The marking teacher commented on the composition of Sichuan college entrance examination

Topic: Write an article on the topic of "One Step Away and Life". (60 points)

Requirements: (1) style is optional. (2) Not less than 800 words.

Scoring rules

1. Deduct 2 points for untitled composition. Self-created titles are regarded as untitled.

Second, if the content of the composition is judged as "deviating from the meaning of the topic" or "improper conception", it should be discussed collectively.

Third, the basic level is graded according to the standards issued by the Ministry, that is, it is comprehensively measured with emphasis on "topic meaning", "center", "language" and "topic". The content items in the basic level are judged as Grade 4 composition, and the expression items and development items can be graded at Grade 3 and below as appropriate.

Fourth, development grading is an integral part of the total score, not a reward score, so we should pay attention to the degree of discrimination. According to the score of 15, if it is not comprehensive, select the outstanding score, according to the grade, until the full mark. The development level focuses on "literary talent" and "creativity".

Five, who think that there are political views, please submit the article to the group leader or the steering committee for research.

Six, if it is confirmed as "plagiarism", it is necessary to provide verification clues and submit them to the group leader or the steering Committee. After verification, score according to the standards issued by the Ministry, that is, the "basic level" is less than 4 points, and the "development level" is not scored.

Seven, the article is less than 800 words, every 50 words 1 minute. If the article is only about 200 words, and the article is not finished, as appropriate, add points in the two items of "content" and "expression", with the total score not exceeding 10, and the "development level" is 0, and the number of words is not reduced. To write a poem, there is no limit to the number of words, but it should be submitted to the group for discussion and judgment.

Eight, every three typos deducted 1 point, repeated don't remember, deducted 2 points.

Nine, punctuation marks deducted 2 points as appropriate.

10. If points need to be reduced due to "missing questions", "missing words", "typo" and "punctuation error", write down the total score to be reduced under "missing questions", "missing words" and "punctuation error" and indicate it with a negative sign. If there is no deletion, zero will not be scored under "lack of topic", "insufficient words", "spelling error" and "punctuation error", and only zero will be placed in the scoring space, otherwise it will be regarded as missing evaluation.

Some precautions:

A, mark all use red ballpoint pen, shall not use other colors.

Two, the score table "marking" space, should sign the full names of the two teachers.

Three, if there is any change after scoring, the original score should be crossed out, and the correct score should be recorded above the crossed out score. The crossed-out marks shall be stamped with proofreading stamp and signed with the full name of the rater.

Four, in addition to the score and signature, no other symbols shall be made on the surface of the paper.

5. When the marking teacher finds excellent or typical compositions of all grades and types in the marking, please submit them to the steering committee immediately. The recommendation work will, in principle, end in the afternoon of June 15.

Six, where the blank volume is not marked "not", the scoring space is still occupied by "0".

Seven, where there is an abnormal situation of the test paper should be handed over to the group leader or the steering committee, to the storage room for processing.

Selected excellent composition reviews

One step at a time.

Sichuan examinee

We often hear people around us use "this step is crucial" to describe the importance of a thing. As for the college entrance examination, needless to say, it has long been used by parents and teachers to explain the relationship with people's life. But in my opinion, the important step is often not promotion and success, but the promotion of self-spiritual value. [Point out the center at the beginning. ]

Former Soviet writer Kang? Potobsky described such a story in his prose collection "Golden Rose":

Latvian residents who have been fishing for generations have lived on the Baltic coast. They live in the sea, but every time they go fishing, many people die. One of the small fishing villages stands a huge granite with a sentence engraved on it: in memory of those who died at sea and are about to die at sea. The writer is puzzled. He didn't understand why he wrote such an unlucky sentence. Local residents told him that in their eyes, this inscription has such a meaning: to commemorate the heroes who conquered the sea and are about to conquer the sea. The writer was very shocked. It is refreshing to use the examples of writers in the former Soviet Union as materials, and to abandon the celebrity examples commonly used by people as materials. ]

This is not an ordinary word difference, but a subversive understanding of the meaning of life by the residents there. This change and improvement in their understanding made them die. This is why people may die at sea when they go out to sea, but there are never many people who go out to sea every time. The progress of knowledge has made them bold in life. [Analysis of materials, so that materials and ideas are closely combined. ]

Liu Yuxi, a famous poet in the Tang Dynasty, was banished to the "bleak land of Bashan and Chushui" for 23 years because he failed to participate in Yongzhen's innovation. What a pain it is! However, he didn't sink passively, but boldly sang the meaning of self-encouragement in the autumn of society: since ancient times, autumn has been sad and lonely, and I say autumn is better than spring. It is this treasure of life that makes him understand that he must endure loneliness in difficulties. So he began to rewrite local famous songs with a new literary form, just like Qu Yuan wrote Chu Ci. [Liu Yuxi's case is fresher than that of Li Bai, Du Fu and Su Dongpo. ]

As a result, we have well-known poems such as Zhuzhi Ci and Liuzhi Ci, which are all from his careful observation of people's lives.

His social status and official position are declining, but his literary attainments and spiritual understanding are rising, and his life value is also rising in great strides. [Introduce the example of argument analysis again. ]

A teenager caught a chicken and bet with a wise man. "Do you think this chick in my hand is dead or alive?" The teenager asked positively, because the strength of fingers can determine the life and death of chicks, thus determining the outcome of both sides.

The wise man smiled and said, "Life is in your hands." [The dialogue between teenagers and wise men leads to the following, which is also a vivid example. ]

Yes, life is in the hands of each of us, and it is our' responsibility' to make it meaningful.

I believe that what I am taking at this moment is not the best step in my life, but it is an upward step!

Write comments on (literary works) and mark them with dots and circles to attract attention.

The reason why this paper can get a high score of 59 points is that it has the following characteristics: (1) is closely related to the topic and needs a train of thought. At the beginning of the article, I put forward the view that "in my opinion, the important step is often not promotion and success, but the promotion of self-cognitive value", which is superior and enlightening. (2) Language does not pursue flowery rhetoric, but appears simple and heavy. This is in sharp contrast to the one-sided pursuit of so-called "literary talent" by some candidates in recent years. Their compositions are meaningless and empty. For example, paragraph 4 is about Kang? The analysis of the story in Bautowski's Golden Rose is closely related to the raw materials and the viewpoint of the article. The language is accurate, coherent, concise and meaningful. (3) Fresh materials and thorough analysis. Instead of using ready-made materials, such as Li Bai, Du Fu, Tao Yuanming and Su Dongpo. The article chooses unfamiliar and rarely used materials, such as the inscription of residents in small and medium-sized fishing villages in Golden Rose, Liu Yuxi's bold encouragement in the face of pain, and the wise man's smile answers. The three materials explain the viewpoints and materials from different angles. (4) Threaded structure. Put forward opinions at the beginning, analyze and demonstrate in the middle, and echo the beginning of the article at the end. The full text is in one go, and the structure is mature.

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