Methods and techniques for describing actions, expressions, and expressions in online novels

The techniques of action description generally include: detail method, contrast method, continuation method, abnormal method, characteristic method, and ultimate display method. The specific usage analysis is as follows:

1. Six methods of action description

(1) Detail method

The key to the detail method is to describe a certain action or shot To describe the continuity characteristics, to show the essence of a certain detail, the sentences can be shorter and the sub-clauses can be more. It is a vivid display of "fast, light and meticulous".

The aunt rolled up her sleeves and rolled up her trousers to her thighs. She moved slowly in the stream, lifting her left foot slightly, taking a small step forward, and dragging her right foot forward slowly, as if she was wearing a heavy shoe. She twisted her hat straight, bowed her back, lowered her head, squinted her eyes, and made a gesture of holding something with her hands. At this time, she stopped, stopped looking around, and stared at a place on the right. She suddenly plunged her hand into the water and held a small fish in her hand.

"Turning, rolling, lifting, stepping, dragging forward, bowing the back, lowering the head, squinting, pinning" vividly presents the fishing scene in front of the readers, just like a It's like a play has just been staged. This kind of description can't be said to be superb.

(2) Contrast method

The contrast method is to show different characteristics through the actions of different characters, thereby reflecting the core theme.

After the savage drank the wine and heard that he had been rescued, he felt refreshed and sat up immediately. Unexpectedly, as soon as Friday heard him speak and saw his face, he immediately kissed him, hugged him, cried, laughed, and yelled; he twisted his hands and hit himself. His face and head were then singing loudly and dancing wildly, like a madman. He looked like that, anyone who looked at him would be moved to tears. ——"Robinson Crusoe"

As mentioned above, the savage "sits" up, and Friday's "kiss", "hug", "cry and laugh", "yell" and "jump around" Flurry" and so on

form a contrast, shaping the excitement and ecstasy of Friday very beautifully.

(3) Continuation method

The continuation method shows the coherence of the entire description and is the most powerful way to enhance the effect in action description.

The basic purpose of coherence is nothing more than to control potential disunity and achieve smoothness between actions. The conceptual arrangement of characters should be based on balance and symmetry; the overall scene should be unified; and the main plot should be placed in the center of the description.

Grandma stretched her right foot and slipped it into the shoe opening. Her sinewy hand tightly grasped the door frame, and she gently lifted her left foot. She carefully slid her tight foot toward the shoe opening. Insert it, push it in again, then step on it a few times to make your feet more comfortable, and go out with satisfaction.

Verbs such as "stretch", "slip", "grab", "lift", "insert" and "step on" form a coherent action group, quickly showing the protagonist's familiarity with the actions in chronological order. The scene of grandma going out jumped onto the page.

Shi Xuan's steps were very even, his arms were swinging back and forth, his feet were moving faster and faster, his body was leaning forward, as if he was about to fall, and he ran forward quickly. When she reached the finish line, she raised her head, puffed out her chest, and finally won first place.

Everyone is familiar with the scenes of racing and sprinting, but some of them are not flattering when written. Take a look at the paragraph above. The good sentences are quite natural and smooth, "She raised her head, raised her chest, and finally achieved success." Winning the first place." It is a classic example of connecting with the sprint description in the previous part concisely and briskly.

(4) Abnormal method

Abnormality can catch the eye. Abnormality is like a code word, telling readers that there must be a monster when things go wrong, and the key to breaking the situation may be hidden. Here it is.

In "The Death of Daiyu", when Daiyu learned that her love ideal was completely shattered, she wrote:

Daiyu ignored her and walked into the room by herself. . Seeing Baoyu sitting there, he didn't get up to let him sit, he just looked at him with a silly smile. Daiyu sat down by herself, but also looked at Baoyu and smiled. The two of them didn't say hello, didn't speak, didn't give in, they just smiled silly at each other's faces. "Then," Daiyu also stood up, looked at Baoyu, just smiled and nodded.

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What a good Daiyu, when the love that is regarded as life is shattered, what is the meaning of living? At this moment, the more she nods and smiles, the more we can understand her inner sorrow. She is already so sad. There is no more sadness.

This is the smile of a person who has seen through the world and only wants to die quickly after experiencing great joy and great joy in the world; a person who has completely changed his mind about life after being shocked, angry, sad and angry. The desperate man smiles calmly. The author uses the mood of "joy" to describe the essence of "sadness", and achieves unexpected results.

In "A Dream of Red Mansions", abnormal techniques are also often used. The description of "laughing" is opposite to "crying". For example, in Chapter 18, Concubine Jia's wedding ceremony is a great event that is extremely glorious and joyful. After a long separation, it should be extremely joyful, but the author went against the norm and wrote:

"Concubine Jia's eyes were full of tears"

"One arm held Jia Mu, the other held Mrs. Wang, and the three of them were filled with joy. They all have a lot to say, but they can’t say it, they just cry.”

What should have been a comedy of joyful gatherings with constant laughter has turned into a tragic tragedy of life and death, like a life and death. This situation, this situation, It is endlessly evocative.

As a noble concubine, she is extremely glorious in the eyes of the world, but she lives in seclusion in the palace, accompanying the emperor like a tiger. The author is constantly fighting for power and favor in the palace. With this unusual technique of bursting into tears with joy and expressing joy with sadness, the tragedy of Yuanchun is written, which is another tragedy of the young girl in the Grand View Garden.

(5) Characteristic method

In this method, being quick, accurate and ruthless is the key. It is necessary to select characteristic and personalized words to describe it concisely and vividly.

I saw him wearing a black cloth cap and black clothes. Wearing a large mandarin jacket and a dark blue cotton robe, it was not easy for him to stumble to the side of the railway and slowly lean down. However, it was not easy for him to climb up to the platform on the other side of the railway with both hands. Above, his legs were retracted; his fat body leaned slightly to the left, showing his effort. At this time, I saw his back, and my tears quickly flowed down. - "Back View"

Zhu Ziqing's "Back View" made many people cry. The words "staggering", "slowly leaning down" and "fat body leaning slightly to the left" in the article conveyed the image of an old father

, these are the unique descriptions of an elderly father. In the end, not only his tears "shed", but also the readers' tears.

(6) ***Exhibition of Dharma.

Describe the different actions of various people in the same scene, and their different attitudes towards the same thing, which is more conducive to expressing the personality characteristics of the characters.

***Exhibition methods are available. Its particularity, please note that it is different from the contrast method. The scope of application of the *** display method is more precise, it has requirements on time and scene, and the effect is more obvious.

The tea has not been eaten, but the effect is more obvious. Seeing a maid wearing a red damask coat, a blue satin waistcoat and a toothless waistcoat approaching, she smiled and said, "Madam, please ask Miss Lin to sit over there. After hearing this, the old mama led Daiyu out again and went to the three small main rooms in the east corridor. There was a kang table across the kang in the main room, with books and tea sets on it, and a half-old table on the east wall to the west. There was a green satin backrest cushion.

Mrs. Wang was sitting on the west side, which was also a half-worn blue satin backrest cushion. When she saw Daiyu coming, she moved to the east. Jia Zheng's seat. Seeing that there were three chairs lined up next to the kang, which were also covered with old ink-covered chairs, Daiyu sat on the chairs. Mrs. Wang took him to the kang again, and he sat next to Mrs. Wang.

Mrs. Wang said: "Your uncle is fasting today. Goodbye. I just have one thing to tell you: You three sisters are all very good. From now on, you will have to give in to reading, reading, needlework, or the occasional joke. But what I am most worried about is one thing: I have a troublemaker, the ‘Devil King’ in my family. He went to the temple today to fulfill his vows and has not come back yet. You will know when you see him in the evening. You just need to ignore him from now on. You sisters don’t dare to mess with him. "——"A Dream of Red Mansions"

Mrs. Wang's movements, Daiyu's movements, and the movements of some passers-by are blended together, and their respective thoughts, considerations, and current character characteristics are all vivid and vivid. The effect is unforgettable.

2. Description of expressions

Compared with actions, description of expressions is less difficult. In fact, the two have some overlap and can be applied when using them. Regarding expressions, I also wrote a separate List three general points to pay attention to:

1. Pay attention to the subtle changes in the character's expression

When she is sad - her head is drooped, her face is dead, and she has no strength. .

When nervous - panting constantly, looking pale, frowning, unable to say a word.

When crying - Yuji's face turned red and white for a while. She stood leaning against the wall, her whole body trembling slightly. Slender, thick black eyebrows, and big wet eyes looked at me. After a long time, she lowered her eyes like lacquer needles, and two lines of clear tears oozed out.

When angry - the nostrils open wide due to inner excitement, large beads of sweat appear on the forehead, and a deep wrinkle stretches from the clenched lips to the chin that protrudes forward menacingly. past.

When she is happy - her face is filled with joy, and her two round and bright eyes are shining like two small lanterns.

When he was in a daze - he stared straight ahead with his eyes blankly, standing there like a tree.

2. Combined with environment, action, and language description

A very comprehensive example is the section where Grandma Liu enters the Grand View Garden:

Jia Mu When they said "please", Grandma Liu stood up and said loudly: "Old Liu, Old Liu, he eats as much as a cow. He can eat an old sow without raising his head." But she puffed up her cheeks and remained silent.

Everyone was startled at first, and then they burst out laughing.

Shi Xiangyun couldn't hold on anymore and spit out a mouthful of rice. Lin Daiyu broke out laughing and leaned on the table to cry. Baoyu had already rolled into Jia Mu's arms. Jia Mu laughed so hard that she hugged Baoyu and shouted, "Honey!" "Mrs. Wang laughed so hard that she pointed at Sister Feng and was speechless. Aunt Xue couldn't hold it in either. The tea in her mouth sprayed all over Tanchun's skirt. The rice bowl in Tanchun's hand closed on Yingchun, and Xichun left. Sitting on the seat, he pulled his wet nurse and asked him to rub his intestines. Everyone on the ground was bending over, some were hiding out and squatting to laugh, and some were holding back their laughter and came up to change clothes for their sisters. Only Sister Feng and Yuanyang were the only ones holding on, and they just let Grandma Liu do it.

——Quoted from "A Dream of Red Mansions"

3. Reflect the characters' thoughts and the theme of the story

It is a common way to echo the theme through expression, for example The villain, then his ferocious and ugly face can be revealed from his demeanor. There are also the protagonist's inner struggles when encountering setbacks, his own embarrassment, etc. The effect will be better if combined with psychological description.

Appendix: Idiom materials for describing facial expressions

Fussing, frightened, confused, calm, creepy, absent-minded, calm and collected

Calm, peaceful, calm, dumbfounded, calm, half-believing, half-doubtful, respectful, respectful, speaking to oneself Muttering to oneself

Concentrated, full of interest, elated, dumbfounded, doubtful, full of affection, restless, feeling lost

Coy, listless, mumbling, indecisive, tongue-tied, confused, hesitant, undecided, embarrassed and uneasy, unable to help laughing

Laughing dumbly, gloating as if nothing had happened, thoughtful, cheerful, affable, dejected

Flattered, frightened, doubtful, contented, frightened, furious, furious, ashamed, angry, alert and attentive

Behaving awkwardly, looking full of air Lively, confident, high-spirited, energetic, trance-like, breathless and focused

Eyes dancing and eyebrows dancing, eyebrows smiling, eyes flashing with anger, furious, raging to the sky, burning with rage, hair brimming with anger, full of rage

Smiling through tears

Comprehensive It seems that the expression description is one of the detailed action descriptions, focusing on the face and its surroundings on a large scale. As long as the action description is solved, the expression can be understood.