Composition of action detail description of junior middle school characters

1. Ask for two junior high school compositions 1, with wonderful details and character movements. 2. Interpolation of language description and detail description ―― The golden key to make the characters alive is the soul of the article. However, the common characters in students' exercises are often one-sided, without personality and vividness, and the whole article looks dry, boring and lacking in appeal.

If you read these works carefully, you will find a common problem: you often just pursue writing something completely, ignoring vivid, concrete and nuanced details. Detail description has a wide range and various functions, but it mainly depicts characters and shapes their images.

Vivid details are like human cells. Without them, people will lose their lives. Without details, the characters lose their flesh and blood. Writer Lee Joon said: "In revealing a character's personality characteristics, a detail sometimes plays the same role as a plot or a scene."

As the saying goes, "the spirit is seen in the nuances." The creation of literary masters attaches great importance to the description of details.

In Lu Xun's The True Story of Ah Q, the first sentence of Ah Q was described in detail: "When it was time to draw a circle, the hand just shook with a pen, and the man spread the paper on the ground, and Ah Q fell down and tried to draw a circle. Afraid of being laughed at, he decided to draw a circle, but the damn pen was not only heavy, but also disobedient. It just shook and almost closed, but shrugged its shoulders and turned into a melon seed. "

The details of this behavior concretely, vividly and vividly reflect Ah Q's personality characteristics ―― he stuck to the "spiritual victory law" of self-deception until his death. When people read this detailed description, who can not think that Ah Q is ridiculous, pathetic and pitiful? How can we not "mourn its misfortune and anger it" and then think deeply about the national inferiority? Not only China writers, but also foreign writers.

Like Balzac's Eugénie? Grandet wrote that before Grandet died, when the priest sent the gold-plated cross to his lips to kiss the icon of Christ, "he made a terrible gesture to hold the cross in his hand, and this last effort killed him." Only this detail vividly depicts the ugly image of the insatiable and untiring miser. It is the description of details that makes the characters vivid and vivid. The characters are vivid, the whole article is full of vitality and strong appeal.

Of course, not all the details of life are valuable, and it is not just to write "fine". A good detail description must be useful, true and typical.

It must express the mental outlook of the characters and deepen the theme of the article. It must conform to the personality characteristics of the characters and the reality of real life, and should best highlight the personality characteristics of the characters. Where do the details come from? Literature comes from life, and details are in colorful life.

Be a conscientious person in life and always pay attention to the people and things around you, especially the objects you describe. On the streets of Shaoxing, Xianheng Hotel, Lu Xun concentrated on observing short-sleeved gangs and long-sleeved guests before "painting the soul of the silent".

In the dark coffee room in Dublin, Joyce coldly looked at the wandering * * *, liars, mental patients, beggars and rich people, brewing Ulysses that shocked the world. Throughout the ages, great writers have always devoted their lives to catching people and things that make the soul tremble and casting them into chapters that will last forever.

Capture the details, use the details, make this golden key work for you, and make your article shine! I was lucky enough to describe my composition to my teacher, because I met her, my third-grade class teacher. As for me, I am 1 a naughty boy.

Don't underestimate me. At home, I am "1". I said 1, and no one dared to say 2. In the face of my unreasonable troubles, my parents always laugh and cry. I am a famous troublemaker at school, not to mention that I am a "frequent visitor" in the teacher's office, and even my parents are often invited for this.

At this symposium of teachers, parents and students, I "accepted with an open mind and resolutely refused to change" in the face of their teaching. I heard that the head teacher who has been with us for two years has been transferred, so I want to know what the head teacher of 1 will look like in the new school year. A very strict old man? Or a young and energetic young man? Or ... I can't wait to know the result.

School has finally started. On the day of 1 of the new school year, she-about 1.55 meters tall, wearing a pink suit and carrying 1 file, came to the classroom happily. My classmates told me that this was our new head teacher, and I continued to play on the floor at the door without blinking.

"Oh, it turned out to be a little girl, and this time the story of" cat "and" mouse "can be staged again," I whispered. After a few steps, she came up to me and said, "You must be Su Shibin from Class 3. You are in such a hurry to welcome the teacher! " I'm surprised-I haven't had a class yet. How did she know me? At the same time, I am complacent. I used to be famous. Even the new teacher knows me.

After introducing herself 1 times in the classroom, she quickly took us into the 1 Chinese class in the new school year. After listening to 1 for a while, I gradually found her class interesting, knowledgeable, humorous, lively and vivid.

This kind of class makes people relaxed and happy. For the time of 1, it feels like listening to the teacher. In the next Chinese class, I became more and more serious and immersed in it.

The Unit 1 mock exam arrived, but when 1 got the test paper, your mind was blank, because the foundation was too poor, you might not know it. I was the last 1 in every exam before. It's time to hand in your paper. My thesis is almost blank.

What shall we do? The teacher is very concerned about me, and I 1 failed the exam. Suddenly, my mind flashed 1: Today, it's my turn to be on duty in the teacher's office. I can take advantage of the teacher's off work ... The test paper was handed out and I got 90 points. At the bottom of the test paper, I saw the red word 1: "Good job! The teacher is really happy for you, come on! " This is the 1 time that I have been praised by my teacher. I have 1 satisfaction in my heart, but at the same time my heart is pounding, which makes me feel ashamed.

I don't know if I did something wrong, if I have a ghost in my heart, or what. I think the teacher's eyes in that class are 1, as if he knew something. After returning home, it made me uneasy.

The next day,

2. The detailed description should include the elements of action description. A word in grade three is the soul of the article, but the common words in students' exercises are often one-sided, without personality and vividness. The whole article looks boring and lacks appeal.

If you read these works carefully, you will find a common problem: you often just pursue writing something completely, ignoring vivid, concrete and nuanced details. Detail description has a wide range and various functions, but it mainly depicts characters and shapes their images.

Vivid details are like human cells. Without them, people will lose their lives. Without details, the characters lose their flesh and blood. Writer Lee Joon said: "In revealing a character's personality characteristics, a detail sometimes plays the same role as a plot or a scene."

As the saying goes, "the spirit is seen in the nuances."

3. Composition 1 describing the details of human actions. Childhood: When I was a child, I was infatuated with watermelon. Now that I'm grown up, sometimes I really miss that chilling feeling.

Street stalls or melon shadows on the screen come into view, and the moment when I ate melons in my childhood reappears in front of my eyes: in summer, the brilliance of the rest of the day sinks into a corner of the sky, and the summer heat gradually disappears. Under the blowing of the evening breeze, people's spirit is particularly comfortable.

At this time, the fragrance of watermelon filled the streets, sometimes thick and sometimes light, as if nothing had happened. I (about five or six years old) put my arms around my knees and squatted on a small bench like a cat catching a mouse. My small black eyes glanced at the watermelon spinning up and down in the water.

Across the water, the sweat on my face has already dried up, and "Qianchuan" hangs like a waterfall. Mosquitoes "swim around" in their ears and don't care.

Under a bright smiling face, there is an expectant heart waiting-My Sweetie in a melon seed shell. Until the watermelon was cut into pieces: I saw watermelon seeds embedded in red melon meat like black pearls; The melon meat is a little cold; Melon juice flows down the mirror-like melon surface, one drop, two drops; The texture on the surface of melon is like the fine lines on the surface of painted porcelain ... The happiest moment is that the iced watermelon is held in your hand, and it seems that there is a cold current floating back and forth all over your body.

2. The fragrant mud flies yellow, the northwest wind whistles, and the residual snow rolls on the road. Although it is early spring, the weather is still very cold.

She, leaning against a poplar tree at the school gate, was as motionless as snow sculpture. The sudden ringing of the bell.

Her dim eyes sparkled with longing. A group of children, singing, walked out of the school gate without her son; Another group of children talked and laughed and set foot on the road without their son ... The figure was sparse, scattered and gone.

The creaking iron gate locked the silent campus. She was dizzy and could hardly stand up. She stumbled over and held her hands tightly on the iron fence.

"For what?" An old man in a message came out with a democratic face. "bright! My little light! " Like breathing, like crying.

"School is over." "Know the way ..." She murmured in a low voice with glassy eyes, lowered her head feebly, slowly released her hand, and took out a candy wrapped tightly with body temperature from the pocket of a long-breasted cotton-padded jacket: "Uncle, please ... give it to the child."

"What's your name?" "Wang Xiaoliang." "What grade and class?" "Today, just after my eighth birthday."

"I asked what grade and class." The old man is getting impatient.

"Oh ... maybe ..." She shook her head again. The old man looked at the neurotic woman strangely. "Who the hell are you?" What he answered was the tears in his eyes and the back that hobbled away.

The old man sighed in confusion and seemed to understand something. In the afternoon, this bag of candy finally reached Wang Xiaoliang in Class Two, Grade Two.

The child was very surprised. I haven't tasted this favorite toffee for a long time. His little hand rubbed his clothes back and forth, thought about it, and respectfully sent one to each child, two to his good friends and five to his teacher.

"Eat!" He shouted and jumped happily, even throwing off the prostitute with his mouth open. The students shared the joy with him in the laughter of hip-hop. Only the teacher quietly turned around ... After school, Xiao Liang was still immersed in joy and skipped home.

Suddenly, he stopped and felt the candy left in his pocket, and a sense of fear came upon him. He seemed to see it again: now mother raised her slender eyebrows and whispered something in her father's ear. Dad grabbed a stick and came up to him angrily.

He looked blankly, not knowing what to do. He patted his pocket hard, but it was bulging at first sight.

He lowered his head, sucked his fingers, thought for a long time, and looked around. He quickly buried the sugar in the snowdrift by the side of the road and specially inserted a small stick. Xiao Liang slept soundly and sweetly that night.

He dreamed that his old mother came back with a smile, and now her mother is hanging her head and leaving. I'm so happy. Next day, Xiao got up early.

As usual, he emptied and rinsed the bedpans of the whole family first, then washed rice, added water, poked fire, sat in the pan, and then slipped out with a cold steamed bread on his back. He wants to digest his candy quickly.

I don't want to. Overnight, the ground temperature rose, the ice and snow melted, syrup and snow water mixed together and penetrated into the earth. On the wet ground, there are some crumpled candy paper and small sticks as marks.

Xiao Liang blinked and couldn't help rolling down tears. He squatted on the ground sadly and looked blankly.

After a while, I couldn't help reaching out my chapped little finger, picking up some dirt and putting it on the tip of my tongue-he smiled again: that dirt, My Sweetie's. Summarize several common detail descriptions: (1) portrait detail description, that is, portrait detail description.

For example, in Daddy's Caregiver, the portrait of the patient is a detail. It is this detail that drives the development of the plot.

(2) Description of language details, that is, a detailed description of the typical language of characters. For example, in "Deer Fetus Hitting Kansai Town", after Lu Da killed Kansai Town, he faked his death. This is a language detail, which shows Lu Da's bold and refined character, courage and wit.

(3) action detail description, that is, a thorough and detailed description of the typical actions of the characters. For example, in the passage about Lu Da borrowing money to help Jin Lao's father and daughter in the boxing town of Lu Tiha, the verbs used vividly show the different personality characteristics of the three men.

(4) the detailed description of psychological activities, that is, the detailed description of the psychological activities of the characters. For example, in the article "Daddy's Caregiver", the description of young Sisillo's psychological activities after seeing "Daddy" seriously ill can well show the excellent quality of caring for his parents.

(5) Detailed description of expression changes, that is, a detailed description of the process of expression changes of characters. In the article Seven Matches, the description of the expression change after the unknown soldier handed the match to Lu Jinyong is a detail worth savoring.

(6) Description of clothing details, that is, detailed description of characters' clothing. It is necessary to see the professional characteristics of this person through the description of clothing, and it is also possible to see the personality characteristics other than professional characteristics. This is a good description of clothing details.

(7) a detailed description of things, that is, a detailed description of the development and change process of things. For example, in.

4. Ask for a short article about the detailed description of the characters' actions. When I was a child, I was crazy about watermelon. Now that I'm grown up, sometimes I really miss that chilling feeling. Street stalls or melon shadows on the screen came into view, and the moment when I ate melons in my childhood came back to my mind:

In summer, the glory of the remaining days sinks into the horizon, and the summer heat gradually disappears. Under the blowing of the evening breeze, people's spirit is particularly comfortable. At this time, the fragrance of watermelon filled the streets, sometimes thick and sometimes light, as if nothing had happened. I (about five or six years old) put my arms around my knees and squatted on a small bench like a cat catching a mouse. My small black eyes glanced at the watermelon spinning up and down in the water. Across the water, the sweat on my face has already dried up, and "Qianchuan" hangs like a waterfall. Mosquitoes "swim around" in their ears and don't care. Under a bright smiling face, there is an expectant heart waiting-My Sweetie in a melon seed shell.

Until the watermelon was cut into pieces: I saw watermelon seeds embedded in red melon meat like black pearls; The melon meat is a little cold; Melon juice flows down the mirror-like melon surface, one drop, two drops; The texture on the surface of melon is like the fine lines on the surface of painted porcelain. ...

The happiest moment is holding an iced watermelon in your hand, and it seems that there is a cold current floating back and forth all over your body.

This should be what you want, thank you!

The 5.500-word composition describes the action details of the characters, my cousin.

I have a naive, lovely, intelligent and lively cousin. He has a pair of big watery eyes, and when he thinks, his black eyes turn straight in his eyes. Cousin can show a pair of white and neat little teeth when she smiles, which is very interesting. I like him very much.

My cousin lives in grandma's house. Once, he told his grandmother that he liked Xiaohua Mall. Grandma loves her cousin and listens to him. He asked me to watch my cousin and buy Xiaohua Mall on the street. Grandma bought a lively and beautiful Xiaohua Mall. My cousin jumped for joy when he saw the lively and lovely Xiaohua Mall, so he ran to grandma's side, played with the lovely Xiaohua Mall, stroked it gently, and hummed beautiful Xiaohua Mall songs in his mouth. Then Xiaohua Mall pawed at his cousin's pants. Grandpa saw it, picked up Xiaohua Mall and threw it away. My cousin burst into tears when he saw it. He said, "Grandpa is bad, but Xiaohua Mall is not sensible. If you want to educate him, how can you throw him away If I am not sensible, will you abandon me? You see how pathetic! " Everyone laughed. Grandpa quickly picked up Xiaohua Mall and said to his cousin, "Yes, the kitten is not sensible. My brother will educate it!"

Another time, my cousin was playing in the house. He didn't listen to his grandmother and insisted on playing with his bike. As a result, he accidentally overturned his bike and pinned his finger. He quickly broke his finger and burst into tears. At this moment, grandma heard crying and ran out of the room. Seeing this scene, she was so angry and funny that she ignored him. He stopped crying for a while and peeked through his fingers to see if grandma paid attention to him. He found that grandma ignored him and went to her to laugh.

How interesting and lovely my cousin is! I like him very much.

6. Details of the action fragment 1. Xiao Yan rolled up his sleeves and rolled up his trouser legs. She moved slowly in the stream, raised her left foot slightly, took a small step forward, and dragged her right foot forward slowly, as if wearing a thousand-pound shoe. She twisted her hat, hunched her back, lowered her head, narrowed her eyes, and her hands seemed to be holding something. At this time, she stopped, stopped looking around, stared at a place on the right, and suddenly reached into the water with a small fish in her hand.

She picked up chopsticks, reached for brightly colored dishes, gently picked up a piece, put her left hand under the chopsticks, and followed them carefully. The veins stood out suddenly, and the veins stood out for a while. She put the dish in her mouth carefully and tasted it carefully.

Grandma stretched out her right foot and slipped into the shoe. Her muscular hands clung to the door frame and gently lifted her left foot. The tight foot is carefully inserted into the shoe mouth, and then plunged into it. Then she stomped a few times to make her feet comfortable and went out contentedly.

4, near, closer, the team leader finally came to his side, like a Taishan standing in front of him, shouting: "Hand in homework, hand in homework!" He smiled "hey hey", his expression was so funny and mysterious. Suddenly, he plunged into it, broke away from the leader's arm like a slippery loach, and his feet ran away like oil.

There is an old woman at the crossroads, with a slight hunchback and a fat figure, walking hard on the empty road with an umbrella. The wind came at me with heavy rain. She bent forward hard, grabbed the umbrella, stepped back half a step and staggered forward.

6. The young man ran well, running at a constant speed from the beginning. He ran with his head held high like a pony: his stride was symmetrical, his stride frequency was compact, his pedaling was strong, and his waist was relaxed-the whole movement was elegant and elastic.

7. Xuan Shi's steps are even, his arms swing back and forth, and his steps are getting faster and faster. He leans forward as if he were going to fall, struggling to run forward quickly. At the end of the race, she held her head high and stood out, and finally won the first prize.

8. In the first winter training of Lang Ping's volleyball career, the coaches began to give Lang Ping a "small stove". Long-distance running-Lang Ping ran round and round the 400-meter track ... his head was swollen, his chest ached and his legs could not be lifted. Stop? Don't! The brain gives clear instructions and moves on ... Sweat has wet the hair into locks, and the sweat flows from the forehead to the mouth, which is bitter and astringent. How I want to lie on the runway at once and stretch my limbs to relax! Suddenly, a strange smile climbed up the corner of her mouth-she suddenly remembered that when she was a child, she always looked forward to tasting the taste of not jumping again, and now she really tasted it, bitter and astringent.

7. About junior high school students reading, the narrative composition describing the details of the action is 400 words, not the details of love.

Scene 1: When my mother came with a pole, my daughter took two buckets of water from the well.

Daughter (puzzled): Mom, didn't you say you would carry it with a stick? How do you hold the pole?

Mother: I'll get it back.

Daughter (walks up to her mother and grabs the pole): How much are those two buckets of water? Are you tired?

Mother (smiling): Nothing, I can provoke.

Daughter (carrying a pole): I'll go back and get a stick. Please wait here first.

Mother: Do you think this child is in trouble ... (My daughter brought a stick and gave it to her mother when she was carrying water. )

Mother: Please raise the stick to your side. My side is too long.

Daughter: Never mind, I can lift it. Mother saw her daughter motionless, so she pulled the bucket to her side.

Daughter (a little unhappy): Mom, are you tired after a day's work?

Mom (smiling): I'm used to it, not tired!

Mother (asked with concern): Are you tired? Why don't you have a rest?

Daughter: Mom, I'm not tired. Are you tired?

Mother: I'm not tired.

Daughter: Then let's hurry! My father and my brother are still starving!

Mother: Then hurry up. You can cook later, and I'll get a bucket of water.

Daughter: Really, I'll get the water. You have a rest first.

Act II (While eating, my brother is serving the first bowl of rice. )

Brother: (hands the first bowl of rice to Dad) Those who work eat first!

Dad: (laughs) Don't eat if you don't cook?

Daughter: (adding a piece of meat to mother) Mom, why don't you eat meat? Eat more. You have lost weight this year.

Mom (laughing): I don't like meat. It's too greasy. Look, your brother is as thin as a monkey. Only when you eat well can you have the strength to study.

Brother (looking at Dad): Dad, work is the most important thing, and Dad makes up for it.

Dad (seeing his daughter): Lei Lei is about to take the senior high school entrance examination, and his study task is the heaviest. He doesn't usually eat well. I'll make it up for you and get a good grade in the exam. (He puts it in his daughter's bowl)

Daughter (blocking dad's meat): Dad, you'd better eat! Too greasy food will cause acne.

Dad (laughs): You really brag. Is this a piece of lean meat?

Daughter: I don't eat lean meat either.

8. The detailed description should include the elements of action description. A word in grade three is the soul of the article. The common characters in students' exercises are often thousands of people, which are neither personalized nor vivid. The whole article is boring and lacks appeal. If you read these works carefully, you will find a common problem: you often just pursue writing something completely, ignoring vivid, concrete and nuanced details.

Detail description has a wide range and various functions, but it mainly depicts characters and shapes their images. Vivid details are like human cells. Without them, people will lose their lives. Without details, the characters lose their flesh and blood. Writer Lee Joon said: "In revealing a character's personality characteristics, a detail sometimes plays the same role as a plot or a scene." As the saying goes, "the spirit is seen in the nuances."