solution, that is to say, when we guide our children to write a composition, we can't just ask them what they saw. We should also guide him and think about it-what did he hear, smell, taste and think of? In addition, ask deeply-what did you hear, what did you hear? What do you smell? What do you smell like? What did you taste? What do you taste like? To give a simple example: the apple I smell has a sweet taste, but there is also a faint fragrance in this sweetness, just like wine. Compared with beer and liquor, it lasts longer than the former, but it is not as strong as the latter. "It is longer than the former, but not as strong as the latter", and it is very vivid to use the taste of wine as a reference and metaphor.

This is a way for us to write the shape of an apple. Now, the children's compositions have been revised and greatly improved. Where is the improvement? It is from just writing "Apple" to writing "Apple Story". Simply writing about apples is vivid, but the story of apples is more touching. No story, no emotion. Therefore, when guiding children, don't rush to start with the details, first guide from the general direction. Is it interesting to say that everyone writes about apples and describes that there are more flowers than flowers? Besides describing apples, we should also write stories about apples. That's even deeper.

Let's look at the end again: Although there are many precious and exotic fruits in the world, I like apples best, because it is not only a kind of fruit, but also carries a lot of happiness. After listening to what we said, we won't know until the end. Because of the story, the ending is interesting, right? Conversely, if we don't have a story, we only have a description of Apple, and finally. What will we get in the end _-Apple, Apple, you are a good apple! Is this ending interesting? Therefore, many mothers are anxious to ask, what should children do if their composition is not well conceived? There must be stories in my mind, no stories, only apples, and the final result can only be: apples, apples, my favorite! Does anyone laugh?

In the past two days, I have talked about a theme, that is, helping horses to ride. Do your duty to your children, you can't be a parent, you can't be the head of the household. Can you pretend to dance and write? This is unnecessary, but what are our requirements? It's simple: I've never eaten pork, but I must have seen pigs run. Two days ago, my mother heard a small number of classmates say, I understand the reason, but it is still difficult to write at first. This is a problem. Now, we don't want you to play in disguise, we want you to be a coach. The coach is not directly involved in the competition, but the core and most valuable part of the coach is to know the rules of the competition or the competition. Tell a joke, let the coach participate in the competition, and the audience will think you are old; But let the coach direct the game, and the audience (children) will think you are experienced. To put it bluntly, it is a sentence: your position in children's writing! So, who is the child's teacher? The composition of famous writers is the teacher of children; The standard of a famous composition is the child's teacher; "I have never eaten pork. I have seen pigs run." -This "pig running" is the standard.

So what is the standard of a good composition?

Article 1: Tiger's head, pig's belly and leopard's tail-put mousse on the head and wax the shoes.

Because of the time, we will only make a brief explanation. The first general idea is that a whole article must pay attention to the relationship between head, body and feet. In a paragraph of an overall article, we must talk about the relationship between "wearing a hat", "dressing" and "overshooting".

Article 2: Discuss the present through the ancient times, and talk about heaven and earth-knowing astronomy above and geography below.

In a word, this topic is called "unwritten without classics". There is not a word in a good composition that doesn't talk about the past, but talks about the present and quotes from the classics. Confucius spoke, and the book said ...; Mencius spoke, and the poem said ...; Kong Yiji talk, more on zai, not much also! Right?

Article 3: Solid structure, well-proportioned and beautiful body-build a good house and establish a good brand.

This symmetry is the focus of our talk. I've been talking about it every day in recent days, and we'll talk about it systematically when we officially start! Let's not mention it here.

Article 4: Six roots and six dusts are vivid and rich-Grandma Liu enters the Grand View Garden, and everything is available.

Article 4, six roots and six dusts, is also the key point. You can preview related content on related blogs in advance. After we understand the "eight standards" as a whole, we will talk a little bit about six roots and six dusts later.

Article 5: Write cold versus hot, with sharp contrast-braised pork is delicious, try cabbage bangzi first.

This article is also very important, and the satire we are talking about these days belongs to this example. For example, the weather today is very good, very good. "Very good" is in contrast to "not bad". This is a simple example. How about something deeper? For example, if we write about spring, can we not write about spring at once? Write what? If winter comes, can spring be far behind? I've been talking about apples these two days. Can we write big pears first and then apples? Our children often write the composition "My Mom". Can you write dad first and then mom? Even before we write about mom's gentle and beautiful side, we should write about mom's lion roar first? Does this open your mind? People think of feet when they see everyone's hands.

Article 6 the donkey's head is not right for the horse's mouth-if it's not surprising, it will never stop.

Good language, donkey's head is not right. How do you say this? For example, my mother is as angry as a balloon. Gas and balloon are not directly connected. Let's take a look at Liu Zongyuan's Tang poem "Jiang Xue": There are no birds in hundreds of mountains, and there are no footprints in thousands of paths. A boat on the river, a fisherman wearing his webworm moth; Fishing alone is not afraid of snow and ice. Who ever hooked up with Jiang Xue? How can this Jiang Xue fish? Let's look at Wang Wei's "Bird Singing Stream": people are idle and osmanthus flowers fall, and the night is quiet and spring is empty. When the moon comes out, the birds are startled, and the sound enters the spring stream. What is the relationship between leisure and osmanthus falling? What's the relationship between the moonrise and the startled birds? There are no boundaries! But it is beautifully written.

Article 7: profound artistic conception and sense of picture-there seems to be no one on the empty mountain, but I think I hear a voice.

Not to mention this one for the time being, "there seems to be no one on the empty mountain, but I think I heard a voice." That's what it means. To put it bluntly, it is to put relationships and talk about artistic conception. Don't our children have anything to write about? Isn't it just spelling? Then let's get together. For example, when spring comes, the sky is bluer and the trees are greener. I talked about two things: one is the sky and the other is the tree. Another relationship: Spring is coming, the sky is bluer and the trees are greener. The sky looks higher against the trees; The tree reflects the sky and looks newer and newer. Comparing the relationship between heaven and trees, blue and green, is it more literal and artistic?

Composition, what's the big deal? Once, my child asked me what a composition was. I told her: writing is drawing with words. In order to make her understand that the composition should be concentrated, I taught her to wear a hat, clothes and overshoes. What is the intention of the composition? I replied: that's the neon light of a building. What is a good sentence? I said: the bull's head is not right for the horse's mouth ...

The second point is six roots and six dusts. The key point is to solve the problem that children's writing is not vivid. Just now we talked about "my mother", and now we have infiltrated some six factors: my mother is very beautiful, with big eyes, thin lips and a high nose. Especially those eyes, as clear as the bright moon and as quiet as water waves. In Italian! Is it a vivid layer? As far as things are concerned, we can also say that mom's thin lips are always as young and bright as two peach blossoms. Mom's voice is so gentle. Whenever my mother greets me before going to bed, she always feels like an angel-whispering. Right? Is it moving?