How to integrate scenery description into narrative

What is the object of scenery description? Generally speaking, everything around people but not around; Core Tip: Explanatory text is an introduction, so that you can clearly know what things are; In fact, you are no stranger to describing scenery, when you were in primary school; 1, the clouds in the sky have different shapes; 2. The clouds in the sky are really varied and changeable; Look, it's also about writing clouds. The first sentence is not as effective as the second. 3, peach trees, apricot trees, pear trees, you won't let me, I won't let you, all full; In this article, the author painted a picture for us. "

What is the object of scenery description? Generally speaking, anything that surrounds people but is not a description of people can be said to be a description of the scenery.

Core Tip: Explanatory text is an introduction that lets you know clearly what something looks like or what it is, mainly to increase your knowledge and understand scientific knowledge; Argumentative writing is reasoning, which clearly reminds you to be brainwashed to understand a certain truth; Narrative prose (narrative prose and lyric prose) is mainly for emotional education, so that readers can follow you on an emotional journey and be baptized by their hearts unconsciously. If writing expository essays is a kind of "selling" and writing argumentative essays is an "injection", then writing narrative essays is a kind of "hypnosis"! Therefore, the creation of situation is particularly critical. Knowing this, it is not difficult to understand that we should mainly pursue the role of scenery description in creating an atmosphere in narrative, organically combine scenery with people, and better make scenery serve characters. The more poetic, the stronger the effect of hypnosis.

In fact, your description of the scenery is no stranger. You were exposed to these contents when you were in primary school, but until now, I often read such words in your articles, "How beautiful the scenery here is!" "The beautiful scenery in front of us is so charming!" How beautiful and charming, but others don't know, because your writing is very empty. So, how can we vividly describe the scenery? Let's look at an example first:

1, the clouds in the sky are rich in shapes.

The clouds in the sky are really varied and changeable. Some are like feathers, floating gently across the sky; Others, such as mountains, rivers, lions and galloping horses? (Excerpted from "Seeing the Clouds and Knowing the Weather")

As you can see, the first sentence is not as good as the second sentence because the first sentence is straightforward, which is very similar to the situation in our classmate's article mentioned above. But the use of description shows the different postures of the cloud concretely and vividly. Let's enjoy two more clips to see how famous artists describe the scenery.

3, peach trees, apricot trees, pear trees, you won't let me, I won't let you, all full of flowers to catch up. Red is like fire, pink is like chardonnay and white is like snow. Flowers are sweet; When I closed my eyes, the tree seemed to be covered with peaches, Xinger and pears. Hundreds of bees are buzzing under the flowers, and butterflies of different sizes are flying around. Wildflowers are everywhere: miscellaneous, named and unnamed, scattered in the grass like eyes, like stars, still flashing. (Excerpted from Spring)

In this passage, the author painted a "spring flower map" for us. When describing peach blossoms, apricot blossoms, pear blossoms and wild flowers everywhere, what rhetorical methods and other techniques did the author use to highlight their characteristics? Please open your books, read the class notes and review by yourself. In this article, the author only focuses on one kind of scenery-spring flowers. Through the angles of movement, color, taste, reality and height, a colorful and three-dimensional beautiful picture is outlined for us. In fact, this is the only way to describe the landscape-movement, color, taste, truth and height. If you don't believe me, open the book again and read articles about scenery such as Winter in Jinan and Wisteria Waterfall.

Our classmates have always had a vague understanding of scenery description, that is, adding a few words to the narrative.

It is wrong to describe a simple and general rhetoric word, such as:

4. The sky cleared up, and the sun came in through the cracks in the curtains, shining on the body, like a warm current seeping into the heart. ? The colors of sunny days are different, too. Dark clouds seem to be hidden under the beauty of white clouds. The sun stretched and finally went to work. (Excerpted from "After Clear Up" by Zhao Bingjun of Class 7 (2), the third edition of the seventh issue of "Voice")

What are the shortcomings of the scenery description here? First, let's look at the object he described. Sun, sky, dark clouds, white clouds, etc. Secondly, we can find that he used anthropomorphic rhetoric to describe the sun dynamically, but the color of the sky was not specifically written, and the dark clouds and white clouds were also described simply. In this way, we can't see what color the sky is, and we can't form the image of dark clouds. It can be seen that the description of the sky lacks words to express colors, and the description of dark clouds and white clouds lacks words to express shapes, so does the sun. Today, I'll tell you a remedy: First, you should add modifiers to the description of the scenery, that is, add some words expressing nature, color and state before the scenery you describe to make the scenery vivid. Second, the scenery description should use rhetorical devices, including metaphor, personification, contrast, etc., which can make the scenery more vivid. Third, the description of scenery should be integrated with one's own feelings, that is, the combination of scenes and feelings is often said, in order to deeply impress readers and arouse their voices.

Let's specifically analyze the matters needing attention in the use of scenery description:

First, the description of scenery should not only grasp the shape, size, color, quantity and sound of the object, but also grasp the charm and dynamic changes of the object. Only in this way can we grasp the characteristics of the scenery and make readers feel vivid and immersive. Examples are as follows:

At noon in summer, white clouds are floating in the blue sky of Wan Li. Some of these white clouds are connected together, like rolling silver waves in the ocean, like mountains, and sometimes there are clouds of different sizes and shapes floating on a silver-gray cloud, like sea flowers blooming on an island reef. (Analysis: The author of this clip describes the shape and size of white clouds. )

6. In the distance, several oak trees remained motionless, and herds of antelopes and ostriches walked around. A winding river flows slowly southeast, and clusters of beautiful flowers are blooming on the shore. (Analysis: The author captured the number of oak trees, antelopes, ostriches, rivers and flowers to describe this fragment. )

7. It's the season of lush leaves. This big banyan tree seems to show us its life. There are so many green leaves, one on top of the other, leaving no gaps. Green is shining before our eyes, as if there is a new life trembling on every leaf, this beautiful southern tree! Analysis: The author of this description captured its charm in the lush branches and leaves of the big banyan tree and described it, which made us feel that she was full of vitality. )

Of course, not all the above description methods are used to write every scene. For example, Example 5, Example 6 and Example 7 are different, and the description method of the scene should be selected according to its characteristics. Tell you a secret to describe the shape, size, color, quantity, sound charm and dynamic changes of a scene, which is to develop rich associations (from this to that) when writing. For example, the posture of clouds-waves, mountains, etc. ).

Second, you should also pay attention to writing the scenery in a certain order, layer by layer. The order of scenery description is generally spatial order and time order. Spatial order can be divided into two types. One is to take a fixed observation point and write down the scenery at each position in turn according to the moving order of the line of sight, or from far to near, or from inside to outside, or from top to bottom, or from whole to part. Then, instead of taking a fixed observation point, we use the movement of the observer's position to describe the scene, which is also called swimming sequence (or changing the scene). Time series is to write the scenery in turn according to a certain time period, depicting the changes of the scenery, such as spring, summer, autumn and winter; Morning, noon, dusk and night. Which order to choose when writing depends on the characteristics of the object of description and the actual needs of description. Please take a look at the following excerpts describing the scenery, and see if you have the Monkey King's critical vision and point out the mistakes in writing the order of the scenery.

Walking on the "carpet" paved with ginkgo leaves, I saw a "flame" burning not far away. In the cold, in the autumn wind, maple leaves dance, and the sound of "rustling" seems to report the coming of autumn. It is like playing beautiful autumn music. A closer look turned out to be a flaming maple forest. I picked up a maple leaf, and the bright red background set off the goose yellow lines, like a child's red palm, like a girl's blushing cheek, like a beautiful butterfly. Walking, we came to Ginkgo Woods. Some of them are swinging on the branches with the wind, some fall into the grass in groups of three or five, and some dance with the wind and fall into the water. The leaves of ginkgo trees have begun to turn yellow and are tottering in the rustling autumn wind. A closer look shows that the leaves of ginkgo trees are more unique. Its leaves are very clear, like a small fan, like a small ear, and like a thin duck web, so cute!

We have learned from Mr. Lu Xun's "From Hundred Herbs Garden to San Tan Yin Yue", and we already know it clearly. Some are written according to the distance of the scenery; Some write by orientation; Some are written according to the relationship between the whole and the parts, and so on. But you can't write down all the scenery like a list, you should grasp the characteristics and write with emphasis. Be organized. So how should the last example adjust the order of its scenery writing? The analysis is as follows: 1. From "Walking on the carpet paved with ginkgo leaves", we can know that the author's viewing order should be "Ginkgo biloba", so the scenery of "Ginkgo biloba" should be written first. 2. "Looking closer, it turned out to be a flaming maple forest" should be put in the second sentence. Three, "some of them swayed in the wind on the branches, some fell to the grass in groups of three or five, and some danced with the whirlpool and fell into the water." The leaves of ginkgo trees have begun to turn yellow and are tottering in the autumn wind. " The first sentence describes that Ginkgo biloba leaves fall on the grass, and the second sentence describes that Ginkgo biloba leaves are crumbling. Obviously, these two sentences are reversed and should be interchanged.

Third, the scenery must be integrated with feelings, that is, the scenery must be romantic. Mr. Wang Guowei, a master of Chinese studies, once asserted that "all landscape words are sentimental words". The scenery is objective, but the people who write it are affectionate. The author always has his own feelings about any scenery. From ancient times to the present, from the west to the east, natural scenery is endless, and human beings don't know much about it, but there are few similarities in famous sentences that have been passed down to this day. The reason is that the scenery described by the author conveys the author's personal feelings. Although everything in nature is independent of people's subjective will, the scenery we write down is the scenery in people's eyes. The scenery without emotional color is just a pale and beautiful "body", which is difficult to achieve the touching purpose; At the same time, the process of observing and describing the scenery itself is also a process of writing subjective feelings. Therefore, feelings should be naturally permeated between the lines of writing scenery, and the feelings in the scenery should be cherished. Achieve a blend of scenes, things and me. While describing the objective scenery, we should integrate our emotions and feelings into the works, so that readers can produce * * * sounds, which will bring readers pleasure and intoxication, bring readers into specific situations, be influenced by beauty and enjoy beauty.

I don't know if you have noticed that the scenery description I mentioned above is actually just a kind of scenery description. By the way, it is an "independent written" description of scenery, that is, we usually come into contact with travel prose, lyric prose and other works. Next, talk about the matters needing attention in the description of scenery in general narrative.

First, understand the role of scenery description: portray the characters: or contrast the character, or contrast the mood of the characters; For the development of the plot: either explain the weather environment, or reveal the background of the activity, or pave the way for the following plot, or promote the development of the plot, or express emotions; The expression of the theme: either reveal the center, or deepen the theme and sublimate the emotion (often at the end of the text). Specific examples can be found in the article (previously discussed the role of natural environment description, its essence is the same. )

Second, pay attention to the connection between scenery and context, and don't write scenery for the sake of writing scenery. Tell a story first. It is said that once upon a time there was a rigid teacher who wrote a poem about the newly-built Erlang Temple. He had no idea who Jiro was and why he wanted to build a temple, but if he didn't write jokes, he picked up a pen and started a word game: "Jiro is her husband, Dalang's brother, Saburo's brother and Lao Lang's second son." There is a tree in front of the temple. The tree is in front of the temple? "In this way, magnificent, in fact, has made up a temple ode. However, what is the value of such an article? You can't make such a similar joke by describing the scenery. We must be clear about this: scenery description is often not the purpose of writing, especially narratives such as remembering people and writing things. The reason why the author writes about mountains, water and flowers with scenery description is only a secondary content, often for the sake of people or to describe events. Therefore, the description of the scenery in the narrative of remembering people and writing things should be thoughtful, with ulterior motives. For example, our classmates know the word "borrowing scenery to express emotion" very well. I won't talk about articles like travel notes here. I just want to talk about how to deal with the relationship between scenery and emotion when writing a narrative that remembers people and things. I think, in the relationship between landscape and emotion, emotion is the first. We should learn to choose and write scenes according to the needs of emotional expression, not to express feelings according to the needs of writing scenes. This should be clear to everyone. Facing the same scenery, because of different feelings, the characteristics of the scenery described are also different. This difference is mainly manifested in writing scenes with different emotional words and expressions, which are full of feelings. For example, the same "rainy day" scene, we can according to the emotional tone, plot development, characterization, or joy, or sadness. In addition, the description of the scenery in the narrative, such as the narrative of people, should be distributed everywhere in the article like small flowers scattered on the grassland, and it is not appropriate to have a long description of the scenery, and it is not appropriate to be as detailed as the description of the scenery written independently. Pay attention to the relationship between scenery and context. For example, at the beginning of "The Flight of Impala", three or two sentences point out the characteristics of the high cliffs of Mount Gallo, rather than describing the mountains as described in general travel notes. Because the focus of this paper is not to show the scenery of Mount Gallo, but to show how the impala herd, which was forced into danger, got rid of the predicament and got the survival of the population. In other words, it is necessary to distinguish between the two, that is, the narration of human feelings and other narratives is rough, while the narration of travel notes and scenery writing is fine.

Narrative articles such as travel notes and scenery writing must be described by someone, because with people, the scenery will be spiritual; In order to impress readers with your scenery, you must use association and imagination to make your own scenery concrete and personal. The description of the scenery in the narratives such as "Narration on Earth" emphasizes a proper place where it should appear. For example:

9. There are no apples in the basket. At this time, my cousin came and seemed to want to see my jokes. When he saw the empty basket, he couldn't help saying to me in surprise, "Yes, you girl, you sold it." I looked up proudly-not only because I sold apples, but also because I was brave today.

The setting sun is red on the horizon. (Analysis: Although the description of the scenery here is only six words, it leaves many interesting blanks for readers. You might as well think for yourself. )

Read the following article and complete the related exercises as required.

I really want to have "seventy-two changes"

At night, I lay in bed daydreaming. If only I could have the magical power of "seventy-two changes" like the Monkey King!

In a daze, I really have the power of "seventy-two changes" My body gently closes together and flies out of the window. I wander in the sky, play with white clouds, contend with birds and roll with the wind and cloud.

I spent a day in the upper reaches of the sky before I found that the river was dirty. I thought: Why is the water in the river so dirty? A look, just know, the river is full of paper mills, steel mills? "I have to make this river clear. What should I do? " I have thought about it, but I can't think of an idea. Suddenly "yes", I patted my thigh and shouted happily. I became a robot, so I detonated several sewage robots. In a few minutes, they cleaned up the sewage, and on the same morning, they also discharged the polluted river water from the river. At this time, the river is clear enough to see the sand and stones at the bottom of the river, green like a flawless jade, and quiet enough to hear a little sound.

So, I turned the desert into a forest. There is also a big fruit tree in the forest. These fruit trees have bright flowers all year round, and they also exude attractive sweetness. Passers-by can pick fruits to quench their thirst and fill their stomachs. These fruits are big and full.

I turned sand fruit into sweet fruit, so that people can taste delicious and fragrant fruit.

I have conjured up an automatic weapon to kill the enemy, so that the police uncle will never be injured or even sacrificed to chase the bad guys again.

I will turn the sky into various colors, I will make spring full of flowers and let people enjoy the beauty of life; I want to turn summer into the color of water, so that people no longer feel hot; I want to turn autumn into leaves?