How to write a transfer email?

The template for e-mail transmission is as follows:

Fan Wenyi:

Dear Teacher xx:

Hello! Thank you for checking this email in your busy schedule. My name is xx, and I am a senior majoring in xx in xx Department of xx University. I applied for xx major in xx University, and want to transfer to your university for postgraduate study. My initial test scores are xx, English xx, politics xx, specialized course XX, specialized course XX. Let me introduce you to my basic situation.

During my undergraduate course, I passed CET-4 and CET-6 at one time, with the scores of XX and XX, respectively. I passed Computer Level II C Language Examination, and won scholarships and "XXXX" titles/awards for three consecutive years. During my undergraduate study, I gradually became interested in XX (teacher major), and the wonderful XX fascinated me and made me very eager for further study.

The research on XX (my tutor's research field) has always been a hot topic in science, and your research direction is even more unique. XX (professional field) is respected because it benefits mankind. And your research direction reflects this. This makes me hope to be one of your students and realize my media dream.

I know I still have many shortcomings to become your graduate student. But I believe that diligence can make up for it. If I am lucky enough to be your graduate student, I will study harder with full enthusiasm and serious attitude. Thank you again for checking this email in your busy schedule and look forward to your reply.

Hereby, pay tribute!

Student: XXX

X month x day, 2023

Fan Wener:

Dear Teacher XX:

Hello!

I'm sorry to bother you. Thank you very much for taking time out of your busy schedule to read this letter of mine.

I am XX, majoring in XX from XX University. I took the national postgraduate examination in 2020 and applied for XX University. My initial test score is XX, and my total score is XX.

Through the understanding from the network and the seniors, I am very interested in your XX major, especially your research field is XX, which is also a field I am very yearning for and interested in.

Moreover, you are quite accomplished in this field. You have published many representative papers in domestic and foreign journals, won many patents and awards, and made outstanding contributions to the industry, so students very much hope to follow you. If I am lucky enough to be transferred to your school for further study, I will definitely redouble my efforts and never live up to your expectations.

During my undergraduate study, I have been working hard and have always been enthusiastic about the new communication major. He won the first-class scholarship with excellent academic performance in our college every year, and also won the national inspirational scholarship and the national scholarship. And actively participated in the internship activities of XXX TV station and XXXX newspaper, and published more than XXX manuscripts.

Outside the major, I have a wide range of hobbies, such as XXXXX. The major is XXXXX. Also actively participate in various social practice activities, once joined the volunteer association and helped XXXXX.

Students sincerely ask the teacher to let me follow you for further study and grow into a perfect person with both ability and political integrity under your guidance. Thank you again for taking the time to read my recommendation letter. I look forward to your reply. Enclosed is your resume.

Finally, I wish the teacher good health and all the best.

Hereby, pay tribute!

Student: XXX

X month x day, 2023

Fan Wensan:

Dear Teacher XX:

Hello! I'm sorry to bother you. First, thank you for taking the time to read my letter. I am XX, (gender) XX, (age) XX, from XX province, and now I am a senior at XX University. I got your email address from XX website. I took part in this year's national postgraduate examination, and applied for XX major in XX University, XX political theory, XX foreign language, XX business 1 (name), XX business 2 (name), with a total score of XX.

I looked up the relevant information of your school on the internet and read the articles and scientific research projects published by my tutor. I like your good reputation and am very interested in research topics, so I hope to transfer to your XX major to study for a master's degree. I believe that through the training of teachers and my own efforts, I will be able to complete the study and research tasks during my master's degree, become a more useful person to society, and contribute my own light and heat to the research of communication.

My undergraduate major grade point is XX, and I have won XXX, XXX, XXX and other awards. And participated in the XXXX internship. My major is XXX. I am actively preparing for the second interview, especially applying to your school in advance. If there is any balance adjustment, I hope the teacher can consider it. Please let me know if the conditions can be met. I would be very grateful. Thank you again for taking time out of your busy schedule to read my letter. I sincerely wish you good health and smooth work!

Hereby, pay tribute!

Student: XXX

X month x day, 2020