How to write the hometown of Laoting?

Laoting's hometown is introduced as follows:

On Saturday, grandma, grandpa, dad and mom took me to the Laoting. Starting from Beijing, I finally arrived at Laoting three hours later. We came to the seaside, and the beach was crowded with people: some sat on the beach and basked in the sun; Some sit on the beach and surf; Others are wrapped in hot sand and enjoy sunbathing leisurely. The sand on the beach is so hot that I have to jump around. The sea is blue and green. Many people swim in it.

I can't wait to put on my bathing suit and go straight to the sea. At the shallowest place, the sea is still hot; When the water level rose to my neck, the water gradually cooled down. Just as I was enjoying myself, suddenly, a big wave came and I took a sip of seawater. The seawater seemed to be salty with a lot of salt. I put on my goggles and get ready to swim. At that time, before the sea rose, I could swim far away freely. Swimming and swimming, the sea is getting deeper, so I stop and swim sideways.

I took a deep breath first, and then jumped up suddenly. In an instant, my head plunged into the sea, foaming at the mouth, my nose held my breath, my feet kept pumping up and down, my arms were straight, and my body swam forward quickly. Suddenly, a big wave came from the right, and my body immediately churned to the left with the wave. I couldn't help shouting, "Oh dear!" "Unexpectedly, the sea water entered my mouth and killed me.

At this point, my father quickly put his arm around my hand and let me lie flat on the water with my head up and draw water with my feet. This is practicing backstroke. Suddenly, I saw my grandfather swimming backstroke, too, but I felt something was missing. It turned out that he didn't draw water with his feet, but became the leg posture of breaststroke. I said to grandpa, "Your swimming style is wrong. You should draw water with your feet, not with your feet like breaststroke. " Grandpa said, "As long as you can swim."

I played in the water for four hours. After landing, I was sunburned all over, and my shoulders hurt the most. I can't touch them. I thought to myself, if I knew this would happen, I wouldn't play.

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