How to write a detailed description of the fragment?

1. Detailed description: childhood events

I was infatuated with watermelon when I was a child, but now I have grown up, and sometimes I really miss that chilling feeling. Street stalls or melon shadows on the screen came into view, and the moment when I ate melons in my childhood came back to my mind:

In summer, the glory of the remaining days sinks into the horizon, and the summer heat gradually disappears. Under the blowing of the evening breeze, people's spirit is particularly comfortable. At this time, the fragrance of watermelon filled the streets, sometimes thick and sometimes light, as if nothing had happened. I (about five or six years old) put my arms around my knees and squatted on a small bench like a cat catching a mouse. My small black eyes glanced at the watermelon spinning up and down in the water. Across the water, the sweat on my face has already dried up, and "Qianchuan" hangs like a waterfall. Mosquitoes "swim around" in their ears and don't care. Under a bright smiling face, there is an expectant heart waiting-My Sweetie in a melon seed shell.

Until the watermelon was cut into pieces: I saw watermelon seeds embedded in red melon meat like black pearls; The melon meat is a little cold; Melon juice flows down the mirror-like melon surface, one drop, two drops; The texture on the surface of melon is like the fine lines on the surface of painted porcelain. ...

The happiest moment is: holding the iced watermelon in your hand, it seems that there is a cold current floating back and forth all over your body.

2. Sweet mud

Huang Fei

The northwest wind roared and the snow rolled on the road. Although it is early spring, the weather is still very cold.

She, leaning against a poplar tree at the school gate, was as motionless as snow sculpture.

The sudden ringing of the bell. Her dim eyes sparkled with longing.

A group of children, singing, walked out of the school gate without her son; Another group of children talked and laughed and set foot on the road without their son ... The figure was sparse, scattered and gone.

The creaking iron gate locked the silent campus.

She was dizzy and could hardly stand up. She stumbled over and held her hands tightly on the iron fence. "For what?" An old man in a message came out with a democratic face.

"bright! My little light! " Like breathing, like crying.

"School is over."

"Know the way ..." She murmured in a low voice with glassy eyes, lowered her head feebly, slowly released her hand, and took out a candy wrapped tightly with body temperature from the pocket of a long-breasted cotton-padded jacket: "Uncle, please ... give it to the child."

"What's your name?"

"Wang Xiaoliang."

"What grade and class?"

"Today, just after my eighth birthday."

"I asked what grade and class." The old man is getting impatient.

"Oh ... maybe ..." She shook her head again.

The old man looked at the neurotic woman strangely. "Who the hell are you?"

What he answered was the tears in his eyes and the back that hobbled away. The old man sighed in confusion and seemed to understand something.

In the afternoon, this bag of candy finally reached Wang Xiaoliang in Class Two, Grade Two. The child was very surprised. I haven't tasted this favorite toffee for a long time. His little hand rubbed his clothes back and forth, thought about it, and respectfully sent one to each child, two to his good friends and five to his teacher. "Eat!" He shouted and jumped happily, even throwing off the prostitute with his mouth open. The students shared their joy with him in laughter, and only the teacher quietly turned his back. ...

After school, Xiao Liang was still immersed in joy and skipped home. Suddenly, he stopped and felt the candy left in his pocket, and a sense of fear came upon him. He seemed to see it again: now mother raised her slender eyebrows and whispered something in her father's ear. Dad grabbed a stick and came up to him angrily. He looked blankly, not knowing what to do. He patted his pocket hard, but it was bulging at first sight. He lowered his head, sucked his fingers, thought for a long time, and looked around. He quickly buried the sugar in the snowdrift by the side of the road and specially inserted a small stick.

Xiao Liang slept soundly and sweetly that night. He dreamed that his old mother came back with a smile, and now her mother is hanging her head and leaving. I'm so happy.

Next day, Xiao got up early. As usual, he emptied and rinsed the bedpans of the whole family first, then washed rice, added water, poked fire, sat in the pan, and then slipped out with a cold steamed bread on his back. He wants to digest his candy quickly. I don't want to. Overnight, the ground temperature rose, the ice and snow melted, syrup and snow water mixed together and penetrated into the earth. On the wet ground, there are some crumpled candy paper and small sticks as marks.

Xiao Liang blinked and couldn't help rolling down tears. He squatted on the ground sadly and looked blankly. After a while, I couldn't help but stretch out my frozen little finger and pick up a little soil and put it on the tip of my tongue-

He smiled again: That piece of soil belongs to My Sweetie.

Summarize several common details:

(1) Detail description of portrait, that is, detailed description of portrait. For example, in Daddy's Caregiver, the portrait of the patient is a detail. It is this detail that drives the development of the plot.

(2) Description of language details, that is, a detailed description of the typical language of characters. For example, in "Deer Fetus Hitting Kansai Town", after Lu Da killed Kansai Town, he faked his death. This is a language detail, which shows Lu Da's bold and refined character, courage and wit.

(3) action detail description, that is, a thorough and detailed description of the typical actions of the characters. For example, in the passage about Lu Da borrowing money to help Jin Lao's father and daughter in the boxing town of Lu Tiha, the verbs used vividly show the different personality characteristics of the three men.

(4) the detailed description of psychological activities, that is, the detailed description of the psychological activities of the characters. For example, in the article "Daddy's Caregiver", the description of young Sisillo's psychological activities after seeing "Daddy" seriously ill can well show the excellent quality of caring for his parents.

(5) Detailed description of expression changes, that is, a detailed description of the process of expression changes of characters. In the article Seven Matches, the description of the expression change after the unknown soldier handed the match to Lu Jinyong is a detail worth savoring.

(6) Description of clothing details, that is, detailed description of characters' clothing. It is necessary to see the professional characteristics of this person through the description of clothing, and it is also possible to see the personality characteristics other than professional characteristics. This is a good description of clothing details.

(7) a detailed description of things, that is, a detailed description of the development and change process of things. For example, in the article "Lutai Beats Kansai Town", the description of how Lutai killed Kansai Town with three punches can be regarded as a detailed description of the development and changes of things.

Third, please give some detailed examples:

Let's look at some examples of detailed descriptions we have learned:

Description of language details: Kong Yiji "How much is it?" Not much ","a scholar stealing a book is not stealing. "In Xuanzhi of the Ridge, I recalled my mother's story through an old woman: every time I said Yuyue," Somewhere, and my mother is here. " Yu added, "Your sister is crying in my arms; Mother locked the door with her finger and said,' Are you cold? Do you want something to eat? I responded outside the board of directors ... "A detail, scenes are vivid, no wonder" (Yu) didn't finish, I was crying, I was crying ",that is, readers, can we not be moved to tears?

2 action details description: ... The black man grabbed the lantern, tore off the paper cover, wrapped the steamed bread and stuffed the old bolt; Grab the foreign currency in one hand, pinch it, and turn around and leave. (Lu Xun's Medicine) The author uses verbs such as "grasping" and "pinching" to describe the action of taking money from Uncle Kang, accurately describes his proficiency in collecting and counting money, and vividly depicts Uncle Kang's ugly face, which is fierce, greedy and used to extortion. Kong Yiji's "Expel Nine pence" and "A woman's fingers shook and thought that Mei Weizi had cut her hand. She put a finger in her mouth and took a drag. "(Sun Li's Lotus Lake) The author accurately, meticulously and vividly wrote the rich, complex and subtle emotional world and its subtle psychological changes after the aquatic sister-in-law learned that her husband would go to the big army tomorrow. The image of a young woman who cares about her husband and is considerate to him, but deeply understands the righteousness and takes care of the overall situation.

(3) Description of portrait details: "Wearing rain boots, umbrellas and warm cotton-padded clothes" is the same as Rykov's clothing description, and belongs to one aspect of portrait description. It is this exaggerated language and cartoon-like sketch that the author uses to reveal Rykov's various tangible condoms, voluntary psychology and conformism. This unique portrait description is humorous, funny, ironic and very impressive. For example, a portrait in "Kong Yiji" describes: "He is tall, with a pale face, scars between wrinkles and a messy white beard. Although wearing a gown, it is dirty and torn. It seems that it has not been washed for more than ten years. " This description captures the typical details of "robes". Wearing a gown is a symbol of literati in the imperial examination era, while Kong Yiji's gown is "dirty and torn". The image of a poor and pedantic feudal intellectual appeared before our eyes, which shows that the feudal imperial examination fooled and persecuted intellectuals.

(4) Description of scene details: A description in Medicine: "Old Shuan also looked there, but only saw the backs of a bunch of people; They all stretched out very long, as if many ducks were held up by invisible hands. It was quiet for a while, as if there was some movement, which made people tremble. Bang, they all backed away, dispersed to the place where Old Bolt stood, and almost knocked him down. " This passage is about the killing of revolutionary Yu Xia, and those bored people are craning their necks to appreciate it, just like a group of "ducks", lifelike, and a metaphor shows the numbness and unconsciousness of the people.

Fourth, summarize the characteristics of detail description: With this constant practice and thinking, it is not difficult for us to draw the most basic theory about description:

(1) A successful descriptive paragraph is an organic combination of objective scenery and the author's subjective feelings;

(2) The successful description of paragraphs is inseparable from the careful observation and bold imagination of the author;

⑶ A successful descriptive paragraph always combines vivid pictures with vivid language.

Detail description refers to grasping the subtle and specific typical plots in life and describing them vividly and meticulously, which is reflected in the description of people, scenery or scenes. The correct use of detail description plays an extremely important role in expressing characters, narrating events and reproducing the environment. Lee Joon once said, "There is no work of art without details. True detail description is an important means to shape characters and achieve typicality. " Therefore, in the article, in order to make the characters more vivid and the works more appealing, we should learn to describe the details. The purpose of description is to achieve vivid images, so that the writer can see the person as he is, and the scenery he sees can give people a real feeling just like in the scene.

Please write a detailed fragment according to your own experience and observation.

Six, write details need to pay attention to a few questions:

1, select typical details. The more detailed the description in the article, the better. Detail description should grasp typical details, but choose something that is representative, general and can reflect profound themes. Only in this way can it be more extensive and help to highlight the center of the article, thus leaving a deeper impression on people. For example, Lu Xun wrote several times in "Blessing" that Master Lu Si "frowned". This subtle change in facial expression profoundly exposed the reactionary stance and ugly soul of feudal gentlemen who hated widows and maintained old ethics.

2. Observe things carefully.

To make the description vivid, we should mobilize our senses and observe things very carefully in the process of observing things. Everyone has different personality characteristics, so everyone will express his personality in different ways when he speaks or does things. What we have to do is to observe carefully and then accumulate it as writing material. That's how people are described. When describing the scenery and objects in detail, we should grasp the characteristics and changes of the scenery.

3. The description of details should obey the needs of the performance center and strive for meaningful details.

Detail description is a way to see the big from the small. Although the details are light in weight, they are large in capacity. When we choose the details, we should start with the details, focus on the big picture, see the big picture from the small, and let the small details reflect people's ideological situation and social outlook. Lu Xun wrote in his novel Kong Yiji that Kong Yi first appeared and "paid a lot of money" when he bought wine. This detail shows Kong Yiji's face-saving, ostentatious, poor and pedantic personality as a low-level scholar, and reveals the persecution of people by the feudal system.

4. The detailed description must be typical and true.

The so-called truth means that the detailed description can accurately and vividly reflect the characteristics of people in real life. The so-called typicality refers to the details described, which are widely representative, and can reflect the general and the whole picture through individual and small things, and reveal the essence through phenomena. For example, there is a description in Zhao Shuli's "Untouchable Hands": "Round fingers and belly are like small rakes made of trees" and "both are like nails on half a cocoon". This meticulous description is both true and typical, highlighting the characteristics of its protagonist and showing the characteristics of the working people's strength and hard work. Another example is Zhu Ziqing's description of his father's struggling appearance and movements when he climbed onto the platform in Back, which highlighted his selfless love for me and touched every reader. His success lies in his careful observation and accurate expression of his father's behavior.

5. Carefully choose your words. In the description of details, we should choose the right words to get twice the result with half the effort, and even convey the spirit with one word.

6. Clever use of rhetoric. The use of figures of speech, such as metaphor, personification and exaggeration, can enhance the vividness of language, turn abstract into concrete, and turn intangible into tangible.

In short, although the details are very small, its role should not be underestimated. Good detail description can make the characters vivid and enhance the authenticity, vividness and appeal of the content. Detail description is a point in the scene, without which there is no scene; It is also a bead in the plot, without which the plot will not be coherent.