Write a composition according to Liu Xiang's injury.

Writing guidance of the proposition composition "Scenery Along the Way" and topic playback of excellent fans' inscriptions 18. There is such an advertisement: "Life is like a trip, what matters is not the destination, but the scenery along the way." Some people go straight to their destinations, ignoring the scenery along the way; Some people linger on the scenery along the way and forget the destination; Some people stop occasionally on the way, and the beautiful scenery makes him forget his fatigue and run to his destination better. Please write an article of not less than 800 words on the topic of "Scenery along the way". Requirements: ① self-selected angle; ② Self-determination; (3) Except for poetry, the style is not limited. Misunderstanding of examination 1. Examination questions 1. "Along the way" emphasizes the process and cannot be limited to a certain point, while some students ignore or misunderstand "along the way". For example, "he just lay on a bamboo chair, poured a cup of tea and looked at the scenery along the way." 2. Some students understand "scenery" as a natural "scenery" and then conceive around this "scenery", which is not bad, but the problem is that a large number of compositions are satisfied with vaguely describing the scenery they saw during their travels, without further expounding the philosophy and paying attention to the in-depth excavation of the theme of the article. For example, after describing the scenery, the article ends carelessly: "The scenery along the way is really beautiful!" Although some students go beyond the first level of writing and understand "landscape" as not only a natural and objective material existence, but also a symbol of humanistic spirit, they have not fully expressed this understanding. Many students use the examples of Li Bai, Tao Yuanming, Qu Yuan and Su Shi to expose their laziness in thinking and lack of innovative consciousness when writing about human landscapes. If this goes on, it is bound to form a "one thousand people" and "one size fits all" solution: "scenery along the way" can be understood as natural scenery, that is, its dictionary definition: scenery formed by mountains and rivers, flowers, trees, buildings and some natural phenomena (such as rain and snow) that can be enjoyed by people in a certain area. It can be understood as humanistic scenery, which refers to the beautiful and touching things that educate people's hearts in real life. This is a further extension of the "scenery along the way", such as the old couple helping each other and stumbling forward in the afterglow of the sunset; The image of a traffic policeman who perspires and directs traffic at a busy intersection ... can take the figurative meaning or symbolic meaning of "scenery along the way" to symbolize all the beautiful things encountered in life, such as the selfless care of relatives, the simple feelings of hometown people, the silent efforts of friends, or the spiritual wealth of improving people's moral and ideological level and helping people cultivate their morality, such as loyalty, patriotism and trustworthiness. Never give up, never give up, never give up, never stop pursuing and so on. At this level, we should pay special attention to a certain "image". This "image" should be concrete rather than abstract, and should be fixed as a picture or a shot, that is, people should be able to relate to the "landscape" and not deviate from the theme. As far as these three understandings are concerned, it is superficial to write "natural scenery" alone, and it is difficult to get high marks in such a composition. If the first article and the second article are combined, the article will have a certain depth and a certain sense of hierarchy. If the idea is located in the third understanding and can be implemented, it reflects the ideological nature of the work and the depth of students' understanding. So just from the idea, students might as well adopt the third idea. Second, the problem of material selection 1. The material collapses and the creativity is mediocre. Most students have a serious "crash" phenomenon in selecting materials, which is a very serious problem. A large number of compositions are written in senior three. Although life was boring, I failed in the exam. At this time, the teacher taught me, my parents talked to each other and my classmates encouraged me. After a long and serious persuasion (often the content in the introduction of the composition reappears), "I" became enlightened and suddenly realized. There are still many compositions that are "retro", without innovation and lack of the times. It will always be Qu Yuan, Li Bai, Su Dongpo, Tao Yuanming, Li Qingzhao and Xiang Yu. It's not that these materials are bad, but that they are too vulgar to think of new ideas. The first one who writes like this must be a good composition, but what would it be like if all the students in Qian Qian wrote like this? This material may get high marks, but if it remains inflexible, it will definitely suffer. 2. Improper materials, copy mechanically. Such as: "Sima Qian got rid of the negative scenery and had an optimistic attitude; Liu Xiang has experienced the loss of the Olympic Games and regained its success. Improper discussion and labeling. For example, "the meaning lies in the scenery along the way. Although Xiang Yu was defeated, he was brave and heroic, which made him immortal, although he did not become an emperor. Cao Cao was finally notorious for the dirty scenery along the way. "Or list one or two examples of people who moved China to fill in the number of words. There are also some examples of changing concepts, such as writing that successful people are successful because they pay attention to details and understand details as "scenery"; It is understood as "observing the scenery along the way and finally succeeding" by breaking down the target to reach the destination in the marathon. 3. Fabricate facts and feel false. For example, writing about running away from home and seeing the scenery outside the window, "He smiled". After returning home, "my dad gave him a slap in the face, and he didn't resent it, just smiled." "There will be a trip. There are pregnant women on the train, and everyone helps to find a doctor. The theme is old-fashioned, stiff and false. Solution: Choose materials and bring forth the new. From the students' point of view, we should learn to pay attention to life, society and the real people around us, and then extract them to form our own thoughts and express our views. We should extend the brush strokes to real life, instead of failing the exam, mom's milk tea and dad's inspiration, and don't get into the "old paper pile" to spoil the ancients. Innovation is a kind of consciousness first, and then a kind of courage. Dare to say what others have not said and write what others have not written, but don't make it up. The choice of materials should have a certain sense of the times and a fresh breath of life. From the teacher's point of view, we should guide students to change their ideas, be diligent in thinking, be good at observing society, be good at thinking and accumulating, and at the same time make use of their own resource advantages to provide students with more vivid materials and guide our students to the correct writing track. Third, the problem of material composition lacks details and is insipid. The article lacks material support and the content is empty. There is no description of the scenery throughout, just shouting slogans in vain. Or although there are materials in the article, most students still can't make full use of the materials, can't process the materials reasonably, can't make the materials "for our use", just stay at the level of listing or summarizing, and have no detailed description of the scene and meticulous carving of the image. In the process of sorting out the materials, we can't carry out or excavate them, can't embody them vividly, and can't explain the views we want to demonstrate through the materials, which leads to the embarrassing situation that the composition is still disgusting, or the "materials" and "ideas" of the article. Solution: As we know, articles cannot be without material. Especially argumentative essays, no matter how much content there is, will always be a dull face. It is hard to imagine that an argumentative essay full of lectures can win the favor of readers, but if the materials are not fully utilized, such an article will become very vain. Once our students realize this problem, they must seriously correct it and carefully understand the similarities and differences. They must make full use of the materials and fully embody the charm of the materials themselves. They should not only use materials roughly, but learn to process them finely. They should use materials reasonably according to the needs of the theme of the article. Only in this way can the article reflect its vividness and profundity and their classmates. This is the case with argumentative essays, especially narrative essays. Balzac said: "When all the endings are ready and all the plots are handled, only the details constitute the value of the work." When we have the material, we must learn "deep processing" to make the work look thick and plump. In order to solve this problem, teachers need to give corresponding guidance to students in time, not just pointing it out, but through certain training, let students realize the difference in effect before and after guidance. Make argumentative arguments typical and vivid, make reasoning fully in-depth, and show typical details and clear organization with sub-arguments; Make the narrative form a three-point and one-line sense of things (people). Interpret the topic into a story (life scene); Express an idea with a story; Embedding ideas in details. Fourth, structural problems In the structural form of the article, most students still adopt the plane structure mode of "scattered flowers on the water". Arranging the content on the same level is like scattering flowers on the water. Flowers are everywhere, although they are widely distributed, but they all float on the water, and not even one sinks to the bottom. For example, in this composition, some articles don't focus, students don't use their brains, just seek stability, and simply write two leads. Some students write about scenery, either a description of space scenery, a description of scenic spots or a list of time scenery. Day and night, spring, summer, autumn and winter, are like a running account. In this way, the whole content stays on the same thinking plane, which seems naive and superficial. Both examples and reasoning are only juxtaposed at the same level, which does not reflect the gradual progress between cases and paragraphs. Such an article can only be generalized, and can only stay on the surface of things, exposing the shallowness of students' understanding and the naivety of their thoughts. Solution strategy: the arrangement of ideas should be from shallow to deep. Any mature article has its own ideas, but when students arrange their own writing ideas, they should pay attention to making the article reflect the "vertical extension" of layering and thinking. What exactly should I do? Or, for example, the thinking arrangement of the article should be like a farmer digging a well. After choosing an address, he will dig in the same direction, digging deeper and deeper until the water is dug out, so that the handwriting can reflect a certain depth. Horizontal listing is the width of thinking, and two or three examples are enough. The vertical excavation is the depth of thinking, which reflects the opinions and talents of writers that people want to know most, and the structural form should be "seeking". ""is a norm and a basic principle that writing should and must follow. "Without rules, there would be no Fiona Fang"; "Living" is an artistic treatment, and it is the free play of the writer's personal aura, wisdom and creativity. Writing a composition is still the same as "three paragraphs", except that some students overdo it, and the whole article is a small paragraph in a few words. Neither of these structural forms is desirable. The former makes the article too heavy, too rigid and too old, which makes people feel depressed and bored, while the latter is too fragmented and flashy. The ideal structural form should be alternating long and short paragraphs, the beginning should not be too long to appear too big, the main content of the article should not be too simple, and the long paragraphs must be long, so that the article can appear heavy and substantial, and the end must be concise, powerful and memorable. Between the main paragraphs of the article, some small paragraphs can be interspersed to express opinions or transitions. Of course, this model is not static, and it can even change flexibly according to the stylistic characteristics and content theme of the article. V. Language problems 1. The characters' language is written and has no personality. The role played is a blow to the head, in order to get "me" out of the predicament and frustration. For example, "Mom saw him standing there and took the opportunity to guide:' Son, life is like a train. The scenery outside the window is constantly changing. It doesn't matter if you miss it or get too addicted. As long as you don't miss the right stop, do you want to be a sacrifice to the beautiful scenery on the way, or do you want to rally and pursue the set goals? Think for yourself. Another example: "My uncle listened to my complaint and said to me solemnly,' What matters is not the destination, but the scenery along the way. This is my favorite place to go, because I can forget worldly troubles, put aside the shackles of fame and fortune, calm my mind and tidy up my mood so as to better meet life. I send you four words: Give love to the scenery. In the later life, we must work hard to do it! "Character dialogue, efforts should be made to use the language that can appear in life, and the language of many characters in the composition is written too much, which is melodramatic. 2. The language is plain. Too much narrative, lack of lyricism and appeal; Argumentative language has no tension, poor materials, rough argument and unconvincing. Solution strategy: language expression should publicize personality. " Language is the carrier of culture, and language is the packaging of ideas. " Individualization of writing language is a higher requirement for students' composition. The writing language should be clear and clear first, and there is no obvious slip of the tongue. On this basis, students can try their best to hone their writing language according to their own actual situation, so that their compositions can reflect literary talent or color, be plain and simple, or be alert and profound. In short, we should strive to pursue our own characteristics and leave a deep impression on readers. Students should form a good habit, be good at discovering from other people's excellent works and be good at learning other people's languages. You must know that a good language will definitely form the highlights of the work, thus winning good results. Mo Wen, an excellent fan, blinded the scenery along the way. You are determined to climb that mountain called "Success", because it is said that the scenery at the top of that mountain is the most beautiful in the world. You have made full preparations and set off. After climbing for a while, you will find that this mountain really lives up to its reputation. You have never seen so much green. At first glance, it looks like an ocean. The path at the foot is looming in the grass. The breeze blew, mixed with the smell of grass and earth, bringing bursts of freshness. You hardly want to leave. After climbing for a while, the roadside scenery became more charming. The green color of a place has been replaced by colorful colors. All kinds of wild flowers sway slightly in the wind. Butterflies and bees are interspersed among them, raising their wings and shaking off the pollen on the ground. So, you are intoxicated, intoxicated in this colorful beauty, intoxicated in this charming fragrance. You leave the path and go deep into the sea of flowers, trying to enjoy the beautiful scenery. At the moment of turning around, the only way to the top of the mountain, the narrow path, disappeared into the flowers. So you can never reach the peak of success, and you can never enjoy the really beautiful scenery, because you are blinded by the scenery along the way. Don't let the scenery along the way get lost. Have you noticed that Fang Zhongyong, a poet of the Song Dynasty, was able to write poems at the age of five, and his talent was unparalleled, so he was known as a "prodigy". So, every month, I follow my father to visit my hometown, eat, drink and receive gifts, and "live happily." Famous poems have long forgotten how to write them. Finally, one day, this once proud talent dried up, leaving a legend that hurt Zhong Yong. Don't let the scenery along the way get lost. Didn't you see that there is Bill Gates today, and he is determined to develop soft. Even if you have money, you don't play with stocks and real estate, but are only interested in developing software. As a result, Microsoft Empire stands on the top of the world, rewriting human history, and thus becoming an eternal model for later generations. Life is a climb, a journey. Only by being sincere and firm can we achieve ultimate success. If you are fascinated by the scenery along the way too early, you will lose your goal, deviate from the track of life and fall into the abyss of failure. Only with firm will and hard climbing for the ultimate goal can we reach the "successful" mountain top and enjoy the most beautiful scenery. So, if you are a student, please remember: don't let the scenery along the way get lost. Only by studying hard can we lay a good foundation for our future life. Basketball, football and online games are not so painful and laborious, so we should taste them instead of indulging in them. If you cling to the complacency of a blocked shot, the joy of volley, and the pleasure of cutting down the boss, then your life will eventually leave hidden dangers. So, if you are an official, please remember: don't let the scenery along the way get lost. Only by serving the public and the people wholeheartedly can we become a good official and be immortal. Wine, sex, wealth and power are not like wearing intestinal poison and scraping bone steel knives. If you just want to be quick, then your final result will be immortal. So, no matter what kind of person you are, no matter what kind of ideal you have, please remember on the journey of life; Don't let the scenery along the way get lost. Care about the scenery along the way. Life is like a journey. What you care about is the scenery along the way and the mood of watching the scenery. This is my favorite slogan. A person's life is short. Some people have been busy all their lives, but in the end they lose too much because they ignore too much ... He is on a business trip and the train is crowded. Standing in the carriage, he thought: it's two hours' journey, and someone will get off one after another in the middle. Maybe he can grab a seat. He stood by the window side by side with an old man, feeling pressure from many sides from time to time. There are too many people. I wish I had a seat. So he asked the person next to him, "Where do you get off?" He said, "Next stop." He is very happy and ready to grab a seat at any time. Thirty minutes later, the train arrived at the station. Many people got off the bus, and the order suddenly became chaotic. He was just about to sit down when a strong man quickly pulled away and rushed to grab the seat. He was depressed and glared at him angrily, but he was helpless and had to continue standing. After a while, he heard a sigh in the noise, which was made by the old man. He still stared out of the window, smiling at his mouth. Looking down his eyes, there is a sparkling river with a small sail hanging on it. "The scenery outside the window is beautiful," said the old man. He said casually, "Yes!" Old man: "that field, that river, that mountain range is really beautiful!" " "He chuckled. The old man looked at him puzzled and asked, "Isn't it?" He said quickly, "Yes, yes." The old man seems to understand something: laugh at me for being pedantic. The old man was silent for a while and suddenly patted him on the shoulder very kindly: "Young man, everyone is fighting for seats, but no one pays attention to the scenery outside the window." It's really a pity. Do you have to go this way? Can't you enjoy the past all the way? " He was a little moved. The old man went on to say: "when I was young, I missed many bigger and better opportunities for what I had in front of me;" "Now, I don't pay attention to these, I just want to see the scenery farther away." He was stunned, silently admiring the scenery on the roadside. With the growth of age, people have less and less time to seek surprises and good things in life. They only care about status, wealth and power. Most people spend most of their time and energy on staying behind. Unfortunately, they have no leisure to see the roadside scenery. They are just busy getting to their destination. When they arrived at their destination, they found that the best thing had been missed by themselves. There is a couple who are busy doing business all day. After they have money, they still can't stop. After all, people's desires are endless. They bought a villa surrounded by the sea and hired a nanny to do housework for them, but they always go out early and come back late. Their nanny is like the owner of this house-after breakfast in the morning, she lies on the roof and enjoys the seaside scenery, takes a nap at noon, and drags her dog for a walk at night after dinner, but the real owner never really enjoys the seaside scenery for a moment because they are too tired. As soon as they got home, they went to sleep. All they could think about was money, and they couldn't stop. The process of life is like taking a train, and the train is the destination, from the starting point to the end point. However, some people bury themselves in reading, some play poker, some chat, some sleep, some enjoy the scenery along the way, and when they arrive at the terminal, everyone gets different results, some say it's too boring, some say it's too hard, and some say it's the scenery on the road. Obviously, those who gain the most and are in the happiest mood are those who look at the scenery along the way. Life is too short, why should you be busy with fame and fortune all your life and miss the beautiful scenery on the road? In fact, modern people don't have to live so tired. Why not leave some time for yourself to enjoy the surrounding scenery? Everything on the road of life will not be lost because of your worries, nor will it be realized because of your expectations. See how you appreciate it. Although life is ordinary, you can enjoy it with a good mood and bring your own splendid scenery! The scenery along the way is so long and beautiful. Don't walk too fast, slow down and look at the scenery along the way. "Why? What do you think? " "hmm? What? " "You, the third grade or so. Do you want to go to high school or college? " "Well, I'm used to listening at home, big brother. Can we pay taxes?" "Hey, I can't take you." Looking at my friend's serious expression when he was doing the problem, I had no choice but to laugh. "Brother, it's May. I'm going to Yangchun to see the scenery in March, alas!" I sighed, then picked up a pen and walked into the mathematical world full of logic and numbers. "The scenery along the way, hehe!" Unfortunately, I heard what my friend mumbled alone, and then my heart ached and I went back to solving the problem. The weather in July is just the summer vacation, and the burning sun shines on the students, which is so uncomfortable. "You don't know, I made another mistake. Finished, the score of 1 1 is gone. " In this humble middle school, there are voices everywhere. "These children can't say something else? The exam is over. " "You think everyone is just like you, doing nothing all day." "Did I?" "Yes" is three voices this time, and I suddenly fell silent. I turned my back and whispered, "The scenery along the way." A week before the start of the senior high school entrance examination, the school hasn't had a holiday yet, and everyone is busy taking pictures and signing yearbooks. I was lost in thought alone. Look through the yearbook and think. I can't help falling into that sadness. The figure of classmates fighting for three years always appears in front of me. Suddenly I saw my good friend's signature and words of concern, and my heart was warm. "Mao, take a picture!" "Coming" The wind blew through my place and set off a burst of thoughts. "Ha ha, it's the scenery along the way." I said to myself. On the end of the senior high school entrance examination, a group of our classmates went to get drunk. "What! I don't even drink wine. " I didn't say anything, just smiled. "How many people have envied your face when you were young ..." Everyone began to drink and swallow the bitterness and sadness in their hearts. I pulled my friend's corner and motioned them to go out. When I came to the hall, I suddenly said, "No matter where we go or what we do, we are all friends." Everyone was speechless, only the sound of tears and drinking crossed our faces. Today, we have been separated, but our hearts are still together. Because we are all guarding the scenery along the way. In fact, the scenery of life is not just these, it contains all aspects of us, and only when we pay attention can we find it. Modern people, don't worry, pay attention to the scenery along the way! The scenery along the way is always beautiful and we should cherish it. The mind comforts and the heart is steadfast, and the scenery also tells us.