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September 1 arrived as scheduled in the expectation of the students. The new school year has begun again, and XX primary school presents a peaceful atmosphere. At 9: 30 am, XX Primary School held a grand opening ceremony and flag-raising ceremony for the first semester of 2008-2009 with the theme of "Feel the Beijing Olympic Games and Carry Forward the National Spirit". The freshmen and new teachers of grade X in XX Primary School attended the opening ceremony. (It is redundant, deleted)

The opening ceremony (conference) kicked off under the auspices of the brigade counselor. The whole venue was solemn and solemn, and (the words used were too big to meet the scene description, deleted) was orderly. Facing the national flag raised in Ran Ran, the students stood upright (with a solemn team salute), and their love for the motherland and yearning for the new semester can be seen from their concern for the national flag. The national flag flutters in the wind, and the six children also strut!

At the meeting, President X summed up last year's harvest and praised a number of advanced deeds. He earnestly hopes that every X villain can firmly grasp every day of the new semester, write touching poems with his diligence and persistence, and paint the most magnificent rainbow in life with our successful brush! After that, President X, as the leader of XX Primary School, led all the teachers to solemnly swear under the national flag. Make your own promises. The captain also led all the students to take an oath, hoping to have new experiences and discoveries in the new semester.

When President X awarded prizes to ten classes that won the "Star Class" in the last issue, those smiling faces revealed pride, joy and excitement. Commending these excellent role models on the first day of school is to let students have updated prospects and goals in the new semester, which can make the learning flowers of our school bloom more and more brilliantly.

The opening ceremony marked the beginning of a new journey for X Primary School. I believe that every X villain has new goals and new gains in the new year, because everyone firmly believes that Liuzi is wonderful because of us, and we are more wonderful because of X!

Comments: The sentences are fluent and distinct, which can show a certain literary talent. However, the overall feeling is not like a composition describing the scene of the new semester, but more like a speech and a record of the opening ceremony, and the above-mentioned conference theme "Feel the Beijing Olympics and carry forward the national spirit" has not been fully reflected in the text. For example, as a composition, the description is relatively empty. We should increase the description of the mental outlook of teachers and students, rather than focusing on the content of the leaders' speeches.

Please forgive me for saying something inappropriate! Chinese teacher Chen