On the deficiency of Jin Yong's martial arts novels _2000 words

Grade: Senior One

Jin Yong's martial arts is a master. His works are all-encompassing, colorful and distinctive, putting the characters in a magnificent historical background and a specific cultural atmosphere. The words and deeds of the characters in the book are authentic, and the book involves poetry and songs, wine culture and tea culture, which makes people feel that China culture is profound. The language is concise and mellow, and the writing style is very China-like. When you read it, it has a long meaning. So, is Jin Yong's martial arts perfect? Yes! There are many more, which can be summarized as follows:

One: The struggle is long. Martial arts novels must be about the lives of a group of fighters and reflect the quality of fighters. The success or failure of fighters cannot escape the word "Wu". Wu is competitive, wins or loses, and decides life and death. A sword shines in Kyushu and is famous all over the world; One careless move, one's head is cut off. Jin Yong's description of martial arts fights, regardless of primary and secondary characters, does not hesitate to use pen and ink in the process of fighting, especially the fights between unrelated characters are also described in an orderly way, with a thousand words, and the details are elaborate but irrelevant, which makes people feel sloppy and not clean enough. We read The Water Margin, where Lu Ti governs the people and angrily beats Kansai Town, but the details of these three fists are wonderful, which fully embodies the quality and martial arts of Lu Da, enriches the characters governed by Lu Ti, makes readers feel comfortable and clap their hands. If the description of Jin Yong's martial arts is cut off, the plot will be more compact and exciting. [Learning Exchange Group | Learn happily with friends of the same grade all over the country] >>& gt Click to join]

Second, Jin Yong's novels are loosely structured, with unclear priorities and inappropriate details. The trilogy of shooting sculptures in Jin Yong's martial arts novels can be said to be the growth of three characters, Guo Jing, Yang Guo and Zhang Wuji. In particular, Zhang Wuji, the protagonist, narrated too much before his appearance, accounting for hundreds of thousands of words, which was suspected of being top-heavy. It would be better if the author led the protagonist to tell the story of the past by another master or in other ways. On the other hand, directed by Jing Wong, the film "The Dragon Slayer with Eternal Feelings" tells this long story in a concise way, which makes the audience quickly know the Jianghu situation before Zhang Wuji was born without affecting the development rhythm of the follow-up stories. It is very wonderful.

Three: There are too many characters in the book, and there are too many redundant characters: The story of "The Condor Heroes", the main line is the four captures of the little dragon girl, and the protagonist Yang Guo has a broken arm, taking chasing his wife as his own responsibility, and constantly experiences and grows into a hero in the pursuit. In the book, Li Mochou, a miserable mild mental patient, doesn't need to exist, because Lu Zhanyuan is unfaithful to her, her personality becomes violent and cruel, and she kills countless people. Finally, she sings and asks what the world is like in the raging fire, teaching people to die like a capital crime. Because of a failed love, she lived in resentment and pain. It can be said that the whole life is gloomy and failed, and there is no turning point and hope! So, what is the significance of her existence in the whole book? What do you want to express? What about the values and aesthetics brought to readers? Let's talk about the little dragon girl again. This book is called The Condor Heroes. The condor is Yang Guo, and the partner refers to the little dragon girl. Let's see what the little dragon girl has done. The main task is to escape. The reason for leaving is love, but it's actually ridiculous: for the first time, because Yang Guo refused to marry her! In a fit of pique, he ran away and disappeared under the nose of Yang Guo. The second time, Huang Rong told her that the apprentice's marriage to the master was a big obstacle to ethics and would be reviled, so she quietly left in the middle of the night! The third time, the Wu brothers fought with each other to get married. Yang Guo lied that he had an engagement and there was no need to fight. Unexpectedly, the lies made up by these bars were heard by passing dragons, and they were believed to be true without discrimination. They also secretly wished Yang Guo and Guo Fu happiness, and then quietly left. The fourth time: both Little Dragon Girl and Yang Guo were poisoned by love flowers, but the antidote was only enough to save one person's life. So the little dragon girl carved the words "See you in sixteen years" on the cliff, and then committed suicide by jumping off the cliff. She thought that Yang Guo would eat the antidote and live for the reunion with herself after 16 years. But the poison of love flower is not only the antidote of love flower poison, but also the nemesis of love flower poison discovered by master Tianzhu's disciples. The good news is that love spends a lot. The four escapes show that the little dragon girl doesn't trust her lover, her love is not firm, she doesn't know the cause and effect, she makes rash decisions, her sensibility is greater than rationality, and she has no ability to distinguish right from wrong. From the full text, the little dragon girl doesn't understand the world, has no ideal, no ambition, doesn't actively strive for love, and is indifferent to life and death, like a colleague's body. I think it would be better if the little dragon girl was removed and the novel was renamed Condor. And Guo Xiang, really gild the lily, embellish, satisfy the vanity of middle-aged greasy uncle. It's totally unnecessary.

Four: Jin Yong has the idea of advocating the supremacy of death, or regarding disability as beauty: Guo Jing and Huang Rong all died defending Xiangyang, Qiao Feng committed suicide, Yang Guo lost his arm, Di Yun lost his hand, Zhang Wuji was finally defeated, and Zhu Yuanzhang's death or disability infiltrated negative thoughts, half of which were caused by history, and the other half could not escape the declining pattern of sour literati. We should not be afraid of sacrifice, but we should try our best to avoid unnecessary sacrifice. Imagine, if you use other strategies to make Liao retreat, it is not at the expense of death. In this case, the painting style reversed and the theme immediately became positive. I think it is the thought and purpose of literary works to show reverence for life, praise tenacious vitality and make people full of confidence and hope in life.

Five: repeated poisoning. Yang Guo's erotic poison, Zhang Wuji's mysterious palm cold poison, Ling Huchong's poisoning, all the leading men in the book spend half their time fighting against the giant poison in the body, and the leading men often see through life at a young age and can detect life and death. Isn't it too Buddha? It is others who are nervous and worried about the protagonist, making suggestions and trying to save them. Next, seek medical advice and medicine, and the plot of adventure martial arts is similar, dragging its feet. One novel is enough for such a plot. Why three?

There are still some minor flaws, which are also worth mentioning, such as Qiao Feng and Duan Yu. Qiao Feng, an adopted orphan, wanders among beggars, but his personality is heroic. He has the demeanor of a king and is the leader of this group. Look at Duan Yu, the son of Dali King. As a prince, he has no royal extravagance, but he is sour, lacks self-confidence and looks like a poor scholar. The formation of a person's personality and temperament is closely related to the influence of family environment, education level and living environment. Moreover, the character and temperament of these two characters are really against common sense, at least Duan Yu should not be like this. Isn't it?

Having said so many questions in one breath, some people may scoff and say, you are so powerful, can you write? Dare not! My talent is to Jin Yong, and it can be said that fluorescence is to the bright moon. In fact, Mr. Jin Yong is also one of my favorite writers. If one day, someone tries to modify Jin Yong's works, I hope my superficial knowledge can help, and make Jin Yong's martial arts novels more perfect and become eternal classics like the four classic novels. Of course, you don't rule out others' reprimands: Do you want to attack Jin Yong and Rainbow for gaining eyeballs? Make it clear that I won't learn from Wang Shuo, at least I dare not jump out and deny other people's works before I finish reading them. Without investigation, there is no right to speak, which is the minimum attitude to be a man and learn!