900 words in senior two composition: feel the happiness of autumn.

Composition title: Feel the happiness of autumn.

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This composition is about 900 words in Grade Two. The title is "Feel the Joy of Autumn". Welcome to contribute enthusiastically. In autumn, the sky is crisp and spotless; Light clouds, white as snow, like milk. In such an autumn with red leaves and high clouds, the school organized all our teachers and students to go to the seaside park and stadium lawn for an autumn outing. On Friday morning, I came to school and found my classmates talking happily about today's autumn outing, wondering what activities they would do during the autumn outing. At half past eight, we set off. Along the way, the students talked and laughed and were full of enthusiasm. Soon, we reached the seaside park. After a short rest, we came to Auchan, the biggest supermarket in Putuo. Auchan supermarket Donggang store is a large-scale comprehensive supermarket, with more than 20 thousand kinds of goods in five categories: household appliances, textiles, department stores, fresh food and mass consumer goods. Advanced management concept, beautiful and comfortable shopping environment and cheap products have attracted many customers and become the best large supermarket in our region. When we walked into the supermarket, a dazzling array of goods came into view. We push the shopping cart to the supermarket. The colorful goods in Auchan supermarket dazzled us and we didn't know what to buy. We shopped and watched again and again, and finally got something. I bought a bag of bread, a bottle of drinks, four bags of "Cantonese buns" and a bag of sausages, which only cost more than ten yuan. And other students, some bought roast chicken, some bought chocolate bars ... really colorful!

After shopping spree, we went to the lawn of Donggang Gymnasium. On the big lawn, we found a cool place to rest, ate and talked, and told some jokes. On the way to the big lawn, we also had a paper airplane competition. Lu Taihang of our class won the first place because he stayed in the air for the longest time. It's time to go back to school. Under the teacher's repeated urging, we reluctantly left the stadium lawn and returned to school. Yang Tingyu, a famous teacher in Class 6 (1), comments: This essay by the little author describes the process of organizing an autumn outing in the school. The author first tells the time and place of the autumn outing, and the happiness and excitement of the students when they participate in the activities. Then, according to the order of autumn tour, it tells the scenes of resting in seaside park, shopping in supermarket, resting and eating on the lawn of Donggang Gymnasium, and paper airplane competition. This composition is well organized. The title of the composition is "Feel the Happiness of Autumn", but the author focuses on the supermarket shopping link in the article, and other links that can "feel the happiness of autumn" are sketched or brushed aside, so the center of the composition is not highlighted, and the author needs to pay attention to the selection of materials when writing. The metaphor of "the clouds are light and the wind is light, as white as snow and as milk" is inappropriate. Although the colors of "cloud" and "milk" are similar, milk is liquid, without the elegant feeling of clouds. It would be more appropriate to use "just picked cotton" instead. "The sky is high and the clouds are thick" should be "the sky is high and the clouds are light". "Someone bought a chocolate bar ... it's really colorful!

The word "colorful" in this sentence is not accurate enough. "I can tell a few more jokes" should be "Sometimes I can tell a few jokes". (Xue Le China Special Teacher: Teacher Rodina) 2009-11-13 7: 32: 00.